To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Count On"Poems by Michael
28 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Hey you, what a lovely poem AND in Octogrammic eloquence.
Your writing strikes it's own beat but you've somehow conformed to this wonderful style AND retained your unique feel. The first time I read it I ACTUALLY did NOT notice the format. It wasn't until the last repeat that I clicked then read it twice more.
Superb, smooth and your hobo sack of dreams is alive and well in this poem.
I suggest you wait a bit longer...you could get another couple of great poems out of this mate haha
Well done Mr. Hitherto
Sassafrassy
xx
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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Hey you, what a lovely poem AND in Octogrammic eloquence.
Your writing strikes it's own beat but you've somehow conformed to this wonderful style AND retained your unique feel. The first time I read it I ACTUALLY did NOT notice the format. It wasn't until the last repeat that I clicked then read it twice more.
Superb, smooth and your hobo sack of dreams is alive and well in this poem.
I suggest you wait a bit longer...you could get another couple of great poems out of this mate haha
Well done Mr. Hitherto
Sassafrassy
xx
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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Hello you.... every mans wonder why only some born lucky....-smile- ah I'm sure I'm off on meter....I never did...-wink-
I dont usually walk with crutches Sass...I've broken a leg so many times I hardly feel it anymore...-shouldershrug-...anyway I am very sensitive in other areas....ah -handwave-....save that for later....aha....thank you ...for letting all my neighbors see you knock on my door....you're the best Sass...-wink-...love you up....Michael
Comment from charlene7190
I'm not sure what to say to someone so accomplished. I found this introspective poem sophisticated with a very deep meaning. Enjoyed this and re-read it several times. There is not one thing of which to be critical and look forward to your next piece.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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I'm not sure what to say to someone so accomplished. I found this introspective poem sophisticated with a very deep meaning. Enjoyed this and re-read it several times. There is not one thing of which to be critical and look forward to your next piece.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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accomplished...-smile-
yes I guess I am if a women I've never met reads me several times over. thank you for thinking so...and for letting me know. -smile- have a wonderful night....love Michael
Comment from royowen
An excellent free verse Michael, a touching narrative that plumbs the depths of relationship, I'm not sure where the principle character is waiting, but I do know seperation brings about a certain melancholia,it is reflected in these tantalising verses. Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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An excellent free verse Michael, a touching narrative that plumbs the depths of relationship, I'm not sure where the principle character is waiting, but I do know seperation brings about a certain melancholia,it is reflected in these tantalising verses. Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Hey Roy...-smile-
yea I like this too. Hope your trip went well Sir. love Michael
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I am Michael
Comment from Moon baby
That was a great poem, with your ability to use many different words to get the message across. I really like your style of poetry.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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That was a great poem, with your ability to use many different words to get the message across. I really like your style of poetry.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Hey Moon Baby...man I'm glad to see you. Lil' boy blue took the cow and split...its been trying without you...hold me close to your shine...I'm sensitive...-smile-...love Michael
Comment from Neonewman
Wow! Another stunning performance my friend. Masterfully crafted and the depth you take this one to is unbelievable. Thank you for sharing.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016
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Wow! Another stunning performance my friend. Masterfully crafted and the depth you take this one to is unbelievable. Thank you for sharing.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 15-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016
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Hey Steve....-smile-...thanks Bro. yea I feel it ....anyway, I got to run....working late. love Michael
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just got in myself from work and have to be back at 7am. Always a pleasure reviewing your work.
God bless and love to you as well my friend.
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just got in myself from work and have to be back at 7am. Always a pleasure reviewing your work.
God bless and love to you as well my friend.
Comment from Lisa Deverick
Now this is a beautiful love poem.. it's the kind of poem any girl would love to receive from the one she loves. Long distance would not seem that far with words like these to read often. well done
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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Now this is a beautiful love poem.. it's the kind of poem any girl would love to receive from the one she loves. Long distance would not seem that far with words like these to read often. well done
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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its just a mans wander over precious hours of yesterday up and until this sunset....nothing more or less. -smile-...thank you Lisa....love to you ...Michael
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hm...strange....thats not what you said...huh...magic I guess. ahaha....what I meant to say Lisa...was...thanks.....love Michael
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you are so welcome friend- your mushy love poem (that's a good thing) made me smile.
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why are you walking on egg shells Lisa...ahaha....well..-knucklerub-...I have been doing "mushy" justice since I out grew the knickers...haha..I'm glad you're -smile- ing...night-
Comment from Joan E.
This is another post that I was not alerted to by FanStory--maybe it's for a blind contest. The picture you selected caught my attention and I had to read the poem. You really communicate the willingness to wait forever, and your "hobo's rainbow" and "shades of true" are original and vivid. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016
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This is another post that I was not alerted to by FanStory--maybe it's for a blind contest. The picture you selected caught my attention and I had to read the poem. You really communicate the willingness to wait forever, and your "hobo's rainbow" and "shades of true" are original and vivid. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016
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Hey J...-smile-...what say ye...not getting my posts....my God thats got to be a felony....who's responsible!....-headtilt-......do you think somebody up there likes me Joan...? ahhaha....thank you Beautiful....always my pleasure....love to you always...michael
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I'll let you know if the problem continues--let's hope it was just a temporary glitch. Enjoy the rest of the week and the upcoming weekend. Hugs- Joan
Comment from frogbook
Another beautiful and rather melancholy work with an original and eye catching piece of art to go with. You have a way with words rivaled by few.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Another beautiful and rather melancholy work with an original and eye catching piece of art to go with. You have a way with words rivaled by few.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Hi...-smile-
well thank you for enjoying. It pleases me that you do. love to you ...Michael
Comment from Leineco
I have special place in my heart for those who deconstruct
a form and then dazzle with presentation ;-)
Although on close inspection I can discern the octogram
you have constructed - it's really almost irrelevant. Or,
perhaps I should say it's a mere side note worthy of footnote.
I wait for you is, of course, the key to opening
this poem. . .so many possible connotations!
Wait in longing
wait in anticipation
wait in secure knowledge
wait for reunion
wait for reacquaintance
wait for acceptance
etc, etc, etc.
I suppose that's what I like so much about this
poem - each reader may find their own waiting
within it and react accordingly.
- Autumn's last leaf
- sworn promise
- hobo's rainbow
- distance adieu
- balance precarious
so many seeds for possible emotions and imageries
to take root.
In lieu of six being elusive - I can offer 5 stars and APPLAUSE :-)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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I have special place in my heart for those who deconstruct
a form and then dazzle with presentation ;-)
Although on close inspection I can discern the octogram
you have constructed - it's really almost irrelevant. Or,
perhaps I should say it's a mere side note worthy of footnote.
I wait for you is, of course, the key to opening
this poem. . .so many possible connotations!
Wait in longing
wait in anticipation
wait in secure knowledge
wait for reunion
wait for reacquaintance
wait for acceptance
etc, etc, etc.
I suppose that's what I like so much about this
poem - each reader may find their own waiting
within it and react accordingly.
- Autumn's last leaf
- sworn promise
- hobo's rainbow
- distance adieu
- balance precarious
so many seeds for possible emotions and imageries
to take root.
In lieu of six being elusive - I can offer 5 stars and APPLAUSE :-)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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haha...apparently I got some of it right anyway. who knows it maybe just more 'fluff" reviews. I've noticed non of them "serious" writers ever review me...I got a sneaking suspicion they read me though...-wink-
ak thank you Beautiful...you know I know you rock. love to you...Michael
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. It is important to be able to count on the one you love. When the one is not ready the other will wait till you are with them.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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A very well-written poem. It is important to be able to count on the one you love. When the one is not ready the other will wait till you are with them.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Hi ...-smile-
-headshake-...yea. Thanks Sandra....love to you...Michael
