Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "The Gambler"Dawn of Chaos
6 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
You did a good job tying all of the stanzas together into the whole of your message. Within each stanza you encapsulated it with various metaphors and vivid imagery. This is my favorite part. "Worm to face mongoose thinking rat,
drop of hat-trap to see an opponent, becoming prey the hunter who sat". I am assuming the worm is a snake". Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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You did a good job tying all of the stanzas together into the whole of your message. Within each stanza you encapsulated it with various metaphors and vivid imagery. This is my favorite part. "Worm to face mongoose thinking rat,
drop of hat-trap to see an opponent, becoming prey the hunter who sat". I am assuming the worm is a snake". Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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A little humor jest in thought about the worm. Glad aspects in this write was found appealing to interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
Comment from Janilou
Ah, yes, the choices we make that change our lives. Sometimes in a big way and sometimes in a small way but the choices are indeed made. There's obviously a lot of analogy going on here. My tired brain wasn't following all of them but I did find these lines clever:
A spade meets a diamond to play,
words points in distraction to way,
their crossed say intents in card-flip.
In these lines, is there a typo? Did you mean to say 'a solid bone goes down the drain.' here?
Chance, its lone odds against you,
money a lost tone by an investment,
a solid bone (gones) down the drain.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Ah, yes, the choices we make that change our lives. Sometimes in a big way and sometimes in a small way but the choices are indeed made. There's obviously a lot of analogy going on here. My tired brain wasn't following all of them but I did find these lines clever:
A spade meets a diamond to play,
words points in distraction to way,
their crossed say intents in card-flip.
In these lines, is there a typo? Did you mean to say 'a solid bone goes down the drain.' here?
Chance, its lone odds against you,
money a lost tone by an investment,
a solid bone (gones) down the drain.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Interesting viewpoint about goes and gones, I will take in consideration both aspects and their input in this write statement. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute and touching thoughts.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about odds of a win or a lost game to a gambler and the fruition thought thereby; well written, well done. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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This speaks about odds of a win or a lost game to a gambler and the fruition thought thereby; well written, well done. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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I had fun with this write, seeking even better clarity in its statement. Glad aspects presented weretouching. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought.
Comment from Beverly Botelho
I liked this: you demonstrated a depth and versatility that I haven't noticed in your other offerings. I will repeat myself here, but you are a poet with an understanding of a variety of subjects.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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I liked this: you demonstrated a depth and versatility that I haven't noticed in your other offerings. I will repeat myself here, but you are a poet with an understanding of a variety of subjects.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Glad you found interests in this write, as well those others, I thank you. Thanking you for too generous rate but welcomed thoughts.
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I don't agree that I was too generous - you deserved the rating.
Comment from Dustybones
Gamble your life away. Or save it all for a rainy day. The temptation is at every corner in the USA. Lotto Lotto Lotto...nobody thinks of the odds as too great, yet everyone plays.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Gamble your life away. Or save it all for a rainy day. The temptation is at every corner in the USA. Lotto Lotto Lotto...nobody thinks of the odds as too great, yet everyone plays.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Yeah, I gambled throwing pennies away, gang attempted robbery jump on bus: lacked two cents. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from John Parkin
A poem that makes you think all the way through. I am a card player and when I play it is never for fun and like a mongoose after its prey, you strike without malice and continue the game. The analogies cross over to business or relationships. If a poem makes you ponder then you did your job.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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A poem that makes you think all the way through. I am a card player and when I play it is never for fun and like a mongoose after its prey, you strike without malice and continue the game. The analogies cross over to business or relationships. If a poem makes you ponder then you did your job.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Hopefully not too confusing to read or comprehend: still learning proper conveyances. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statement.
