I am here
contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from Judy Couch
This poem rhymes well and has good rhythm. I especially like the first stanza:
No words to soothe
so I won't even try,
But I'll hold you close
and together we'll cry.
Probably the best way to comfort is to just listen and cry with the person. You told it well.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
This poem rhymes well and has good rhythm. I especially like the first stanza:
No words to soothe
so I won't even try,
But I'll hold you close
and together we'll cry.
Probably the best way to comfort is to just listen and cry with the person. You told it well.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thanks for the insightful review Judy. I agree, in these times, people feel that they have to talk, and sometimes it is better to just... be, cheers, j
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
A good entry into the Empathy with Grief contest. Good rhyming and flow throughout the work. Good luck in the contest.
God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
A good entry into the Empathy with Grief contest. Good rhyming and flow throughout the work. Good luck in the contest.
God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thanks for the encouraging review Susanne, sometimes saying nothing is the greatest comfort, cheers, j
Comment from RodG
I hope you won't be offended, but you might try selling this verse to Hallmark or another greeting card company as the sentiments expressed are beautiful and would appeal to a universal audience. Just enough words and very well chosen.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
I hope you won't be offended, but you might try selling this verse to Hallmark or another greeting card company as the sentiments expressed are beautiful and would appeal to a universal audience. Just enough words and very well chosen.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Aww thanks for the lovely compliment and review. I would love to hook up with angelheart and do e cards with a modern spin. Life has changed so much in just the past 20 years and time for new messages, cheers, j
Comment from William Ross
Very nice, good job on the prompt well written poem with good rhyming and great flow on grief, love in our hearts grief can't touch. Good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
Very nice, good job on the prompt well written poem with good rhyming and great flow on grief, love in our hearts grief can't touch. Good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 07-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Thanks for the review. Sometimes it is better to just say nothing when someone is grieving. Cheers, j