Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Jester at the Renaissance Faire"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from Sylvia Kennedy
I APPRECIATE YOUR EXPRESSION, BUT I AM OF THE OPINION WHICH MODERNIZES AND CONTEMPORIZES AND ELEVATES AND ENOBLES FROM
OLD ENGLISH STYLE.
CARE TO FAMILIARIZE YO SELF WITH
CHRISTINE AGUILERA SINGING CANDYMAN?
I AM ON THE FLIPPY SIDY AGAINST, OLD ENGLISH STYLE.
HAPPY EASTER.
SK
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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I APPRECIATE YOUR EXPRESSION, BUT I AM OF THE OPINION WHICH MODERNIZES AND CONTEMPORIZES AND ELEVATES AND ENOBLES FROM
OLD ENGLISH STYLE.
CARE TO FAMILIARIZE YO SELF WITH
CHRISTINE AGUILERA SINGING CANDYMAN?
I AM ON THE FLIPPY SIDY AGAINST, OLD ENGLISH STYLE.
HAPPY EASTER.
SK
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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I can do both, two mints in one. Ms. Aguilera rocks the house with "Say Something" too. Yeah, like her. Happy Easter. :)) mike
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VERY APPECIATIVE TO ALL OF YOU. I WILL DO BETTER, SORRY TO THOSE OF YOU, WHOM I FSILED. PLEASE, FORGIVE ME. SK
Comment from Dan-C
I really enjoyed your poem. I love how you described the wenches from bosoms pouring out to mounting them like a horse. Sounds like my kinda girl.
Thanks for sharing
Dan
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I really enjoyed your poem. I love how you described the wenches from bosoms pouring out to mounting them like a horse. Sounds like my kinda girl.
Thanks for sharing
Dan
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
Comment from ciliverde
LOL, Mikey, I've heard about the Renaissance Faire at Paramount Ranch, is this where you saw the...ummm...bounteous maiden? You know, it has a Shakespearean flair although the subject matter might be a bit...bold...for the old Bard. "Willy Shakes" indeed! So funny!
I'm sorry that you had to retreat to your own turf untrammeled, as it were. But at least there you are King, unchallenged, I imagine. Unless you're married(?) in which case...never mind ;)
Great poem, Mikey. I really will have to vote in this contest!
Carol
Lol, are you still behind the veil?
reply by the author on 11-May-2016
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LOL, Mikey, I've heard about the Renaissance Faire at Paramount Ranch, is this where you saw the...ummm...bounteous maiden? You know, it has a Shakespearean flair although the subject matter might be a bit...bold...for the old Bard. "Willy Shakes" indeed! So funny!
I'm sorry that you had to retreat to your own turf untrammeled, as it were. But at least there you are King, unchallenged, I imagine. Unless you're married(?) in which case...never mind ;)
Great poem, Mikey. I really will have to vote in this contest!
Carol
Lol, are you still behind the veil?
Comment Written 10-May-2016
reply by the author on 11-May-2016
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Well, it's been a while. I'm trying to recall where it was held. Pomona? San Bernardino? I'm guessing if Willy were here NOW, he'd be writing something similar or even a bit more randy than this. He was rather risque and funny and with the looser mores of today, I bet he'd be a card. LOL
I just altered the story about me going home untrammeled to make it more entertaining. Of course, that never happened in the real world. HAHAHAHA!!!! I didn't think this needed the veil, but I like to err on the side of caution. I don't want to offend, just shock and entice a bit. :)) mikey
Comment from Mark Valentine
Alas, would that I had a six that I might bestow upon this work of art (and that's just the picture - the poem wasn't bad either). This certainly rivals the Bard in its ribaldry and cleverness. It also gives voice to that age-old truth: when the beast with two backs cannot be summoned, at least we can take solace in knowing that, upon return to our castle, we can again assume our status as Master of Our Domain (can you mix Shakespeare and Seinfeld?).
I read pantygynt's review - together they make a magnificent pair! (speaking of magnificent pairs, the wench in the middle...). This is masterful!
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Alas, would that I had a six that I might bestow upon this work of art (and that's just the picture - the poem wasn't bad either). This certainly rivals the Bard in its ribaldry and cleverness. It also gives voice to that age-old truth: when the beast with two backs cannot be summoned, at least we can take solace in knowing that, upon return to our castle, we can again assume our status as Master of Our Domain (can you mix Shakespeare and Seinfeld?).
I read pantygynt's review - together they make a magnificent pair! (speaking of magnificent pairs, the wench in the middle...). This is masterful!
Comment Written 10-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I talked PG into posting his. LOL He revised it into a gem. Seinfeld always struck me as a latter day Shakespeare....
I loved that picture. I figured, add a caption and I'm good to go. mikey
Comment from I am Cat
oh... oh my... lol
go for it, my dear! ;)
His staff, it seems, her syrup soon to sluice;
while I am left to tend to my own turf
(heheheh, in the words of Dean)
too funny.
well... perhaps you should have whipped out the goods, my dear?
I've gone to a few of these faires... lots of T's showing... LOTS of them.
Stretched beyond recognition. ;)
well written, my dear... and great luck in the contest. I think Willy would approve... after all, his nickname...(well, you figure it out) ;)
Hugs
C
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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oh... oh my... lol
go for it, my dear! ;)
His staff, it seems, her syrup soon to sluice;
while I am left to tend to my own turf
(heheheh, in the words of Dean)
too funny.
well... perhaps you should have whipped out the goods, my dear?
I've gone to a few of these faires... lots of T's showing... LOTS of them.
Stretched beyond recognition. ;)
well written, my dear... and great luck in the contest. I think Willy would approve... after all, his nickname...(well, you figure it out) ;)
Hugs
C
Comment Written 10-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Well, I altered the story to amuse the madding crowd. Of course in the real world I tore that fair up, girl!! HAHAHAHA!
They're the best fun. They sell cool instruments there. I always end up playing harps and stuff. Oh yeah, nerd o ramma. There isn't the slightest chance they'll consider this. LOL
That's okay. Good times. mikey
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very cleverly written sonnet, my friend. I like it. I'm sure based on subject matter, the judges will toss it out, but what the heck, I found it entertaining. It is interesting to think what Shakespeare would write were he alive today. Good work, mikey~Debbie
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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This is a very cleverly written sonnet, my friend. I like it. I'm sure based on subject matter, the judges will toss it out, but what the heck, I found it entertaining. It is interesting to think what Shakespeare would write were he alive today. Good work, mikey~Debbie
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Oh yeah. I know they'll toss it. I figured that when I started so I pulled out all the stops. LOL
I think Bill would be writing along these lines or beyond. He was pretty bold in his time. mikey
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, I don't know...what's the big deal ???....don't you just love there little bonnets ???...alright Shakespeare...go have a drink on me...LOL...your poem made me laugh you...well done sweet boy...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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HI Michael, I don't know...what's the big deal ???....don't you just love there little bonnets ???...alright Shakespeare...go have a drink on me...LOL...your poem made me laugh you...well done sweet boy...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Aren't they darling. They match the eyes perfectly. Yes, another drink. That's exactly what I need. LOL Glad you enjoyed. Lots of fun to write. I'm sure it will win. I know the committee will just LOVE it. HA! mikey xxooiixx
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I hope you do win...or already have...I haven't check the contest winner yet...Damn...yea!!! great eye's...that what I was looking at...hummmmm...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment from GWHARGIS
You naughty rascal. Lol. I loved the end line of this. Just so wrong, but I couldn't help but laugh. Great style and the perfect picture to accompany your work. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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You naughty rascal. Lol. I loved the end line of this. Just so wrong, but I couldn't help but laugh. Great style and the perfect picture to accompany your work. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I just have to be wrong every once in a while to get it out of my system. Then I'm okay. LOL Glad you liked it. Too much fun. I'm sure the committee will love it too!!!! mikey
Comment from strandregs
I was pondering all along about willy shakes all the way tothe bottom.
then I got it. I think .
yes I definetly missed a bottom line
in this poem.
Something efemeral like.
if bottoms went to battle
bossoms there would rattle.
:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I was pondering all along about willy shakes all the way tothe bottom.
then I got it. I think .
yes I definetly missed a bottom line
in this poem.
Something efemeral like.
if bottoms went to battle
bossoms there would rattle.
:-)) Z.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I like that. It's a universal truth too except for the bosomly challenged, poor things. A good couplet to end things. Poetically and for the gentleman involved as well. mikey
Comment from Ric Myworld
I tip my hat, too, to the lovely lass adorned in black
Her frock-rocking bundled boobies squeezed ever so tightly
Tip toeing over her left shoulder, oh, my bent aching back
Sounds of windshield wipers in motion, kissing firm breasts so lightly
Romps are the bomb with the fair maiden's round, bubbled rump
Smelling so sweet and ready to eat, I'm a kid in a candy store
Vivid visions overwhelming, sweat raised from the rear humping her bump
Frenzied lascivious aggression until our energies are there no more
Mine eyes open to find no one there, all alone
Where has thou red-headed beauty with the package gone?
Okay, okay, so I'm just being silly. LOL! This is the first poem I've ever written with even the slightest resemblance of a sonnet. Written in seven minutes without checking to see if anything is right or wrong. Of course, you know that which I don't know, and that's anything about what is and isn't proper. Thanks for another outstanding poem that makes even a total beginner like me have a rhythmic melody of words in my thick, impenetrable head. Great job, Mikey. :-)
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I tip my hat, too, to the lovely lass adorned in black
Her frock-rocking bundled boobies squeezed ever so tightly
Tip toeing over her left shoulder, oh, my bent aching back
Sounds of windshield wipers in motion, kissing firm breasts so lightly
Romps are the bomb with the fair maiden's round, bubbled rump
Smelling so sweet and ready to eat, I'm a kid in a candy store
Vivid visions overwhelming, sweat raised from the rear humping her bump
Frenzied lascivious aggression until our energies are there no more
Mine eyes open to find no one there, all alone
Where has thou red-headed beauty with the package gone?
Okay, okay, so I'm just being silly. LOL! This is the first poem I've ever written with even the slightest resemblance of a sonnet. Written in seven minutes without checking to see if anything is right or wrong. Of course, you know that which I don't know, and that's anything about what is and isn't proper. Thanks for another outstanding poem that makes even a total beginner like me have a rhythmic melody of words in my thick, impenetrable head. Great job, Mikey. :-)
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Hell. That's damn good. It wouldn't take much fiddling at all to turn that right into a top sonnet. It's almost there. Great imagery, funny, perfect rhythm and perfect rhyme. See what you can do in no time. You've got to show up this Saturday. 5-7-5 suites. Piece of cake. Pretty girls. Can't go wrong. mikey
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I am going to join you verse jockeys one of these Saturday evenings, unfortunately, it won't be this one. Of course, you always make me feel so welcome that I will have to soon. This week my daughter is graduating from college and expects me to be there. Hope you all have a wonderful time! Ric :-)
