Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Ground Meat - Part Two"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
13 total reviews
Comment from barkingdog
Sorry to be so late reviewing this, Brett.
What a powerful chapter, showing the gruesome revenge of Bee-Bo on the doctor.
Start visual descriptions and the slow torture set this chapter apart from the rest. It's Bee-Bo's chapter and he's not finished yet.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Sorry to be so late reviewing this, Brett.
What a powerful chapter, showing the gruesome revenge of Bee-Bo on the doctor.
Start visual descriptions and the slow torture set this chapter apart from the rest. It's Bee-Bo's chapter and he's not finished yet.
:) ellen
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Needed to show Bee-Bo's "good" side. Many FanStorians told me I accomplished that in spades! Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, that clown is madder than mad, if that's possible. Well he's now got rid of the doctor and the idea of Cody not being dead has been sown. Will it take hold, though. Time will show. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Wow, that clown is madder than mad, if that's possible. Well he's now got rid of the doctor and the idea of Cody not being dead has been sown. Will it take hold, though. Time will show. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 02-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, that's one mad clown!! At least he wasn't listening when the doctor tried to tell him Cody was still alive! Too bad he didn't take the money and let the poor doc go, right? No oral of the story? Don't tick off the clown!!
So, with Bee-Bo on the loose, is Cody safe? I guess we'll have to wait and see,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Wow, that's one mad clown!! At least he wasn't listening when the doctor tried to tell him Cody was still alive! Too bad he didn't take the money and let the poor doc go, right? No oral of the story? Don't tick off the clown!!
So, with Bee-Bo on the loose, is Cody safe? I guess we'll have to wait and see,
Rhonda
Comment Written 01-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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When Bee=Bo is sad somebody pays a very steep price. Is Cody safe? Time will tell. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MTF1955
Chilling! Great chapter. you brought off BeeBo's psychopathic tendencies with perfect persuasion. There realing was a guy who killed his wife and put her in a woodchipper. Look forward to the next chapter. Mary
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Chilling! Great chapter. you brought off BeeBo's psychopathic tendencies with perfect persuasion. There realing was a guy who killed his wife and put her in a woodchipper. Look forward to the next chapter. Mary
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Needed to paint Bee-Bo's character clearly. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
Oh my goodness you did warn me Yet I read on..
I can't believe what that insane man done.
I think the next time you warn people I will listen.
Cookie
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Oh my goodness you did warn me Yet I read on..
I can't believe what that insane man done.
I think the next time you warn people I will listen.
Cookie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this misscookie.
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you're very welcome. Have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I regret what happened and I fear for his family, but at the same time I am hoping that he did not believe that the doctor said. I know he will think about it but I hope Sheriff is one step ahead and planning for it/
Excellently written
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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I regret what happened and I fear for his family, but at the same time I am hoping that he did not believe that the doctor said. I know he will think about it but I hope Sheriff is one step ahead and planning for it/
Excellently written
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from create4christ
Wow! That was hard to read. I know it was part of the story, so I have to say it was well written. Vivid and easy to visualize. I hate BeeBo!! Good job.
A few errors...
P6 - (an) untruth teller
P10 - table (,) so
P20 - earnest (,) pleading
P20 - (Your) wife
Thank you for sharing...Penny
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Wow! That was hard to read. I know it was part of the story, so I have to say it was well written. Vivid and easy to visualize. I hate BeeBo!! Good job.
A few errors...
P6 - (an) untruth teller
P10 - table (,) so
P20 - earnest (,) pleading
P20 - (Your) wife
Thank you for sharing...Penny
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Needed to paint an accurate depiction of Bee-Bo and many FanStorians told me I accomplished that spot on. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
What gruesome bastard the clown is! He never even listened to what Patterson said about Cody being alive. Maybe or maybe not, he will realize what Patterson told him, is the truth. I got faith in Brock Daniels to eventually eradicate this scum from this world. Brett, love your storyline in this chapter that has many things to make it a great read.
Look forward to reading more.
Have a great day,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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What gruesome bastard the clown is! He never even listened to what Patterson said about Cody being alive. Maybe or maybe not, he will realize what Patterson told him, is the truth. I got faith in Brock Daniels to eventually eradicate this scum from this world. Brett, love your storyline in this chapter that has many things to make it a great read.
Look forward to reading more.
Have a great day,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portrait of Bee-Bo's character. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This chapter was very interesting to read too. That Bee Bo sure is a terrible man. I wonder what he has planned for next time? I hope that they are able to keep Cody safe and that Bee Bo doesn't find out where he is.
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Hi Brett,
This chapter was very interesting to read too. That Bee Bo sure is a terrible man. I wonder what he has planned for next time? I hope that they are able to keep Cody safe and that Bee Bo doesn't find out where he is.
Kat
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portrait of Bee-Bo's character. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Now I'm wondering what more Be Bo will do next. Kat
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Though I'm reading this for the first time, this is a thrilling story line, and this chapter read as a stand alone which I think is a very good attribute of a good writing, ability to make complete sense out of every chapter. I enjoyed the chapter.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Though I'm reading this for the first time, this is a thrilling story line, and this chapter read as a stand alone which I think is a very good attribute of a good writing, ability to make complete sense out of every chapter. I enjoyed the chapter.
ola thomas
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Where have you been? This is actually book two in my Cody Schroder Series many FanStorians have enjoyed for a while now. The story starts in Astatula and continues in Missing. Both of which can be found in my portfolio to bring you up to date. Your comments and support appreciated.
