Note in a Pot
We are all clay vessels.80 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem and sharing this story and the meaning behind it. excellent imagery presented, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem and sharing this story and the meaning behind it. excellent imagery presented, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you, sweetwoodjax, for your generous, six star review on "an excellent job" and for wishing me success in the contest. I appreciate it.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I liked the originality of this piece and I liked the questions that you raised in your writing. I thought that you ended the piece well and that your writing flowed well, good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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I liked the originality of this piece and I liked the questions that you raised in your writing. I thought that you ended the piece well and that your writing flowed well, good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Jacob, for your review and praising the "originality" of my poem. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from infinityyingyang
This was very well done. It held powerful emotion behind it the whole way through but finished calmly and nostalgically, which was pleasing.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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This was very well done. It held powerful emotion behind it the whole way through but finished calmly and nostalgically, which was pleasing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you, infinityyingyang, for your review. I am glad "it held a powerful emotion behind it all the way through."
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow, excellently done.
A strong contest entry, I love the reference to returning from where we came.
It is so true. My grandfather said the same thing and my grandmother had a pot with notes from my grandfather. But I don't know where it came from either
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Wow, excellently done.
A strong contest entry, I love the reference to returning from where we came.
It is so true. My grandfather said the same thing and my grandmother had a pot with notes from my grandfather. But I don't know where it came from either
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Your "grandmother had a pot with notes from my grandfather"?! I wonder where that tradition came from, but it is a beautiful one. Thank you, Barb, for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from Janet Foor
An excellent entry for the "What is a Clay Vessel" contest. I always enjoy a story in a poem. You did an excellent job weaving the story of your dads gift of a clay pot he made complete with a love note. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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An excellent entry for the "What is a Clay Vessel" contest. I always enjoy a story in a poem. You did an excellent job weaving the story of your dads gift of a clay pot he made complete with a love note. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Jmf4119, for your review of "a story in a poem." I am glad you found this to be an excellent, enjoyable entry. Thanks.
Comment from create4christ
This is a beautiful tribute to your daddy. It is so sweet that you used a pot that he'd made to carry his ashes to be scattered over the desert. Good luck with your WHAT IS A CLAY VESSEL? contest entry. Well done.
Thank you for sharing...Penny
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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This is a beautiful tribute to your daddy. It is so sweet that you used a pot that he'd made to carry his ashes to be scattered over the desert. Good luck with your WHAT IS A CLAY VESSEL? contest entry. Well done.
Thank you for sharing...Penny
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Penny, for your review of "a beautiful tribute to your daddy." I have dozens of my father's pots around my house. the pot I used for his ashes and his pot with the note are the ones most dear to me. Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from foxangie123
This is a most emotional piece of poetry and an exceptional piece as entry to the contest or written without the prompt. A great tribute to your daddy.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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This is a most emotional piece of poetry and an exceptional piece as entry to the contest or written without the prompt. A great tribute to your daddy.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Thank you, foxangie123. I knew that when I saw the contest listing for What is a Clay Vessel? that I, as the son of a potter, had to say something that would pay tribute to my father and his pottery. I am glad you found "This is a most emotional piece of poetry and an exceptional piece as entry to the contest." Thank you for your review.
Comment from MTF1955
Your poem was so very touching. I especially love the clay pot with the note. That is a wonderful idea to leave for the one you love. Beautifully done. Mary
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Your poem was so very touching. I especially love the clay pot with the note. That is a wonderful idea to leave for the one you love. Beautifully done. Mary
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Yes, Mary, I really appreciate my father's note in a pot now that he is gone. Whenever I miss him, I read his note. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Gloria ....
There is something so earthy in working with clay and pottery. I love the shells on the top of the lid too. This is really a special gift from a father to his son.
Excellent poem that captures a lifetime of meaning in four stanzas.
Exceptional job with this poet. I wish you all the best in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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There is something so earthy in working with clay and pottery. I love the shells on the top of the lid too. This is really a special gift from a father to his son.
Excellent poem that captures a lifetime of meaning in four stanzas.
Exceptional job with this poet. I wish you all the best in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Yes, Gloria, I impressed myself with my poem "that captures a lifetime of meaning in four stanzas." My father would be very proud of me right now. I wanted to pay tribute to him and his pottery. Thank you for your review of my "earthy" poem and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from cterp
Gorgeous and wonderful poem and story. You have brought tears to my eyes. Thank you.
"Perhaps hope trembles like a butterfly
on the bottom of Pandora's Box
after the world's evils escaped."
...what a beautiful image to think of a butterfly left there after all the evils have escaped.
Hope this poem goes far for you.
chris
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Gorgeous and wonderful poem and story. You have brought tears to my eyes. Thank you.
"Perhaps hope trembles like a butterfly
on the bottom of Pandora's Box
after the world's evils escaped."
...what a beautiful image to think of a butterfly left there after all the evils have escaped.
Hope this poem goes far for you.
chris
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Chris, for your generous, six star review. Many reviewers have remarked about that butterfly line. Thank you also for wishing that my poem goes far in the contest and beyond.
