Black Hole
Loneliness is worse than pain5 total reviews
Comment from foxangie123
It is so well done. I just can't believe people walk away from a moan instead of helping them. That is awful. I'm glad you were there. Good writing.
reply by the author on 26-May-2016
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It is so well done. I just can't believe people walk away from a moan instead of helping them. That is awful. I'm glad you were there. Good writing.
Comment Written 26-May-2016
reply by the author on 26-May-2016
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Thank you so much for the generous review; it is heartbreaking to see how she has been treated; she suffers from depression and most don't know how to handle that.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Gosh, I really like this poem. It is honest, realistic, raw, sad and on the verge of helpless. It is also amusing in parts. The dog was a great touch. Life must be so lonely to want to go back to crap. But....there is hope. Try wearing a positive hat, make a movie pal and get another dog... is what I would suggest. Back to the poem, it sucks the reader right in. Brilliant! ~DD
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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Gosh, I really like this poem. It is honest, realistic, raw, sad and on the verge of helpless. It is also amusing in parts. The dog was a great touch. Life must be so lonely to want to go back to crap. But....there is hope. Try wearing a positive hat, make a movie pal and get another dog... is what I would suggest. Back to the poem, it sucks the reader right in. Brilliant! ~DD
Comment Written 25-May-2016
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your generous rating and insightful review. It is true, tragically, the life of a neighbor with depression. It stunned me when she confided she rather be in an abusive relationship than be alone.
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Take her to the movies so she can escape for a couple of hours into a different world. She needs to get a hobby. You sound like a caring neighbour. Her depression stems from not letting go of the past and not the thought of going back to it. Sorry, I'm off on my tangent. Forgive me. Thank you for writing such a meaningful poem. ~DD
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I agree--thank you for caring!
Comment from RYME4U
Thais is very tragic but extremely well written. The feeling of desperation and loneliness come through well. Good flow of words. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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Thais is very tragic but extremely well written. The feeling of desperation and loneliness come through well. Good flow of words. Great job!
Comment Written 25-May-2016
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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Thank you so very much for your generous rating and insightful comments--all are very much appreciated!
Comment from djeckert
Wow this is a great depiction of loneliness. I love the last line God I miss my dog. I see now you say this is not autobiographical. It sounds like this person , and I know some of these people myself...they could use a Serious, serious attitude adjustment. Ill just say wow God could have quite a testimony that they could give about everything being for a purpose. God must have a very special purpose for this persons life if they turn towards Him and let Him. His incredible Word rom.8.28-31.nasb And we know that God causes all things to work together for good to those who love God, to those who are called according to His purpose. For those whom He foreknew, He also predestined to become conformed to the image of His Son, so that He would be the firstborn among many brethren; and these whom He predestined, He also called; and these whom He called, He also justified; and these whom He justified, He also glorified. What then shall we say to these things? If God is for us, who is against us?
The very last line to me about "missing my dog" might be turned around subliminally to missing
" your God" , you could tell this very sad person .A well done, heartfelt poem indeed.
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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Wow this is a great depiction of loneliness. I love the last line God I miss my dog. I see now you say this is not autobiographical. It sounds like this person , and I know some of these people myself...they could use a Serious, serious attitude adjustment. Ill just say wow God could have quite a testimony that they could give about everything being for a purpose. God must have a very special purpose for this persons life if they turn towards Him and let Him. His incredible Word rom.8.28-31.nasb And we know that God causes all things to work together for good to those who love God, to those who are called according to His purpose. For those whom He foreknew, He also predestined to become conformed to the image of His Son, so that He would be the firstborn among many brethren; and these whom He predestined, He also called; and these whom He called, He also justified; and these whom He justified, He also glorified. What then shall we say to these things? If God is for us, who is against us?
The very last line to me about "missing my dog" might be turned around subliminally to missing
" your God" , you could tell this very sad person .A well done, heartfelt poem indeed.
Comment Written 25-May-2016
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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First thank you for the awesome starlight and the great review-- both are very much appreciated. I agree totally about turning her around to Christ--and she is trying very hard--goes to Church and attends bible study but she doesn't feel anything and it seems like her life is getting worse. She suffers from depression and a few of us have teamed up to help her, and we are struggling. If you can keep my friend in prayer I would appreciate it. God bless you!
Comment from Domjponi
Okay, this goes pretty deep.
I feel your pain and see the deceit coming from your so-called partner.
I've been to the same deal very lonely myself but I have 3 beautiful kids to keep me busy but that's a whole nother story.
This is all about you.
Your words are nice showing a painful wound. Picture and color fits your poems mood.
I think a bit more rhymeing would be good nice to see that pain?
You can always get a new dog as much is a new boyfriend..
Good luck have a little more faith and stay strong.:-)
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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Okay, this goes pretty deep.
I feel your pain and see the deceit coming from your so-called partner.
I've been to the same deal very lonely myself but I have 3 beautiful kids to keep me busy but that's a whole nother story.
This is all about you.
Your words are nice showing a painful wound. Picture and color fits your poems mood.
I think a bit more rhymeing would be good nice to see that pain?
You can always get a new dog as much is a new boyfriend..
Good luck have a little more faith and stay strong.:-)
Comment Written 25-May-2016
reply by the author on 25-May-2016
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First, thank you for the generous rating--it is very much appreciated. Second, this poem is not about me (see author's notes) but I agree with your advice (I kept busy with my 3 kids too, after my husband left).
Third--I held back on rhymes as this is a free verse piece and I tend to over-rhyme; I will give it another look and let you know--many thanks my friend.
