Comment from sage17611

Excellent

This is a well written poem, I like the message, and the picture is spot on in depicting the words. Good use of syllables, although short the poem has a nice flow. Good concept of the stars. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016

Thanks! Glad you liked the message and picture in this short poem. Appreciate your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Hmmm, sorry I missed this on the first go-round! I saw that you had won this unusual contest and had to come see what a Joseph's Poem looked like AND congratulate you. Good work!

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it ... ;o)

Comment from tony bronk

Excellent

A very beautiful poem mixed with the celestial and the heavens both. It is colorful and vivid, and I felt good reading it. Tony

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks, Tony - I'm happy this poem made you feel good. Appreciate your comments ... ;-)

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is encouraging and uplifting. Wishing on a star can be fun. It includes a belief in magic. Maybe the wish will come true this time.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks. Happy you found this poem encouraging and uplifting. Appreciate your comments ... ;-)

Comment from BruceMiller

Excellent

I think that you certainly have created a prime example of the prompt's requirements. I'd be surprised if you did not win. Cheers.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks. Appreciate your comments ... ;-)

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Wow! Just gave you a thumbs up. You were 1st place tie with three votes. Now you're 1s t place by yourself with 4 votes by yoursel. Swirling and twirling with mystical magic filled with alliterations making music. Check me out also. liberty justice

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Beautiful music greeted me when I click on Liberty Justice. And, I see you've written books that I should read. You also wrote a wonderful tribute to Prince, with lots of song titles. One of my favorite songs was Raspberry Beret which was constantly played on the radio back in 1985 when I was on tour with 4 rock and roll bands from the 60's (Happy Together Tour '85) . I also see that you really, really enjoy FanStory. I've been on FanStory for 10 years, though lately I don't have as much time for it that I used to have.

Glad you enjoyed this short poem. I've never tried a Joseph's Star poetic form before so I thought I'd give it a go.
Appreciate all your comments, and the vote! Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from VaV-VOOM

Excellent

Beautiful poem with an excellent picture to match. I really enjoyed this review, it's very soft, and touching with a wonderful flow. Great job! Write On! VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hey ... thanks! Glad you enjoyed this poem and picture. Appreciate your comments ... ;-)

reply by VaV-VOOM on 27-Apr-2016

Great poem, and your welcome.VaV-VOOM1

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is so very beautiful as entry and the picture adds so much. You did a wonderful job as entry or a poem standing on its own. Love it.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed this poem and picture. Appreciate your comments ... ;-)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A great message in your Joseph Star poem. When we wish upon the stars the little angels will deliver our wises and dreams back to earth.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed the message. Appreciate your comments .... ;o)

Comment from Pantygynt

Good

While this little piece makes perfect sense as a whole and conforms to the syllabic requirements of the form, the most difficult aspect of the form is not covered here the rules state that it "should have complete statements in each line". This quite clearly does not hapeen in this entry.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Interesting point. I checked out shadowpoetry's rules for this form and the example by the person who created this form. She used the word, "I" many times. I wondered how the 1 syllable words for each stanza could be considered complete statements. Also, her example, which was written about the passing of her father, didn't seem to have complete statements so I wondered what she wanted to convey and what was the point of this somewhat confusing rule - does that mean staccato statements with no enjambment, etc? I decided that enjambment was okay. Do appreciate your comments.