The wishing well.
Delores Claiborne, her heroine.12 total reviews
Comment from Laurel Legion
The imagery your poem has is appropriately unsettling in terms of the gore present. However this also comes off as rather confusing as to understand just what is going on for the reader. Is your poem depicting some kind of black sacrifice? If so for what purpose? And what relationship does the woman have with the man she killed to add to become "another trophy" for some reason? The possible questions should be addressed/explained in some way, perhaps in the author notes. Otherwise, it could be difficult to grasp the scene your poem depicts. But nonetheless, good luck to you in the contest.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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The imagery your poem has is appropriately unsettling in terms of the gore present. However this also comes off as rather confusing as to understand just what is going on for the reader. Is your poem depicting some kind of black sacrifice? If so for what purpose? And what relationship does the woman have with the man she killed to add to become "another trophy" for some reason? The possible questions should be addressed/explained in some way, perhaps in the author notes. Otherwise, it could be difficult to grasp the scene your poem depicts. But nonetheless, good luck to you in the contest.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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The prompt was to simply paint a scene. I guess the motive could be open to interpretation but in my mind, she was a serial killer of men. Thanks for reviewing. Sorry it left you hanging.
Comment from frogbook
Fits the bill for evil. Frightening and haunting story well told in great poetic form. Good presentation. Best of luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Fits the bill for evil. Frightening and haunting story well told in great poetic form. Good presentation. Best of luck in the voting.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from foxangie123
You sure did paint a scene. I had read and reviewed this before yet it makes no difference as great is great. This entire piece is GREAT.
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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You sure did paint a scene. I had read and reviewed this before yet it makes no difference as great is great. This entire piece is GREAT.
Comment Written 14-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from danpald
Unfolds another poem
Of rape revenge told
For the need to be empowered
Comes with the cutting of shafting coward
How bloody these women
Understood for the crime
Still the wonder of the sensual
That comes with the poems write
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Unfolds another poem
Of rape revenge told
For the need to be empowered
Comes with the cutting of shafting coward
How bloody these women
Understood for the crime
Still the wonder of the sensual
That comes with the poems write
Comment Written 14-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Thank you for the astute review.
Comment from tony bronk
Evil, decimation, blood, castration, all lovely things and thoughts to ponder before going to sleep tonight seeing how it is Friday the 13th! A scary, gory poem. Excellent poem. Tony Bronk Wisconsin
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Evil, decimation, blood, castration, all lovely things and thoughts to ponder before going to sleep tonight seeing how it is Friday the 13th! A scary, gory poem. Excellent poem. Tony Bronk Wisconsin
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Thanks or the great review.
Comment from Lisa Deverick
This is wickedly good. A good creepy entry for sure! Sounds like this chic has done this before! (her trophies) It seems that the villains in this contest are mostly female...hmmm
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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This is wickedly good. A good creepy entry for sure! Sounds like this chic has done this before! (her trophies) It seems that the villains in this contest are mostly female...hmmm
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, I really liked this poem in all its horror. You certainly painted a crimson picture here.
In your subtitle: Delores Claiborne,her heroine = insert space after the comma.
Very well written and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Wow, I really liked this poem in all its horror. You certainly painted a crimson picture here.
In your subtitle: Delores Claiborne,her heroine = insert space after the comma.
Very well written and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thanks for the great review and the sharp eye. Corrected.
Comment from jonathan1
wow. this piece has strong imagery that steers the imagination. It has great rhythm when read aloud and flows well. It was a real pleasure to read this piece
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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wow. this piece has strong imagery that steers the imagination. It has great rhythm when read aloud and flows well. It was a real pleasure to read this piece
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thanks for the kind review and welcome to Fanstory.
Comment from Dawn Munro
YIKES - boy, does this one fit my mood tonight! Maybe even inspires me to write one! What a poem! "...inhaled his decimation..." This woman is a true psychopath. Chilling, gruesome and a scene right out of the worst horror movie - even a storm to cover it all up...(shudder)! Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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YIKES - boy, does this one fit my mood tonight! Maybe even inspires me to write one! What a poem! "...inhaled his decimation..." This woman is a true psychopath. Chilling, gruesome and a scene right out of the worst horror movie - even a storm to cover it all up...(shudder)! Good luck!
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thanks for the great review.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
I watched this movie twice I think. I love Kathy Bates in anything. The artwork is wonderful too and adds to the unique thriller-mode of the poem. Then the music
(piano) and all those graves. Well, the world is a hard place. GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I watched this movie twice I think. I love Kathy Bates in anything. The artwork is wonderful too and adds to the unique thriller-mode of the poem. Then the music
(piano) and all those graves. Well, the world is a hard place. GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thanks for the kind review.
