Comment from judiverse

Excellent

The power of suggestion! If a flea collar works for Fluffy, it surely should work for a boy! Mother has the remedies. She gets a flea collar for the dog and promises a necklace of sweets for Douglas. It's true. Sometimes when you're thinking about a particular disease, for instance, you think you're getting the symptoms. Well done. You handled present tense very well. Consistent all through the story. judi

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice weekend coming.

reply by judiverse on 01-Jul-2016

You're welcome. Take care. judi

reply by Anonymous Member on 04-Jul-2016

You're welcome. Take care. judi

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

This is so cute! A dog with fleas, not too good
for the dog, very annoying.
I love the boys question, if he has to wear a flea
collar, I could just see it!

It was fun to read my friend.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely Thursday.

Comment from Lynn27

Excellent

This is a cute tale about the family dog. Fleas can be deadly to pets also.

Mostly you narrative is telling and not showing the reader. I also think the story will be better in past tensed.

Happy Writing.

Lynn

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely Thursday.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Ine, it's true...if someone tells you about a critter that can make them itch...you will start scratching...LOL...love your story sweet girl...very well written...Love ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely Thursday.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Ine, another good little story and this time about fleas. Yeah, most annoying they are and makes you itch just thinking about them. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice second part of the week.

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Another sweet little interlude into a child's life,mas he learns a lesson about fleas, flea collars, and itchy thoughts. A lvely scene, with a loving mom.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice second part of the week.

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

Why does that always happen. You think about it and you seem to itch as well. I do it with people and head lice. Just thinking about head lice makes my head itch. Great job with this

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice second part of the week.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

This is a nice little piece. Lovely tone to it. Simple, and effective story telling.

I will wash you thouroughly - thoroughly.

"Do I still have to wear a flee collar," - should have a question mark.

G

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week. Thanks for the tip. It is the English way.

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahaha! G'day Ine. Very nice little story mate. It's true that when you think too much about itchy you start to scratch. It's the same with yawning. Great job.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week.

Comment from MTF1955

Excellent

That was an adorable story. It so true about the bugs. Bed bugs have been terrible and once you hear about them you start thinking you have them on you. Great job. Mary

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week.