Comment from Toneyear

Excellent

LOL...Isn't that just like a kid, You sure ended the story on a excited note. No one knows if it is a trick or for real. LOL WOW.... Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 15-May-2016

Hi Toneyer! Thanks so much for your kind review. and I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your houghts for my micro story. I'm pleased you enjoyed the ending! Thanks.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

OH NO. The Zombie Apocalypse is here. This was a good contest entry. I liked your use of conversation to set the stage for your ending. Fun read

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks for your great review, Douglas! I'm so pleased you found the story fun and liked the dialogue. Thanks for your comments and taking the time to share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Excellent 100 word story. Very captivating. I'm not much into zombies and that type of thing but many are these days. Great way to end.

Teresa

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thank you, Teresa, for your kind review and comments for my micro story. I always appreciate your feedback.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

No way you'd get me out there. Basements aren't common in my country, so when I see them in so many horror and crime shows, they clearly are icons of the genres. Thus, placing you zombie/monster/killer in that outside basement saves a thousand words in scene building. We just know Robbie's in trouble the moment he shows bravado and heads down under. Great touch at the pointy end of business with the text message from hell. A clever and efficient short story. Great reading your prose works again. Good luck in the vote.

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

LOL those storm cellars can be very creepy, and I don't think most kids would hear or see all kinds of spooky stuff in them. Thank you, Mark, for your great review and taking the time to share your comments. It finished third in the contest, so I was very happy.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

The real suspense in a story is the part that is implied but not made clear or resolved. The fear that Robbie had of the storm cellar seems like a boy seeing ghosts under his bed until there is a cry for help that seems real, but the reader is left in suspense.

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thank you, Mary, for your kind review and for sharing your thoughts for my micro story. I appreciate your feedback.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ohhhhhh this is a good one, Karyn. The ending on the cell phone is enough to give me the heebeejeebies and I don't even watch Walking Dead.

Great job with a story told in exactly 100 words. It's not easy and you rose erm ... descended to the occasion with aplomb.

Gloria

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thank you, Gloria, for taking the time to read and write a review for my micro story. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your kind thoughts. I'm glad you liked it...even though it gave you some heebeejeebees.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from A.R. Curry

Excellent

Meat and entertaining and to top it off, it was all compressed into so few words. You did a good job with this.


Curry

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thank you, Curry, for taking the time to read and write a review for my micro story. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your kind thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Clarekr

Excellent

Well done for a 100 word story. Kind of made me laugh at the end though. I think the kid is just playing around. Nice job. I think it would have been more scary if he had to go out to the storm cellar at night. Good job.

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thank you, Clarekr, for taking the time to read and write a review for my micro story. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your kind thoughts. So glad you thought of my alternative ending! I don't think a kid would go anywhere near a scary cellar in the night. LOL
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is kind of weird. I guess a storm cellar can be haunted as easily as any other room or area of the house. It had a good ending.

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thanks for your review, Judy, and sharing your comments. I guess weird is good for a scary story? I'm glad you liked the ending. Thanks for your response.

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Strong dialogue, and a strong story.
I like the topicality of referencing
The Walking Dead.
I also think it was a good decision not to try to describe
the violence. with only 100 words, descriptions are too
word-hungry.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you, hw! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this micro story enough to award it a gold star. Thanks for your kind words and taking the time to write this great review. Not being a Walking Dead viewer, I guess I goofed up. According to Mr Horror, zombies never ever laugh. Who wouldda thought? Even Satan laughs. LOL

Thanks so much for your response, hw.