Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Ine, I didn't know about the dots on his back...they tell his age...very well written sweet girl...love your poem...and love you picture...xxoo Love Linda

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a very good second part of the week.

reply by l.raven on 23-Jun-2016

always welcome you...xxoo Linda

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Aww, Ine how sweet is that. You tell this wee story from the bottom of your heart. Only suggestion would be to take away 'then' from the sentence: Then from the top of her finger he flies away. Not needed as you've just used 'then' in the sentence prior to this. I liked this tale a lot. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and lovely Sunday.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

This is nice enchanting little piece which go down well with children.

"Shh" Nikki says - need a comma before the closing speech marks.

that sits at the back of Nikki's hand. - on the back.

"Gosh, how beautiful", Dougie says.
"It's two years old", Nikki says - the commas should come inside the speech marks.

"Does he not miss his parents?" He asks his sister. - you don't need the speech tags here as you have already identified he is wondering.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend. Thanks for the tips, I'll change.

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A very cute and endearing story about two kids as they find a ladybug. It is a sweet portrayal of the two and their youthful curiosity. Well written.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from fionageorge

Excellent

What a cute little story about the ladybug. It was quite educational for children, and yet you told it in an entertaining way. I enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing, Ine. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend coming.

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

This is such a cute poem for children.
I love lady bugs, I had fun reading it.
The picture is also very pretty and goes
beautifully with the poem.

Have a nice weekend my friend.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend coming.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

What a wonderful childrens piece. I know some kids that are afraid of theseand this is a wonderful kid friendly piece.
No problems noted.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend coming.

Comment from Susanjohn

Excellent

So cute!! I like " then he's still a toddler"... cute line! You have a great picture to go this too. Nice conversation between siblings!! Enjoyed reading!! :-)))

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend coming.

Comment from Realist101

Excellent

Oh this is sweet! And sounds like two kids really talking too Ine! :) And ladybugs are the best...fireflies too! I love summer. Even with mosquitoes, tho now there's the Zika virus to worry over. My only suggestion for this is maybe put in the paragraphs for easier reading? All in all a wonderful post! x

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice end of the week.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the artwork you choose to go with your story po
I remember holding them in my youth. tI love their bright reddish orange colors.
Thank you for sharing this delightful story.
Cookie

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good and blessed second part of the week.