Christine's Poems
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Autumn already! We're just getting real spring weather.
-Glad you could get out and enjoy the sun.
-Good image and well written poem with good rhyme, imagery and meter.
-I like how you have personified the sun and given it a real personality.
-Great conclusion, ending with
"The pleasure's mine; your loving SUN"
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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-Autumn already! We're just getting real spring weather.
-Glad you could get out and enjoy the sun.
-Good image and well written poem with good rhyme, imagery and meter.
-I like how you have personified the sun and given it a real personality.
-Great conclusion, ending with
"The pleasure's mine; your loving SUN"
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi respa1. Thank you again for your review for my work. And yes Autumn nearly finished only one month left. and so far the waether has been lovely. so one must take all advantages it offers and especially the brain. works better when it is warm LOL.
Glad you enjoyed this Cheers to you Christine😀
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You are very welcome. Always interesting to hear about another place in the world. I guess you better just write and store it all up:)
Comment from rspoet
This is one sunny poem
a ray of sunshine after a cold winter here
but autumn in Australia
Ironically, it's warm here as well
Excellent rhymes and interesting personification of the sun
Clever way of writing an intimate, sensual poem
"like two lovers newly wed"
You can always count on the sun
even on a cloudy day
He's up there shining away
Excellent fanstory art to match poem
Well done
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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This is one sunny poem
a ray of sunshine after a cold winter here
but autumn in Australia
Ironically, it's warm here as well
Excellent rhymes and interesting personification of the sun
Clever way of writing an intimate, sensual poem
"like two lovers newly wed"
You can always count on the sun
even on a cloudy day
He's up there shining away
Excellent fanstory art to match poem
Well done
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi rspoet. Yes the sun is always there but hides away a lot and I just hang out for spring and summer. bit this autumn is gorgeous too so being spoiled . couldn't resist writing this Glad you thought it well done . As always a big Thanks and Cheers Christine😀
Comment from I. J. Fox
A fantastic analogy. Nicely done. I appreciate personification of anything that is inanimate, haha. This was an enjoyable read. Slightly quaint somehow, perhaps missing a bit gravity, but then, that may not have been your intention. It sounded like it almost had a certain weight to it, but it maintained a bit of a two-dimensional quality that left it rather light in nature (no pun intended, haha). Even pacing and lovely rhythm.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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A fantastic analogy. Nicely done. I appreciate personification of anything that is inanimate, haha. This was an enjoyable read. Slightly quaint somehow, perhaps missing a bit gravity, but then, that may not have been your intention. It sounded like it almost had a certain weight to it, but it maintained a bit of a two-dimensional quality that left it rather light in nature (no pun intended, haha). Even pacing and lovely rhythm.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi I. J.Fox. Thanks you very much for reading my poem re the Sun . I love to have a sunbake and couldn't let this opportunity to go by without a poem. So it kept me busy for some time while enjoying the warm rays. I wanted to have a light hearted, analogy of the sun and how it makes me feel. I love even rhythm and pure rhyme. Glad you stopped by Many Cheers Christine😀
Comment from evesayshi
Ah, Christine, this is another way we can relate - this poem is exceptional - I absolutely LOVED the read. As a Sagittarian, I am a fire/sun sign, devoted to the sun completely - I used to sun bathe as my preferred activity, nude when I could. It was not only warming, but it energized me to my very soul - this work is OUTSTANDING...
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Ah, Christine, this is another way we can relate - this poem is exceptional - I absolutely LOVED the read. As a Sagittarian, I am a fire/sun sign, devoted to the sun completely - I used to sun bathe as my preferred activity, nude when I could. It was not only warming, but it energized me to my very soul - this work is OUTSTANDING...
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Eve, so glad you liked this and thanks so much for your gorgeous review and six starsxx Yes I don't have much on either Ha Ha can't get strap marks . Oh yes it does energize my soul too I love the sun. I am a librian so have be even Ha Ha. Loved you review my friend.. Send more sprites LOL Cheers Christine 😀😀
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You are so welcome, Christine - this poem is a real gem, worth every star! Yes, as a Librian, you are definitely well balanced...
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Ha Ha Eve I can also be indecisive at time but I do like balance and fairness C
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Can't we all - life is so unpredictable today - we have to be flexible to survive...
Comment from creativepenname
I've read a lot of great poetry, but this exceeded my expectations. I love how it was easy to understand, yet your words weren't overused and didn't cause it to sound bland at any point. It painted a beautiful picture.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I've read a lot of great poetry, but this exceeded my expectations. I love how it was easy to understand, yet your words weren't overused and didn't cause it to sound bland at any point. It painted a beautiful picture.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi creativepenname. Wow what a lovely comment for my poem I am so pleased you though it easy to understand and not bland exceeding you expectation I am really humbled by your words and Thank you very much. Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Liberty Justice
Beautiful and charming. Reader feels the warmth and love when reading poem. Such a glowing and loving writing. Dashed with metaphors and descriptive adjectives that reach out and grab your very soul. liberty justice
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Beautiful and charming. Reader feels the warmth and love when reading poem. Such a glowing and loving writing. Dashed with metaphors and descriptive adjectives that reach out and grab your very soul. liberty justice
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Liberty Justice. I am so pleased that you got so much from my poem and thanks you for your lovely comments. It was heartfelt as I was enjoying the beautiful sun and feeling warm ( while I wrote this so my concentration was on this poem then I really did have a lovely hours relaxing ) Many Cheers Christine 😀
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Good luck contest today.
liberty justice
Comment from Kazzawin
I am reading this in (sunny) England!
I say that tongue in cheek because although the sun is now out and starting to set, half an hour ago we had a shower of hailstones!
Oh, how I long to languish in the sunshine just like the bather in the poem...feel the heat on my skin. It really does its job to make you feel better!
Lovely artwork to accompany this tale of desire and warmth and sunny days!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I am reading this in (sunny) England!
I say that tongue in cheek because although the sun is now out and starting to set, half an hour ago we had a shower of hailstones!
Oh, how I long to languish in the sunshine just like the bather in the poem...feel the heat on my skin. It really does its job to make you feel better!
Lovely artwork to accompany this tale of desire and warmth and sunny days!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Kazzawin. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem and it was so nice to enjoy the lovely sunny weekend and To have a sunbake was a bonus. I love hot weather but we are heading into winter here in Australia and only one month left so not looking forward to being cold forca few months, but glad to have a good heater. Many Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
This time of year the sunrays are just right to fully enjoy. It is not too hot with the usual dabger and álso not too cold to have any valiue.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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This time of year the sunrays are just right to fully enjoy. It is not too hot with the usual dabger and álso not too cold to have any valiue.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Sandra, Thanks for your review and yes we are having some unusually lovely warm to hot weather this late in the Autumn season so it is nice not to be cold hest. Cheers Christine😄
Comment from dmt1967
I love the picture of the sun beating down as around here it still feels like March. I like the poem as well, especially the play on words at the end. I liked the deep blue background color as well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I love the picture of the sun beating down as around here it still feels like March. I like the poem as well, especially the play on words at the end. I liked the deep blue background color as well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi dmt1967. Always pleased to share my writing and thanks for reading and reviewing this poem and for your encouraging comments. I always try to get a good background and font colour so it is readable so thanks for saying that. Many Cheers to you Christine
Comment from L.lora
This smartly written poem
bounces easily down the page
gently engaging your reader
and carrying them along to
the end of your write. You've
captured the essence of the
sun and one might think you
are a cat except we know that
cats don't write or type. A
most enjoyable read. no nits...Lora
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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This smartly written poem
bounces easily down the page
gently engaging your reader
and carrying them along to
the end of your write. You've
captured the essence of the
sun and one might think you
are a cat except we know that
cats don't write or type. A
most enjoyable read. no nits...Lora
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Lora. What a great review and no not a Cat but I would male a good one lounging around in the sun Ha Ha . I am pleased you enjoyed reading this Cheers Christine😀