Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Excellent vivid imagery - a MUST in haiku, IMO.

Beautiful picture created of water, lilies and peace, plus the 'touch' of the gentle breeze. What else do we need for a view?

Good luck and bets wishes, Ray.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016

Thanks for the review Ray. At my cabin in the woods of vermont, I do have a hidden pond that is a joy. The friendly colorful dragonflies. swaying pine trees and the licorice scented waterlilies make it a haiku heaven, Cheers, j

Comment from djsaxon

Excellent

Beautiful. The grammar purists would insist that your place a - between sun and sparkled, but let them wallow in their anal obsession. Nice pen.

Cheers - DJ

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016

Thanks for the review DJ, I really hate using any punctuation in my haikus, even that comma, I thought long and hard about, ha ha cheers, j