Comment from --Turtle.

Exceptional

Hi, Craig,

This series of 5-7-5's struck a cord with me. I'm sure it more likely marks you as a romantic, and if I wasn't so self centered, could imagine this shouted from below your love's bedroom window... but I prefer to read other's poetry and make it all about what I want to see.

And this poem to me... I could tack it right onto a character in my imagination--as I seem to be constantly within my own personal imagination. It is always a neat sort of stop and stare sensation, when I catch glimpses or whispers of a character in my imagination showing up in other peoples' art.

So This is what I saw when I read this set of 5-7-5 poems:
(I got all a titter)

Been working on a preliminary sketch of a side romance novel, just scrap pages really; I got a rage-wraith trapped in human form, and he falls for a woman who doesn't know his predicament. He was put into the human form to save him from being destroyed--because as a rage-wraith, he was killing people (bad people, but with rage wraiths... they get angrier and angrier and the ability to see clearly who they are killing and why fades ...) So the good-guys trap this rage-wraith in human form.

And as I mentioned, he falls in love with this woman, and between fear and secrets (the fact that he could not be put out, only contained) and how passionately he feels for her... I read this poem and instantly thought of him and his love for her.

Yay! This poem made me happy to read.

 Comment Written 24-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks so much for the wonderful review, and the lovely six stars, Turtle. I'm glad it struck a chord with you. Your idea for a romance novel sounds like a good one to me - I think I could get into the one you describe, it would be the first one I'd ever read!

That character you describe kind of makes me think of Caliban in Shakespeare's The Tempest.

Always grateful to you for taking the time to check out my poems, and provide help and encouragement - thanks again :)

Craig

Comment from fionageorge

Excellent

An interesting and different set of 5-7-5 potlatch challenge entry. Enjoyable poem of love, passion and longing. Good luck in the contest and warmest regards, Marijke :o)

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 23-May-2016

Thank you very much for the kind words, Marijke :) Craig

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

A love poem and a very well done one at that, my friend. As I am typing this I keep getting distracted by the list of creatures in your little piece of the earth. Sounds interesting. Good work with this challenge~Debbie

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Hi Debbie - yes, it is a rather weird menagerie. A little bit like Dr Dolittle.

Thanks for the kind comments :)

Craig

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Heart's on fire, this is a great take on this week's Potlatch challenge Craig. There has once again been a good variety for this challenge and now we look forward to next week.
cheers,

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Hi Pearl,

Yes, I wonder what Phyllis will throw at us for next time? I Look forward to finding out. See you in the next round :)

Craig

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Arggh, now I'm upset with myself for forgetting the Potlatch! Dang it.
So, you're burning with love for some lucky maiden (your wife, of course!). and only her touch will save you from hell!

She's kindled this love, whether intentionally or not ( we just don't know!) but the fact that you're left scorched by longing makes me suspect the latter ;)

The flames will not die (NO!)
The fire raging within
will not be put out! may I respectfully suggest "quenched" instead of "put out"? Just sounds more dramatic :)

Carol

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Hi Carol,
Thanks for the suggestion - I agree "quenched" is a stronger word. The way I'd started the last line, it left me a syllable short though.

Do you think "just cannot be quenched" works?

Many thanks,
Craig

reply by ciliverde on 22-May-2016

Yes, I think that line is perfect the way you have it!
Carol

reply by the author on 22-May-2016

OK, done - thanks again Carol :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your fire challenge poem. The picture is awesome. Your lines flow well. That certain someone that this was written to is lucky to have one who cares so much for her.

Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Thank you Jan for the lovely review. Very much appreciated :) Craig

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi Craige,
bless you, sitting there with a burning heart of desire just waiting for her to re-kindle the flames, so glad she did.
Great poem Craige.

Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Thanks, Brenda, your comments are always much appreciated :) Craig.

Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

This is a creative approach to the challenge, using fire as a metaphor for love. As always, I'm impressed with these potlach thingies, because you guys whodo this produce such good work in a short space of time. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Thanks, Emma, for the complimentary review - I think it's named "challenge" for a reason! Much appreciated, Craig.

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

This would be my normal theme, but something pissed me off right before Phyllis announced. HAHAHA!
Yeah, this is so right on the money. Exactly what it's like and there's nothing can be done about it. So irrational too. But, what can you do. What if she's not interested? Ahhhh ... read mine. LOL mikey

 Comment Written 22-May-2016

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reply by the author on 22-May-2016

I did read yours, it was the first one I looked at, and I posted my review while the challenge was officially still going lol

I remember thinking "hang on, this is Mikey's, and it's not a love poem???" It was still great stuff, if I recall correctly.

reply by michaelcahill on 22-May-2016

Yep. Rare. Something got me mad right before the challenge. HAHAHA! So, of course, I burned down the Earth. lol

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Craig,

I always look forward to reading your poetry.
You did a great job on this fire 5-7-5 trio:)
These are all very passionate and I like the
fire metaphor for love in the middle one.

These are all brilliant!
Linda

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Hi Linda,

It's funny. When I wrote it I conceived it as three "stanzas" of one continuous piece. And yet, you and a couple of other reviewers have seen them as separate poems. I see now, in retrospect, how that is a natural assumption. Thanks very much for the lovely encouraging words :) Craig.

reply by AnnaLinda on 21-May-2016

I kept wondering if they were of the same theme, or not. Complicated for my mind...wink;)