Put Out
three stanzas in 5-5-5-214 total reviews
Comment from lfemine
Well done on coming in 3rd :) A powerful poem, especially the imagery of the ashtray. I'm sure it will deter some from smoking. Love the picture you chose.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Well done on coming in 3rd :) A powerful poem, especially the imagery of the ashtray. I'm sure it will deter some from smoking. Love the picture you chose.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, lfemine, for the exceptional review. Bill
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Welcome :)
Comment from Axiom Gray
This poem was very interesting. I loved the picture you chose to go along with your message. I hope you do well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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This poem was very interesting. I loved the picture you chose to go along with your message. I hope you do well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Ax, for the excellent review.
Comment from foxangie123
Wow this is so very provocative of so many emotions include of the anger that tobacco companies put more addictive additives in cigs that some don't have the will power left to quit due to their lack of oxygen from smoking. Great job here.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Wow this is so very provocative of so many emotions include of the anger that tobacco companies put more addictive additives in cigs that some don't have the will power left to quit due to their lack of oxygen from smoking. Great job here.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Angie, for giving this a look.
Comment from Zue65
Oh my , you have packed in a loaded message in so few words. The visual image of cigarette butts in an ashtray can be visualized from the word choices you have made effectively in this short piece. What an excellent write. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Oh my , you have packed in a loaded message in so few words. The visual image of cigarette butts in an ashtray can be visualized from the word choices you have made effectively in this short piece. What an excellent write. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Thank you, nassus, for the excellent review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. It is not sure easy to fight the battle against cancer. Anyone who meets this fate must be brave to keep fighting until the end.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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A very well-written poem. It is not sure easy to fight the battle against cancer. Anyone who meets this fate must be brave to keep fighting until the end.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Sandra, for the excellent review.
Comment from Galactia
Hi
Perfect syllable count
You actually made a complete story' beginning' middle and end in such a short syllable count glad I quit smoking in 2003.
Good luck in the contest
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Hi
Perfect syllable count
You actually made a complete story' beginning' middle and end in such a short syllable count glad I quit smoking in 2003.
Good luck in the contest
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Tia, for the positive review.
Comment from EMB
As a former smoker, I can relate. I'm still not so sure about the title, though. At first, it seems to mean something else. Perhaps a different picture would help. :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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As a former smoker, I can relate. I'm still not so sure about the title, though. At first, it seems to mean something else. Perhaps a different picture would help. :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
I know what you mean. The mixed understanding of the term seems to work by suggesting one thing but meaning another.
Comment from LIJ Red
Not a complex prompt. And your three stanzas seem to meet the requirements in all respects. This looks live a five-star entry to me.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Not a complex prompt. And your three stanzas seem to meet the requirements in all respects. This looks live a five-star entry to me.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Thank you, LIJ, for giving this a look.
Comment from Lynn27
This is a great poem and your photo was a good choice. Your poem is under fiction if you contact Tom, the site admin he will it fix. This has happened to me with poems.
Your lines captured the struggle of a person battling cancer.
Lynn
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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This is a great poem and your photo was a good choice. Your poem is under fiction if you contact Tom, the site admin he will it fix. This has happened to me with poems.
Your lines captured the struggle of a person battling cancer.
Lynn
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your kind review,
Comment from Ginger Banks
Oh my! This is so expressive and paints an excellent word picture. I've known too may unfortunately who've, with cancer, continued to smokensure for their addiction was too much for them to stop. This is also sad, and causes a person to feel and understand the plight - if they themselves have experienced any type of addiction, alcohol (whether alcoholic or not), sweets, food, coffee, fast driving adrenaline, chocolate, purchasing, keeping stff, etc. Well done! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Oh my! This is so expressive and paints an excellent word picture. I've known too may unfortunately who've, with cancer, continued to smokensure for their addiction was too much for them to stop. This is also sad, and causes a person to feel and understand the plight - if they themselves have experienced any type of addiction, alcohol (whether alcoholic or not), sweets, food, coffee, fast driving adrenaline, chocolate, purchasing, keeping stff, etc. Well done! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Ginger, for the terrific review.
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You're welcome.
