Comment from Ima L. Ami

Exceptional

This is a remarkable poem that truly captures the essence of the horrors so many young people are facing these days. I love how you used the terms, "instant messenger" and "server" to associate the www to this emptiness that young people are experiencing.

 Comment Written 08-May-2016

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reply by the author on 09-May-2016

Thank you for the awesome review and the bonus star.

reply by Ima L. Ami on 09-May-2016

You are quite welcome!

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

You've employed an excellent free verse technique here to express the pain and despair of the street child. There are some wonderful phrases and lines that carry the imagery and emotion within your verse. Eg
To fill the vacancy reflected, a barren stretch of sadness. Your use of contemporary social media images adds an immediacy to this social disgrace of our time. Very cool poem, very sad too.

 Comment Written 07-May-2016

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reply by the author on 07-May-2016

Thanks for the stellar review.

Comment from jonathan1

Excellent

Wow this really is a beautiful and interesting piece. Easy to read, good format. I love its relevance and subject matter. Love the simplicity

 Comment Written 07-May-2016

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reply by the author on 07-May-2016

Thanks for reviewing. Glad you liked it.

Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

I found this to be gripping and heart breaking at the same time. It is pitiful that these children are on the street in all countries, states and cities. You make a reader ponder this sad truth with your words.

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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reply by the author on 06-May-2016

Thank you for the great review.

Comment from Sambangi

Excellent

Sad state of affairs....very painful....you depicted very well with choicest words and form. Think tank of the world left many issues like this to rot.
Wish you all the best in the contest

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

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reply by the author on 06-May-2016

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from tony bronk

Excellent

A very warm, touching, seemingly accurate poem of a desolate teen not knowing where to go in life. you wrote about the experience with real sensitivity. Good luck! Tony Bronk

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 06-May-2016

thanks for the kind review.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a very emotional free verse about ayoung girl who was somehow mistreated or used in a way she didn't want to.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thank you for reviewing.

reply by dragonpoet on 05-May-2016

Any time.

dp

Comment from Joyce Long

Excellent

This picture and your poem are so sad. Best wishes on The Human Condition contest. You chose to write on the sadness of the world. I haven't entered the contest, but I would write on the glory of the world. I just look at life as one huge party. Sometimes I have to sit on the sidelines. Well done.
Joyce 05-05-16

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Ha ha good for you, celebrate. Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from RosieCus

Excellent

A poignant poem about the loneliness and sadness of a street child, and uncaring passers by. Well written.

Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thank you for reviewing.

reply by RosieCus on 05-May-2016

You're welcome

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

What a sad statement on the world and the human condition. This image is so haunting and poignant and your poem is laid out is a very smart fashion - it's striking and bold. Normally, I'm telling authors, "increase the font, increase the font!" but here that tiny font, on that black background works beautifully to create that stark contrast your poem needs. Great job.

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thank you for the awesome review.