Comment from Sasha

Exceptional

I've only read a few Quinzaine Poems and this is the best by far. Super job with this and excellent entry for this contest. I a sure this is a top contender.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016

sure hope so!! thank you sasha :-)

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

Interesting query and how the line break occurs so that the question "can you hear my words" seems to have a simple answer--"yes" and then the twist -- "unspoken" makes one ponder times when others have tried to express themselves but their messages weren't full understood. Very effective question posed that fits both this poem and life in general.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016

thank you mvb :-)

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This follows the form well and should be a strong entry in the contest. It describes poetry or and other form of writing and what the writer wants his or her/his words to to.

Good luck and keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016

sure hope so LOL! thank you dragon :-)

reply by dragonpoet on 08-Jul-2016

You're welcome.

dp

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Huh. I honestly think this is particularly brilliant. Yes, if you paint with words your thoughts become visible. I 'hear' them, 'see' them, FEEL them when you weave as you have done with this little gem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016

cool! thank you dawn :-)

reply by Dawn Munro on 08-Jul-2016

You're very welcome.

Comment from An Awakened Heart

Excellent

Wow. Nicely done. So few words, but speaks volumes.

I like reading between the lines. I like the way you help the reader feel more that what is heard. You invite the reader to feel emotion.

Thank you for posting.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016

thank you heart :-)

Comment from brownies

Excellent

You nailed it on the requirements and posed a great question to your statement. I enjoyed the contradiction of the statement and the question...If the conversation comes through the ink, then how can the other person hear what is unspoken? Nicely done.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016

thank you brownie :-)

Comment from Gianinas

Excellent

Yes, I can hear the words unspoken.
I see the black of the picture-like background,
I think of white noise and lots of poise,
I read the words and look back,
Beautiful choice!

Gianina

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016

thank you glanina :-)

Comment from enitsalemap

Excellent

This is the crux of the writing process. Will I be able to communicate in few words what I wish the world to know? You accomplished in 15 syllables what whole books have been unable to do. Bravo

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016

thank you enit :)

reply by enitsalemap on 07-Jul-2016

you are welcome

Comment from Ginger Banks

Exceptional

Yes, I can, so very deep! This poem is pretty cool, I love it when poems speaks volumes without using specific words of description, but rather implying meaning, using emotion and feeling. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016

thank you ginger :-)

reply by Ginger Banks on 07-Jul-2016

You're most welcome.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

I think you met the requirement of the quinzaine poem beautifully. Excellent statement and questions. Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016

thank you janet :-)