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Sweet PayDay!

5-6-5 candy treat

8 total reviews 
Comment from GeraldS
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I like the fact that you worked three candy bars into this piece. One may be good but two or three is even better. I'm afraid I'd need more than 5-6-5 to fit in all my favorites.

 Comment Written 30-May-2016

reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    Awe thanks!!! nothing wrong with a sweet tooth! :-)
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
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I enjoyed this one because you went the extra mile and used not just one, but three candy bars. Good entry into the 5-6-5 Candy contest. Wish you best of luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 30-May-2016

reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    awe thanks!!!keeping my fingers closed!!
Comment from foxangie123
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This is so very clever as most would relate it to money when in fact it is a candy bar that is another big yummy. Clever and way to go....

 Comment Written 30-May-2016

reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    Awe thanks!!! keeping my fingers closed!! LOL I have a major sweet tooth!!
Comment from Judy Couch
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I like this. You followed the prompt well. You didn't just include one candy bar. You named three of them. They're some of my favorites too.

 Comment Written 30-May-2016

reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    Awe thanks for the kind review!! i mean really! can't just pick ONE candy bar!!! :-P
Comment from JennC
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Haha! Don't we all? This was really cute and well-done. Great job with the syllable structure. I'm impressed you managed to fit three different candies in such a short little piece. Well done! Good luck!

 Comment Written 30-May-2016

reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    Awe Thank you so much! Glad you liked this silly little piece!
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Haha, Poet,

This is a brilliant entry for the contest!
I remember all those bars...do they still
exist?

You must be rich...at least in creativity.

Linda

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

reply by the author on 29-May-2016
    yep, you can still get that candy..,good thing for me! Thanks for the review...lol I do tend to be an "outside of the box" thinker...where Iv'e probably tripped and fell over a corner flat on my face..as I try to get back in the box!
reply by AnnaLinda on 29-May-2016
    Don't do that...You are box free.
Comment from rspoet
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Tasty entry for the candy contest
good syllables at 5-6-5
So which of the three is your favorite?
I'd pick Oh Henry
Worth every penny, and use to be 5 cents
Well done
Good luck in the contest


 Comment Written 28-May-2016

reply by the author on 28-May-2016
    That's too hard to decide..lol...ok..I like Oh henry if it's soft! Don't want any filling falling out! :-) thanks for the review!!!! always appreciate :-)
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Notes might be helpful (if allowed) for those of us who don't live in candy-swilling America. I've managed to google Payday, but is there more wordplay on 'Grand'?

In any case, I like the lively nature of your poem which conveys your love for this candy rather than just describing its lusciousness.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

reply by the author on 28-May-2016
    Notes..ugh...yes! 100 grand chocolate bar :-) lol I have a sweet tooth! Thanks for the review!!!