Note in a Pot
We are all clay vessels.80 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I've never been a great advocate of cremation, although two of my wife's and my collective parents have been buried and two cremated, I guess what metaphorically came from the ground, deserves to be symbolically returned to the ground. So well done, you state your case articulatey well, the method is really unimportant, but the symbolism can be. It's beautifully written and artistically presented and crafted, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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I've never been a great advocate of cremation, although two of my wife's and my collective parents have been buried and two cremated, I guess what metaphorically came from the ground, deserves to be symbolically returned to the ground. So well done, you state your case articulatey well, the method is really unimportant, but the symbolism can be. It's beautifully written and artistically presented and crafted, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Roy, for your review. The symbolism is important in my poem. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
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Well done
Comment from OGGR
Thank you so much for sharing. I know you have probably heard this a million times but it was beautiful and soul touching. Thank you again xoxoxo
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much for sharing. I know you have probably heard this a million times but it was beautiful and soul touching. Thank you again xoxoxo
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you, OGGR, for your generous, six star review of my "beautiful and soul touching" poem. I appreciate it.
Comment from Ulla
This is a fine poem about we are all but a clay vessel . What a lovely tradition to leave a note in the pot. And your father gave you one. Lovely. What a beautiful memory to leave behind. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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This is a fine poem about we are all but a clay vessel . What a lovely tradition to leave a note in the pot. And your father gave you one. Lovely. What a beautiful memory to leave behind. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Yes, Ulla, this pot is a beautiful memory. I have dozens of pots from my father, but the pot into which he put a note is the one I cherish everyday. Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from darkmoonbaby
This is a beautifully written piece of poetry, accompanied by an image that is very clearly an important aspect of the story being told in the poem. It was enjoyable to read, it didn't contain any errors or mistakes that I noticed. I'm glad you put the authors notes at the bottom because while I understood jinni was supposed to be genie by the context of the piece, I thought it was a mistake at first. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
DMB
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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This is a beautifully written piece of poetry, accompanied by an image that is very clearly an important aspect of the story being told in the poem. It was enjoyable to read, it didn't contain any errors or mistakes that I noticed. I'm glad you put the authors notes at the bottom because while I understood jinni was supposed to be genie by the context of the piece, I thought it was a mistake at first. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
DMB
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you, DMB, for your review of "a beautifully written piece of poetry." The spelling "genie" was popular in the 20th century, but has fallen out of favor in the 21st century as writers pay respect to the Islamic source of the word with spellings like Djinn or jinn for multiples or jinni for singular.
Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from danpald
Each poem is like a pot
Fragile in the wording
Tender in the reading
Loving in the messaging
So take the pot of the poet
To bring forth the heart with care
Sending forth the love desired
To readers everywhere
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Each poem is like a pot
Fragile in the wording
Tender in the reading
Loving in the messaging
So take the pot of the poet
To bring forth the heart with care
Sending forth the love desired
To readers everywhere
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thank you, danpald, for your poetic, rhymed review. I appreciate that my poem "sent forth the love desired to readers everywhere." Thanks.
Comment from I am Cat
Well, I only know one writer on here whose father was a potter AND a poet! (and also, his mother is a poet...) ;)
And he's one of my favorite people. ;)
I wish I had a six for this lovely poem which shows so much love... and I LOVE your father's art! Obviously he passed down his talents to you... BOTH your parents did... they would be very proud of you...
Well done and great luck in the contest my friend.
Cat
******stars! ;)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Well, I only know one writer on here whose father was a potter AND a poet! (and also, his mother is a poet...) ;)
And he's one of my favorite people. ;)
I wish I had a six for this lovely poem which shows so much love... and I LOVE your father's art! Obviously he passed down his talents to you... BOTH your parents did... they would be very proud of you...
Well done and great luck in the contest my friend.
Cat
******stars! ;)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Cat, Anonymous Poet hasn't the slightest idea of the identity of the poet "whose father was a potter AND a poet! (and also, his mother is a poet." ; )
Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from Corporal Rumjugs
A wonderful poem with deep symbolism. Your comparison of the body with a fragile clay pot that returns to the dust but a soul that eternally rejoices after death is a concept found in several religions and it strikes me as an optimistic outlook on death. The last stanza seems to imply that something always remains and that something might be the love that you leave behind. Wonderful piece of thought, that. I especially like how you compared the soul to a Jinni freed from its lamp. Excellent writing!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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A wonderful poem with deep symbolism. Your comparison of the body with a fragile clay pot that returns to the dust but a soul that eternally rejoices after death is a concept found in several religions and it strikes me as an optimistic outlook on death. The last stanza seems to imply that something always remains and that something might be the love that you leave behind. Wonderful piece of thought, that. I especially like how you compared the soul to a Jinni freed from its lamp. Excellent writing!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Sarvajith, for your generous, six star review to "A wonderful poem with deep symbolism." I am amazed at how much I squeezed into four stanzas--a Jinni, Pandora's Box, and more. This enabled my poem to strike a chord with several world religions and cultures. Thank you for giving my poem its last six star review before the certificate expired.
Comment from Rubylou
This is truly an intriguing and beautiful poem. The free verse is a perfect form as the heartfelt unfolds.
The love that is mentioned in the note has stayed with you.
What a wonderful blessing.
Thank -you for the author 's notes. I learned something today.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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This is truly an intriguing and beautiful poem. The free verse is a perfect form as the heartfelt unfolds.
The love that is mentioned in the note has stayed with you.
What a wonderful blessing.
Thank -you for the author 's notes. I learned something today.
Rubylou
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Yes, Rubylou, "The love that is mentioned in the note has stayed with" me. I continue to bless people with this poem. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from johnwilson
I really enjoyed this work not only for the great descriptions but for the author notes explaining the origin of the "clay vessel" and your intimate link to its providence. Bravo!!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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I really enjoyed this work not only for the great descriptions but for the author notes explaining the origin of the "clay vessel" and your intimate link to its providence. Bravo!!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thank you, John Wilson, I am glad you enjoyed my poem and notes. Thank you for your review.
Comment from thonnigford09
Thanks for sharing this. I think in the confusion of life, we sometimes forget to love out loved ones enough. Excellent work and I would recommend it! Thanks, thonnigford09
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thanks for sharing this. I think in the confusion of life, we sometimes forget to love out loved ones enough. Excellent work and I would recommend it! Thanks, thonnigford09
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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I agree, thonnigford09, "in the confusion of life, we sometimes forget to love our loved ones enough." Thank you for your generous, six star review.
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Thanks!!:)
