Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This all the way around is beautiful by itself or as entry to the contest. The picture of choice is a nice addition to the lines. Best of wishes at voting.

 Comment Written 07-May-2016

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Comment from Teri7

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and good imagery with the art work. It was a joy to read and to review. Good luck in the contest. Tei

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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reply by the author on 06-May-2016

Thank you for your review

reply by Teri7 on 06-May-2016

you are welcome. Teri

Comment from clawhammer

Good

I really like the premise of your poem and how it takes the reader through the seasons in all their wrath and beauty. The flow seems a bit choppy and some of the shifting seems too abrupt like "...cool winds blow, cloudy, bursts of...". Overall Autumn feels like it need to be expanded upon in this poem. But again, I do like the subject matter and well done using the repetitive line.

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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reply by the author on 06-May-2016

Thank you

reply by the author on 06-May-2016

Hi-thanks again for your review-I decided to edit and I think it now flows more smoothly than b4.

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

You have followed the requirements of form by repeating the same line three times. Repetition can move the action along while it touches back on what has been said. You succeed at moving the action as the seasons change and within that change there is the smaller change from day to night. well done

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your picture is perfect. Love it !

You did a great job with the prompt. Your repeated line fits in nicely without seeming forces. I like the descriptive words your used for each season. Then you tied it all together with your repeated line.

Good job and best wishes in the contest.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Your repetition poem highlights the night and day through the different seasons. You create wonderful imagery that stimulates comfort visions in the memory.

Great job, and good luck in the contest,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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