Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "For Better For Worse"This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
21 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
A truly inspiring final poem FionaGeorge - both as the
finale to your NAaPoMoWr and as a submission to the
Faith Poetry Contest. You have expressed the depth of
love and faith you share with your husband :-)
And so the final poem is writ
upon this journey Kim set off
we've shared our hearts, our art, our wit -
to each who played, my hat I doff :-)
We've seen odes penned to poets
and Mother Goose re-imagined.
Seen faces of love and Elvis refits;
even thrilled at a travelogue whirlwind.
We've witnessed inspired ekphrasis
and devotion to meter and rhymes.
Seen exhibitions of muse on the fritz
and explored both beginnings...and troubled times.
Observations and reflections led the way
as we practiced poetic endeavors
and many a new form was put on display!
Reading these works has been such a pleasure!!!
Over 550 postings guys! And that's without
counting our ride along partners [like Joy Graham and
tfawcus] in this project :-)
(P.S. Please know I did read every poem posted...I just
lacked the ability and time to review all of them.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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A truly inspiring final poem FionaGeorge - both as the
finale to your NAaPoMoWr and as a submission to the
Faith Poetry Contest. You have expressed the depth of
love and faith you share with your husband :-)
And so the final poem is writ
upon this journey Kim set off
we've shared our hearts, our art, our wit -
to each who played, my hat I doff :-)
We've seen odes penned to poets
and Mother Goose re-imagined.
Seen faces of love and Elvis refits;
even thrilled at a travelogue whirlwind.
We've witnessed inspired ekphrasis
and devotion to meter and rhymes.
Seen exhibitions of muse on the fritz
and explored both beginnings...and troubled times.
Observations and reflections led the way
as we practiced poetic endeavors
and many a new form was put on display!
Reading these works has been such a pleasure!!!
Over 550 postings guys! And that's without
counting our ride along partners [like Joy Graham and
tfawcus] in this project :-)
(P.S. Please know I did read every poem posted...I just
lacked the ability and time to review all of them.
Comment Written 01-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi Leineco, thank you for your generous review. I have just returned home and apologise for the delay in my response. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your strong faith in your husband--a most important ally in life. I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains and the expression of love. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you for sharing your strong faith in your husband--a most important ally in life. I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains and the expression of love. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi agin, Joan. Thank you for your generous review. I have just returned home and apologise for the delay in my response. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Never apologize for responding! I'm joining the club--just returned from China and terribly jet-lagged! Hugs and happy weemend- Joan
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose for your poem
It is a perfect match.
How bless you are to have a caring and loving husband God bless you both.
Thank you for sharing the uplifting write.
Have a blessed Sunday.
Cookie
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I love the artwork you choose for your poem
It is a perfect match.
How bless you are to have a caring and loving husband God bless you both.
Thank you for sharing the uplifting write.
Have a blessed Sunday.
Cookie
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Hello Cookie. Nice to see you are still here. I've been away for 2-3 years, and came back a few weeks ago. Am enjoying being here again, and catching up with some old friends. Thanks for your lovely review and your string of stars. Much appreciated. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Once again welcome back, And you're very welcome.
Cookie
Comment from l.raven
HI Leslie, that is what a marriage is about...when push comes to shove...you are both there for each other... you are secure in your love...very nicely written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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HI Leslie, that is what a marriage is about...when push comes to shove...you are both there for each other... you are secure in your love...very nicely written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Hi Linda... Leslie??? LOL! Got me mixed up? Thanks for your lovely review, my friend,. and that lovely string of stars. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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ok!!! now I know it is time to hit the sack...LOL...I am on my way to bed...I am so sorry Marijke...and you are so very welcome...warmest regards to you as well...sweet dreams sweet girl...xxoo Linda
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Good night... sweet dreams. Marijke :o)
Comment from Grace_ET_0427
I love poems written as tributes (or "shout-outs," if you will) for others because the meaning comes through that much more clearly, and with more emotion and emphasis behind it. Your poem is a true testament to the kind of relationship many people only long to experience in their lives. I feel like congratulating you! :)
Truly, I have a single suggestion for you to consider. I'm loving the rhyme scheme and the syllabic rhythm you've established ... all except for the rhythm in line 9. Somehow, those words together --- even though I know there are still eight syllables there! --- don't flow as neatly as the other eight-syllabic lines in the poem. (It could also just be me, so take my suggestion with a grain of salt.)
What would you think about perhaps rephrasing it to something like this instead?
"Nights when I feel that there's no use"
I can't quite explain it, but the revision (above) feels more "in keeping" with the "da-DA da-DA da-DA da-DA" rhythm you've got established elsewhere.
Even though line 9 as it stands still has the same eight syllables.
Maybe it's just me. By all means, play with options, rearrange words, or just leave yours exactly the way it is. :)
Best wishes!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I love poems written as tributes (or "shout-outs," if you will) for others because the meaning comes through that much more clearly, and with more emotion and emphasis behind it. Your poem is a true testament to the kind of relationship many people only long to experience in their lives. I feel like congratulating you! :)
Truly, I have a single suggestion for you to consider. I'm loving the rhyme scheme and the syllabic rhythm you've established ... all except for the rhythm in line 9. Somehow, those words together --- even though I know there are still eight syllables there! --- don't flow as neatly as the other eight-syllabic lines in the poem. (It could also just be me, so take my suggestion with a grain of salt.)
What would you think about perhaps rephrasing it to something like this instead?
"Nights when I feel that there's no use"
I can't quite explain it, but the revision (above) feels more "in keeping" with the "da-DA da-DA da-DA da-DA" rhythm you've got established elsewhere.
Even though line 9 as it stands still has the same eight syllables.
Maybe it's just me. By all means, play with options, rearrange words, or just leave yours exactly the way it is. :)
Best wishes!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Hi Grace, thank you so much for your kind review and comments and suggestions. They are truly appreciated. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from CD Richards
What a fantastic approach to the faith concept, and one which I personally find more satisfying than some other interpretations. A wonderful tribute to your husband, and perfectly written, as far as rhyme and meter goes.
Oddly enough, I just wrote a poem yesterday using exactly the same rhyme and meter scheme, but it's for a project and isn't available yet.
Well done, Marijke - best of luck in the contest!
Craig
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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What a fantastic approach to the faith concept, and one which I personally find more satisfying than some other interpretations. A wonderful tribute to your husband, and perfectly written, as far as rhyme and meter goes.
Oddly enough, I just wrote a poem yesterday using exactly the same rhyme and meter scheme, but it's for a project and isn't available yet.
Well done, Marijke - best of luck in the contest!
Craig
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Hi Craig, thank you so much for your kind review and comments and observations. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from dragonpoet
These abcb quatrains show how much faith in the right person can help you live your life. This strong love keeps you both living the best life you can.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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These abcb quatrains show how much faith in the right person can help you live your life. This strong love keeps you both living the best life you can.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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Dragonpoet, thank you so much for this kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Any time, Merijke.
Joan
Comment from William Ross
very nice, a great poem of faith for the prompt and great entry in your book. Great rhyming and great read. good luck on this and have a good day.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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very nice, a great poem of faith for the prompt and great entry in your book. Great rhyming and great read. good luck on this and have a good day.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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William, thank you so much for this kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Dutchie
A poem to my heart, Marijke and a well deserved tribute to George.
Always ready to help.Maybe not the most romantic person on earth, but you can trust him totally and he's always there when you need him. Nice flow and rhyme
and well chosen words to express your love for him. Lots of love and smiles from miles Fietje xxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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A poem to my heart, Marijke and a well deserved tribute to George.
Always ready to help.Maybe not the most romantic person on earth, but you can trust him totally and he's always there when you need him. Nice flow and rhyme
and well chosen words to express your love for him. Lots of love and smiles from miles Fietje xxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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Fietje, thank you so much for this lovely and long string of six stars, my friend. I love your nice words about George. Yes, although he drives me mad sometimes... he is my rock! Love and warmest regards, with miles of happy smiles... Marijke :o) xxxxxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. You did a great job expressing your faith in your husband.
I believe faith is something you feel or something you know as a result of actions. It is hard to put faith into words, although you did a great job of that.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed your poem. You did a great job expressing your faith in your husband.
I believe faith is something you feel or something you know as a result of actions. It is hard to put faith into words, although you did a great job of that.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016
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Jannypan, thank you so much for this kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)