Just Like Baseball
Five days of ecstasy8 total reviews
Comment from johnwilson
This is another gem from you. You have a new fan as I love to read writers with a sense of humor in what they write. I am not a sports fan unless you call playing tennis and swimming in the ocean which I do not follow on TV; however, I can spot a wonderful read when I see one. This is exceptional because it keeps the reader engaged through your use of our language. Nothing to correct hear...just need to read more...should be a winner!
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
This is another gem from you. You have a new fan as I love to read writers with a sense of humor in what they write. I am not a sports fan unless you call playing tennis and swimming in the ocean which I do not follow on TV; however, I can spot a wonderful read when I see one. This is exceptional because it keeps the reader engaged through your use of our language. Nothing to correct hear...just need to read more...should be a winner!
Comment Written 24-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thanks, John.
I don't write a lot of prose, although surprisingly my prose rating is higher than my poetry - go figure.
I'm glad you found the piece amusing. It was funnier still before I realised 1200 words wasn't acceptable and I had to slash it in half!
Steve
Comment from Narvik
I think I'll put this through one of those Google translator programs so I can read it in English. :-O
Hilarious, Steve. Beyond hilarious. You fit little witticisms everywhere, and the reader need not know anything about cricket to get them.
I know very little about the sport, but I do recall reading that the matches can take several days. That's mind-boggling. I tried to explain baseball to some Russians once, and it seemed so obvious to me that my explanation was crystal clear, but they kept telling me I wasn't making an sense.
Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed this, and it makes me want to find one of those flat bats and smack some cricket balls around.
Keep up the good work.
~ Jack
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
I think I'll put this through one of those Google translator programs so I can read it in English. :-O
Hilarious, Steve. Beyond hilarious. You fit little witticisms everywhere, and the reader need not know anything about cricket to get them.
I know very little about the sport, but I do recall reading that the matches can take several days. That's mind-boggling. I tried to explain baseball to some Russians once, and it seemed so obvious to me that my explanation was crystal clear, but they kept telling me I wasn't making an sense.
Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed this, and it makes me want to find one of those flat bats and smack some cricket balls around.
Keep up the good work.
~ Jack
Comment Written 23-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thanks, Jack. I'm glad you found the humour - it seems to have gone over the head of some readers (like a six in cricket or a home run in baseball)
Mind you, it was a lot funnier when I had 1200 words and going strong. Sadly, it was mostly jokes that ended up getting cut!
I truly appreciate getting a sixer from you for one of my rare forays into prose. I am still boggled that my prose rating is mysteriously higher than my poetry one.
Steve
Comment from Judy Couch
This is well written and is funny. I still don't understand how to play cricket but I'm not good at baseball either. Obviously, I'm not very sporty.
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
This is well written and is funny. I still don't understand how to play cricket but I'm not good at baseball either. Obviously, I'm not very sporty.
Comment Written 23-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thanks, Judy. You are obviously a couch-potato! ;O)
Steve
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi kiwisteve,
I read through your write on cricket. An entertaining piece with good humor, has a solid pleasing voice (very easy to read). I was reminded of a line from one of my favorite movies ... the ninja turtles, movie
Rapheal and Casey Jones are fighting, and Casey Jones is using sports weapons. He pulls out a cricket paddle (if it has a specific name, you might want to add it in this piece?)
Rapheal shouts at him: Cricket?! Nobody understands cricket! You gotta know what a crumpet is to understand cricket.
Casey Jones says, I'll teach you... hits Rapheal-- sends him flying into a garbage basket, and says... heh... that's six runs. : D
Sad that I know that by heart... line by line, I know. But it's instantly what I was thinking of as I read through this entertaining comparison of baseball and cricket.
Anyway, this was fun to read and I only have a few instances where I wanted to offer a few comma recheck suggestions for consideration if you like:
pitcher's mound[,]? while his partner scampers from the mound
certain that a nadir can be plumbed, but[,]? if it can, this
The batsman, in his turn, must defend his stumps[,]? while trying to hit the ball to a spot w
Perhaps[,] you may discover these things for yourself, if you are
(this was the only one I strongly wondered if was needed)
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
Hi kiwisteve,
I read through your write on cricket. An entertaining piece with good humor, has a solid pleasing voice (very easy to read). I was reminded of a line from one of my favorite movies ... the ninja turtles, movie
Rapheal and Casey Jones are fighting, and Casey Jones is using sports weapons. He pulls out a cricket paddle (if it has a specific name, you might want to add it in this piece?)
Rapheal shouts at him: Cricket?! Nobody understands cricket! You gotta know what a crumpet is to understand cricket.
Casey Jones says, I'll teach you... hits Rapheal-- sends him flying into a garbage basket, and says... heh... that's six runs. : D
Sad that I know that by heart... line by line, I know. But it's instantly what I was thinking of as I read through this entertaining comparison of baseball and cricket.
Anyway, this was fun to read and I only have a few instances where I wanted to offer a few comma recheck suggestions for consideration if you like:
pitcher's mound[,]? while his partner scampers from the mound
certain that a nadir can be plumbed, but[,]? if it can, this
The batsman, in his turn, must defend his stumps[,]? while trying to hit the ball to a spot w
Perhaps[,] you may discover these things for yourself, if you are
(this was the only one I strongly wondered if was needed)
Comment Written 21-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Thanks, Turtle.
I probably put myself at a disadvantage by writing about cricket, but that's OK. I had fun, and there was even more fun in there before I realised I had to chop it in half to meet the 700 word length condition.
Comment from jpduck
I began reading this in a fury at the outrageous statement represented by your title. But I soon forgave you, out of delight for your humorous description of the hallowed game. I ended feeling that the title must be part of the joke. I get there in the end.
No typos or SPAGs spotted.
Adrian
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
I began reading this in a fury at the outrageous statement represented by your title. But I soon forgave you, out of delight for your humorous description of the hallowed game. I ended feeling that the title must be part of the joke. I get there in the end.
No typos or SPAGs spotted.
Adrian
Comment Written 20-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Oh, yes, the while thing is a joke, and there were more laughs in there before I had to cut it in half!
Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from jane.fallon
Excellent.
Just one thing : Brackets need to be closed at "I kid you not".
It would have been good to talk about The Ashes and how it happened - how the stumps were burnt in disgust.
Well done.
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
Excellent.
Just one thing : Brackets need to be closed at "I kid you not".
It would have been good to talk about The Ashes and how it happened - how the stumps were burnt in disgust.
Well done.
Comment Written 20-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Thanks, Jane.
I had lots more to say, but had to leave a lot out. The Ashes is an interesting side-bar, but that's Australia v England and I am a Kiwi!
Comment from Kooky Clown
I have to confess that I am not a cricket fan well at least not the Test matches I can just about stomach the twenty twenty matches. However I do like the way you have described the game and how the US of A can maybe join the ranks of crickets elite in the future. A great read and most enjoyable. I will never watch a cricket match with the same view again.
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
I have to confess that I am not a cricket fan well at least not the Test matches I can just about stomach the twenty twenty matches. However I do like the way you have described the game and how the US of A can maybe join the ranks of crickets elite in the future. A great read and most enjoyable. I will never watch a cricket match with the same view again.
Comment Written 20-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Thanks, Kooky.
I believe I put myself at a disadvantage by writing about cricket, but I had fun anyway.
Comment from teols2016
Interesting commentary. I never gave cricket such in-depth consideration, but I'm glad to have read your description of it. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
Interesting commentary. I never gave cricket such in-depth consideration, but I'm glad to have read your description of it. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Thanks for the kind words.