Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Ricky1024, this is really graphic, as you said at the git-go! A very good writing with a sad content that moved this reader so much. You must have a very difficult time dealing with this and, for that I feel much empathy. Glad you chose the avenue of writing poetry to exhaust your grief, and, I pray it has lightened your load some. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thanks so much for your review and kind thoughts of My Son Jason and me...
Pray for my wife Carolyn who committed suicide .Ricky 1024.

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 27-Jun-2016

Ricky1024, reading your poetry has made it impossible not to include you on my prayer list each night. I feel every word you write. God bless and hugs, Susanne

Comment from LisaD123

Excellent

This is powerfully written and the listing of the reasons creates a very powerful effect on the reader who can empathise with the emotion and the situation. The language and style chosen are very dramatic and enable the reader to understand what happened and how. Best wishes Lisa

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thanks so much for your review and kind thoughts of My Son Jason...
Ricky 1024.

Comment from djsaxon

Excellent

This is quite beautiful, sad, and very difficult for me to offer a critique, but I guess that is why we are all here. OK. Forget content. it is very moving. Separate the dedication from the first stanza. Lose all the " - not necessary. They get in the way. Also lose the ... between the reasons and trust the space. There are several typos that you should address, and I would lose almost all of the caps. The emphasis and passion sits within the content. No need to shout it loud. Sorry for your loss.

God bless - DJ

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thanks so much for your review and kind thoughts of My Son Jason...
Ricky 1024.