To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Truth or Bare"Poems by Michael
33 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Dalhmer, Bundy, Bin Laden, Hitler!"
"These are a Few.
"OF MY FAVORITE THINGS! "
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Slay Bells that cash in on Hash in a Rush..
Ful trip..isGb bn b
"In on what the fuck!"
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Attila the Hun..
"AT YOU HOME YET?
SADISTS THAT DANCE AROUND BLOODIFIED FIRES..
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,"Of delight roasting Marsh Mellow Hash...
"Run to the drug store for more..
"Than one moment left to relieve my pain...
"Need another shot of H in My Swollen vein!"
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"Aunty is my calamity as I welcome you all to my Hel!
"UNDER MY SPELL?
"Binding rope wrapped securly,ariund my...
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"What the Heck!"
"Lost My way as I tried si,hard to save the day but..
"Heavenly Father means alot more than you as you ba32sk by "The River of No Regrets..
Can You figure out whom,I might be?
Rhymes with 'WAITING' TO,HEAR FROM YOU !
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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"Dalhmer, Bundy, Bin Laden, Hitler!"
"These are a Few.
"OF MY FAVORITE THINGS! "
,
Slay Bells that cash in on Hash in a Rush..
Ful trip..isGb bn b
"In on what the fuck!"
...
Attila the Hun..
"AT YOU HOME YET?
SADISTS THAT DANCE AROUND BLOODIFIED FIRES..
************************,?
,"Of delight roasting Marsh Mellow Hash...
"Run to the drug store for more..
"Than one moment left to relieve my pain...
"Need another shot of H in My Swollen vein!"
...
"Aunty is my calamity as I welcome you all to my Hel!
"UNDER MY SPELL?
"Binding rope wrapped securly,ariund my...
...
"What the Heck!"
"Lost My way as I tried si,hard to save the day but..
"Heavenly Father means alot more than you as you ba32sk by "The River of No Regrets..
Can You figure out whom,I might be?
Rhymes with 'WAITING' TO,HEAR FROM YOU !
@@##
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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well near as I can figure......skate....in full galore of soft pink saffron and pure white tights...I'm so pretty...-smile- so pretty, so pretty am iiiiiiIIIII.....cant let you steal my joy Ricky. juju beans, Jesus and justice for all are a few of my favorite things. I suggest you lift the lid of the bin laden and place "your things" in there. do you like Juju beans....? love on the double for you Bro....michael
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Michael,
I don't like ju ju beans but I do like..
Jomba Mombas!
"Which are huge boobs!
The bigger the better!
Used to have me,a pair (Nancy)but she and her 48Dothose 48 Doulble D'S are long gone.
Unfortunately for me..
RICKY...
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everybody likes "jomba Mombas"....but there comes a time in a mans life...when he "settles" down and honors one set. Ready...one one thousand two one thousand...hike!
Comment from djsaxon
Awesome write, bro'. I would not dare to insult you with a "review". The Springsteen track (one of my favorites) is right on the money. Mo used Celtic stuff with her poems as you no doubt recall. I think that you were the only two poets using music at the time to support and enhance the read. Loved it then and love it still. Hugs mate - xxx
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Awesome write, bro'. I would not dare to insult you with a "review". The Springsteen track (one of my favorites) is right on the money. Mo used Celtic stuff with her poems as you no doubt recall. I think that you were the only two poets using music at the time to support and enhance the read. Loved it then and love it still. Hugs mate - xxx
Comment Written 07-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Hey Bud...-smile-
yea...I learned to um...free myself I guess...reading and listening to her. there were others Tammy....I'm sure I'm forgetting someone. Lovi posted an update about Mo...wish you'd go check it out...the general forum. Thanks Bro. love-
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love back - xx
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Michael
WOW! Clever title and wonderful presentation, including a dose of Bruce, always pleasurable. I really like that album cover. Now down to the nitty gritty of this powerful write.
"I watch you wither desperate
suck on a finger for no mercy circled
Solomon turned suddenly solemn"
Gosh, is this about someone you know, or psychos in general? And here I am thinking of Michael writing romance poems. Dark you have here and so intense, I almost couldn't breath as I read.
"no place houses allowance for unholy in heaven"
Some wonderful phrasing here Michael ... you've covered the theme well my friend.
Hugs - Lovi xoxox
PS I have placed a short up-date on Maureen in the Forum - General. I received a note from her yesterday. When she tried a few reviews, her PM box filled up to over-flowing, and she is too fragile to answer them. She is well but mostly in silent reverie, unbelievable how she powers on. I mentioned you in my letter to her and she asked me to send her love. Dj had asked after her as you know. Take care sweetie. Maureen loves us!! More hugs - Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Hi Michael
WOW! Clever title and wonderful presentation, including a dose of Bruce, always pleasurable. I really like that album cover. Now down to the nitty gritty of this powerful write.
"I watch you wither desperate
suck on a finger for no mercy circled
Solomon turned suddenly solemn"
Gosh, is this about someone you know, or psychos in general? And here I am thinking of Michael writing romance poems. Dark you have here and so intense, I almost couldn't breath as I read.
"no place houses allowance for unholy in heaven"
Some wonderful phrasing here Michael ... you've covered the theme well my friend.
Hugs - Lovi xoxox
PS I have placed a short up-date on Maureen in the Forum - General. I received a note from her yesterday. When she tried a few reviews, her PM box filled up to over-flowing, and she is too fragile to answer them. She is well but mostly in silent reverie, unbelievable how she powers on. I mentioned you in my letter to her and she asked me to send her love. Dj had asked after her as you know. Take care sweetie. Maureen loves us!! More hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 06-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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its someone I know...intimately now. Not that I wanted to....I told him to stay away from me and mine. when I realized what he was made of. He took as disrespect and set on a campaign to crush me...sacrificing souls in the process as meaningless in the way collateral damamge. He believes or "did" that all other men are his meat...he is better than and entitled............................................I know I saw it and responded. ...-bigsmile-.....I'm very dissapointed that the thread isn't full of well wishing friends. It was amazing wasn't it Lovi....once in a lifetime stuff....-smile- ....love to you Michael
Comment from poetsteve15
This is very will written I don't agree with death plenty I do think they should get life without parole. No one should be able free them once they hare known to have done crime. Just my through. because if you are for life you can't be for both..
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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This is very will written I don't agree with death plenty I do think they should get life without parole. No one should be able free them once they hare known to have done crime. Just my through. because if you are for life you can't be for both..
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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I didn't either....
thanks Steve...-smile-
Appreciate you stopping by. love to you Michael
Comment from Lisa Deverick
Your words are very intriguing and thought provoking to me...a heavy read.
The song is a nice addition. (I grew up listening to Springsteen)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Your words are very intriguing and thought provoking to me...a heavy read.
The song is a nice addition. (I grew up listening to Springsteen)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Lisa...-smile-
ah me too...honestly...sometimes I surprise and or confuse myself. sssshhhh...you and me...-wink-....ahaha...thank you Beautiful. love Michael
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You are too much....haha
Hope you have an awesome day!
Comment from TKField
Yeah, I guess this sounds like something the boss might write. Full of otherworldly apocalyptic, theocratic imagery and gritty subject matter. The near stream of consciousness style is very effective to set the dark tone throughout. Like a down bound train or a wreck on the freeway.This is a scathing indictment, even though I admit I'm not quite sure of what. Solomon turned solemn.....not bad.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Yeah, I guess this sounds like something the boss might write. Full of otherworldly apocalyptic, theocratic imagery and gritty subject matter. The near stream of consciousness style is very effective to set the dark tone throughout. Like a down bound train or a wreck on the freeway.This is a scathing indictment, even though I admit I'm not quite sure of what. Solomon turned solemn.....not bad.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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haha...ah hey man...-smile-
not bad huh...well it most be to bring you agreeing with me. haha...thanks for this, appreciate you TK. love Michael
Comment from OGGR
This is dark but beautiful. I love the last line and I completely understand your beautiful work. Thank you for sharing :) genuinely amazing xoxoxo
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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This is dark but beautiful. I love the last line and I completely understand your beautiful work. Thank you for sharing :) genuinely amazing xoxoxo
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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yes sir...righteous justice always is. Appreciate you showing up...love to you...Michael
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I'm a girl btw:)
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Oh....well I'm better with them anyway....-smile-...I think. haha...whoops....-smile-
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I'm not sure I understand everything you are writing, but I think it's a poem that is lamenting all the pointless killing in the name of religion. All the best. Ulla:)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi there, I'm not sure I understand everything you are writing, but I think it's a poem that is lamenting all the pointless killing in the name of religion. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi...-smile-
ah no, I'm sure you dont. ....and that is a good thing for you.
Well I agree with your assessment. but "real" sick thing is "some" of "them" have so corrupted by sin that they actually believe they are "righteous". Thanks...same to you. love Michael
Comment from johnwilson
This is truly awesome. It captures the human condition with our "god-fearing" souls and I agree that if the things you do kill the things you love....no! I like each word chosen and the fact that you used NO punctuation lets the reader dissolve each word before moving on to the next.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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This is truly awesome. It captures the human condition with our "god-fearing" souls and I agree that if the things you do kill the things you love....no! I like each word chosen and the fact that you used NO punctuation lets the reader dissolve each word before moving on to the next.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Alright...now were talking...-smile-.... Amen...however there are men who would sell their childs soul...for position or power...like this gentle God damned man. Hey....thanks man...really appreciate this John....love to you ...Michael
Comment from CEO2020
Nice work! Good presentation. A few questions -
Second paragraph - "hollow out your insides whore"
What is that?
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Nice work! Good presentation. A few questions -
Second paragraph - "hollow out your insides whore"
What is that?
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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He traded his soul to the devil for dust.....thanks for the review. Love to you . Michael
