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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Scorpion and the Frog?"A delightful Childen Lesson Book.
3 total reviews
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This was just awesome! Loved the imagery and the insane presentation that makes me want to read your work even more!!!! I loved the verse:
"Hey, my name is Moe and what's do you know?"
"Oh, me?'
"Are you speaking to me the UGIEST Frog in the land?"
"Ah, your not so bad!"
"Look at me?'
"I'm black as the Ace of Spades and creepy with this STINGER!"
"But, don't be afraid, I just want to climb on your back for a ride?"
"We "scorps" can no longer breath under water or swim!?"
"Okay, but do you promise not to sting or bite me?"
"Oh, we only sting and that's just our "Natural instinct!"
Excellent, descriptive and very good language used to present your impression. Very good! God Bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 21-May-2016
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This was just awesome! Loved the imagery and the insane presentation that makes me want to read your work even more!!!! I loved the verse:
"Hey, my name is Moe and what's do you know?"
"Oh, me?'
"Are you speaking to me the UGIEST Frog in the land?"
"Ah, your not so bad!"
"Look at me?'
"I'm black as the Ace of Spades and creepy with this STINGER!"
"But, don't be afraid, I just want to climb on your back for a ride?"
"We "scorps" can no longer breath under water or swim!?"
"Okay, but do you promise not to sting or bite me?"
"Oh, we only sting and that's just our "Natural instinct!"
Excellent, descriptive and very good language used to present your impression. Very good! God Bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 20-May-2016
reply by the author on 21-May-2016
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The idea for this came from a STORY IN A HORROR MOVIE I RENTED!!!
Thanks again STALKER!!!
LOL!!
Ricky...
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lol...I did inform you at the start that I would be following you! hahahaha Look behind you and you will see me right on your tail!
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Funny but are you the sexy and naked one?
LOL!
Ricky...
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lmao at your response...If the sexy one and naked one are good looking, that would be me...hahahahahha
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DAMN! another HOTTIE got away!
LOL!
Ricky...
Gotta remember to get the number?
Ricky...
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You are too funny~! Thanks for making my 60 year-old day! (But, I don't even look 50! lol) God bless and hugs, Susanne
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You are too funny~! Thanks for making my 60 year-old day! (But, I don't even look 50! lol) God bless and hugs, Susanne
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21 and me neither!
LOL!
Ricky...
Comment from foxangie123
Exceptional and I so regret not being able to bless this great work with stars of six. It is amazing how you take circumstance and animate it or write it straight out. Fabulous work dear, fabulous. I miss talking with you.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Exceptional and I so regret not being able to bless this great work with stars of six. It is amazing how you take circumstance and animate it or write it straight out. Fabulous work dear, fabulous. I miss talking with you.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Just a gift from an Ugly Toad!
Thanks, darling!
Ricky1024.
Comment from marion
Once upon a time in the 'Land of So Unkind' lived a lonely and hideous frog named Toadie. And yes, Toadie was the gosh-darn ugliest frog that you would ever see!
He woke up {each and every day} and would pray and pray. He would pray to the 'Great Frog God' to make his dreams come true. He would pray to the 'Great Frog God' for the teasing and pains to go away. And he would look at his hideous reflection in 'The River of Unkind'.
Now I can understand and read it clearly. I have done away with all those not needed and confusing speech marks and all other clutter. I have used single quote marks either side where you have marked - not 'The River of Unkind" (double here). There is also a lot of question marks and other stuff at the beginning of this story?
Now I have done this, I find it a simple and delightful little fairy tale with a subtle lesson. Well done.
Marion.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Once upon a time in the 'Land of So Unkind' lived a lonely and hideous frog named Toadie. And yes, Toadie was the gosh-darn ugliest frog that you would ever see!
He woke up {each and every day} and would pray and pray. He would pray to the 'Great Frog God' to make his dreams come true. He would pray to the 'Great Frog God' for the teasing and pains to go away. And he would look at his hideous reflection in 'The River of Unkind'.
Now I can understand and read it clearly. I have done away with all those not needed and confusing speech marks and all other clutter. I have used single quote marks either side where you have marked - not 'The River of Unkind" (double here). There is also a lot of question marks and other stuff at the beginning of this story?
Now I have done this, I find it a simple and delightful little fairy tale with a subtle lesson. Well done.
Marion.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Well thanks..
'I think?
Ricky 1024.