"The Book of Jay 1984 to 2003"
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Memory Box1984 to 2003 "My Son Jason's Life.
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Comment from WalkerMan
Since this is a deeply felt and somewhat painful personal religious story, I will restrict my comments to technical details. Specifically, a good proofreader could help you fix simple matters of minor typing mistakes, special characters that the site handles improperly (see the start of line 5 under the picture), and consistency. This book is a needed cathartic process for you, and in such a highly emotional state you understandably miss these little things that a dispassionate proofreader will catch. From your rankings, I doubt you'd make these silly slips when writing on a less sensitive topic. Losing a child is probably the worst possible event in a parent's life, and the pain really never quite goes away. So, make it easier on yourself by engaging a proofreader (rather than an editor who might alter your words). I can recommend a great one at affordable price (none of it to me) if you ask. She was a welcome sharp set of extra eyes as I approached publication of a 300-page anthology of illustrated poetry not long ago. You'll thank yourself later for making this legacy work the best it can be.
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Since this is a deeply felt and somewhat painful personal religious story, I will restrict my comments to technical details. Specifically, a good proofreader could help you fix simple matters of minor typing mistakes, special characters that the site handles improperly (see the start of line 5 under the picture), and consistency. This book is a needed cathartic process for you, and in such a highly emotional state you understandably miss these little things that a dispassionate proofreader will catch. From your rankings, I doubt you'd make these silly slips when writing on a less sensitive topic. Losing a child is probably the worst possible event in a parent's life, and the pain really never quite goes away. So, make it easier on yourself by engaging a proofreader (rather than an editor who might alter your words). I can recommend a great one at affordable price (none of it to me) if you ask. She was a welcome sharp set of extra eyes as I approached publication of a 300-page anthology of illustrated poetry not long ago. You'll thank yourself later for making this legacy work the best it can be.
Comment Written 01-May-2016
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noticed this comment on the review is coming to an LG Android phone with complete run-on sentences no punctuation marks and grammatical errors this phone allowsno spelling as it is miniscule nor will it properly read out the words sometimes Bi-Rite amen it comes out semen I had a female review or read it and started to laugh and said you like my poetry is dangerous you will get pregnant and reading it so on and so on but I have thanks for your kind of you even though you only gave it 4 stars quite a few others game of fives and sixes Ricky 10:40
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The higher numbers may be kinder to your present feelings but provide little help in improving the work to the best possible state to be the loving memorial you intend. I care about how you will feel ten or twenty years from now.
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thanks for stopping by it and reading the memory box normally work like this which of course will stand on its own two feet will Walmart a blue ribbon and possibly All Times best depends on whether or notand it seems that level to the reviewers who grade properly Mike Freeman imagery not buy whether or not there is a misspelled word I never take the Stars away for that most of the time I won't even clean out if there's a problem with the grammar and less than and more than one instance and then I learned person so they can correct it I don't take any stars away this way I make proper contacts and friends I have people who have fallen in love with my work here I'm very well respected by writers like Bret West Wing quotes Jack's Franklin Margaret Snowden the number one level is cuts and paste my stories from my shed more tears fairy tales and fables books which is one of six hundred fifty bucks that I have created and about 10% of them have been properly presented on this site just like that poem memory boxes from the new books spiritually thinking of you so is it a new member here the first thing you need to do as a teen friendship my proper reviews I don't take points are stars away don't give her a 4-star reviews - 6 star Blue Ribbon Works read them respect them and learn from them I say these words in the name of Jesus Christ amen and good luck
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Your message is understood and I know is heartfelt. I'll skip rather than give three or fewer stars, but four means "almost there with minor adjustments" which to me means constructive criticism helpful to the recipient without bashing his or her work. Those who have received fours from me have all written back to thank me for my detailed helpful comments. I feel they then know they have earned the fifth star, and they're quite happy with what they have learned. So, let's you and I agree to be our different selves in this respect. That way, the reviewed work benefits both from your encouragement and my gentle instruction. Everyone wins.
Comment from candyfink
I think you are a talented writer. You have a gift of writing and words. Keep writing and sharing your talent. Blessings to you.
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I think you are a talented writer. You have a gift of writing and words. Keep writing and sharing your talent. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 01-May-2016
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I thank you candy bar for stopping by or should I say Miss Hershey bar or Eminem's or Miss first kiss because you never told me what your favorite candy bar was sure to catch my latest post coming up short of misery yours it is quite exhilarating ride which I just told xhilaration enjoy it but it is quiteparental rating ride thanks candy bar Ricky 1024
Comment from foxangie123
You are such a blessing to each of us here especially me. Your gifted talent through writing keeps me going as I again face the same as I did with Amie and you with Ricky. Pray for me please. You inspire me to keep going. A best friend indeed you are.
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You are such a blessing to each of us here especially me. Your gifted talent through writing keeps me going as I again face the same as I did with Amie and you with Ricky. Pray for me please. You inspire me to keep going. A best friend indeed you are.
Comment Written 01-May-2016
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and double thanks again baby I will work on the 6th our favor
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Xo.
Comment from LisaD123
This is a highly original piece of writing. The reader is gripped immediately with the ideas and follows the poem in order to learn and share experiences. Thanks for sharing.
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This is a highly original piece of writing. The reader is gripped immediately with the ideas and follows the poem in order to learn and share experiences. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-May-2016
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Forever thanks forever. From my heart a d Jays...
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