Christine's Poems
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Comment from danpald
Beautiful poem that flows so well
Redeeming the sands of time
That we must all look upon
May ours be held like yours
With all the turns in our life
Does the sand still flow so well
When held close to ones we love
Than the sands are secure
reply by the author on 01-May-2016
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Beautiful poem that flows so well
Redeeming the sands of time
That we must all look upon
May ours be held like yours
With all the turns in our life
Does the sand still flow so well
When held close to ones we love
Than the sands are secure
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-May-2016
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Thank you Dan for your lovely review for my Poem . I enjoy your poetic replies and appreciate the time taken to compose your reviews like you do. May our sands of time be many still. Cheers Christine😀
Comment from BeasPeas
Right away the first stanza gets my attention. I do believe that we are given just so many grains of sand and we must make the most of them, not squander them:
"Our sands of time are given to
us on the day of birth,
Just what we do with them each day
is measure of our worth."
These are the most meaningful.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Right away the first stanza gets my attention. I do believe that we are given just so many grains of sand and we must make the most of them, not squander them:
"Our sands of time are given to
us on the day of birth,
Just what we do with them each day
is measure of our worth."
These are the most meaningful.
Marilyn
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Marilyn, Yes I tend to agree what we do with our sand is how we live our lives and one hopes not to be frivilous and wasteful. Thanks for reading ,have a lovely day. Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Pantygynt
This is interesting as you have gone for a poetic interpretation of the title, whereas most if not all of the ones I have already read have opte to write on what the picture meant to them. There is nothing wrong with either approach. The title is part of the picture and this is, as a result a refreshingly different interpretation.
Some sands are course and rough to hold
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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This is interesting as you have gone for a poetic interpretation of the title, whereas most if not all of the ones I have already read have opte to write on what the picture meant to them. There is nothing wrong with either approach. The title is part of the picture and this is, as a result a refreshingly different interpretation.
Some sands are course and rough to hold
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi pantygynt. I hadn't thought about that angle but yes I suppose that also featured. I looked at the sand expance in the image ( beach ) and that created this poem But yes it did fit in neatly with the title too. Either way I am glad you liked my interpretation and Thanks you for your review. As Always Many Cheers Christine😄
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Our lives are like the sand in an hour glass it runs through till there is nothing left. Our children will carry our legacy forth when we are not there anymore.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Our lives are like the sand in an hour glass it runs through till there is nothing left. Our children will carry our legacy forth when we are not there anymore.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Sandra. yes but our grains are passed on forever generation after generation. Thanks for reading and for your comments. hopefully wecstill have a few grains left for a while LOL Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Mark Valentine
It's more than just "A little philosophical" - it's profoundly meaningful. I especially like the thought that our grains are mixed with those of others who "share our beach" - a wonderful extension of the metaphor. A great response to the challenge.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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It's more than just "A little philosophical" - it's profoundly meaningful. I especially like the thought that our grains are mixed with those of others who "share our beach" - a wonderful extension of the metaphor. A great response to the challenge.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Mark, Thanks so much for a great review for my challenge poem ( There are many great posts for this one and it is always fun to participate) Yes we must share our grains with our nearest and dearest, but also with others unmet and I feels a few of my grains have found their way to FS and I share them with you also Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from robyn corum
Wow! Very deep and insightful, Chris. Made me stop a bit and ponder those stages of life -- and the fact I'm gonna DIE!
Jk.
A sweet poem and I enjoyed it very much!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Wow! Very deep and insightful, Chris. Made me stop a bit and ponder those stages of life -- and the fact I'm gonna DIE!
Jk.
A sweet poem and I enjoyed it very much!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Robyn, Yes it is a bit confronting when one thinks about the years left as youth has passed a whole ago and now classed as middle aged and a Senior ( WHAT how did that happen LOL ) but I hope still young at heart and having fun and so much into having a sunbake Ha Ha. Glad you enjoyed this. Cheers my friend Christine 😀
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
This was an awesome poem
I love how true and pure your words were.
I could tell right a way they came from your heart.
With your permission I would like to share this with my grands and teenage great grand children whose wasting the sand in their life.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Wow!
This was an awesome poem
I love how true and pure your words were.
I could tell right a way they came from your heart.
With your permission I would like to share this with my grands and teenage great grand children whose wasting the sand in their life.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Ho Cookie. Yes they did come from my heart and you go right ahead and share with who ever you want I am honoured you think my word worthy. As always many Thanks and love to hear from you Cheers Christine😀
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You are as always welcome. I believe some times it takes a strange to reach someones family and this poem I pray will reach my trouble grandchildren.
God bless you and thank you again.
Cookie
Comment from MacMhuirich
What a wonderful interpretation of the picture, I love that thought of having our life as sand. nice rhyme and flow. Thank you for sharing your nice philosophical posting.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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What a wonderful interpretation of the picture, I love that thought of having our life as sand. nice rhyme and flow. Thank you for sharing your nice philosophical posting.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi John .I am so pleased you liked my interpretation of this challenge and one must take care with each grain. Thank you very much for taking your time to review my effort Many Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Chrissy710,
I have to give you the first of my sixes this week. I so enjoyed your poem about the 'grains of sand' you were given at birth. You used them well, shared with friends and family, and lent value to your own life. I enjoyed the philosophical nature as well as a possible example of how others ought to 'guard' the grains they are given.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Chrissy710,
I have to give you the first of my sixes this week. I so enjoyed your poem about the 'grains of sand' you were given at birth. You used them well, shared with friends and family, and lent value to your own life. I enjoyed the philosophical nature as well as a possible example of how others ought to 'guard' the grains they are given.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Carolyn. My sincerest thanks for such a generous. review and six stars. I am pleased to have written something you think so worthy. I can be a little philosophical at times and I like to leave a message in my work. This was a great challenge to do and I am glad you stopped by. Cheers my friend Christine😀
Comment from tony bronk
Just a beautiful and timeless poem using the metaphor "sand" as the tool of usage. Your poem is colorful, visual, picturesque, and lively, although it deals "some" with death. I love this poem! Tony
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Just a beautiful and timeless poem using the metaphor "sand" as the tool of usage. Your poem is colorful, visual, picturesque, and lively, although it deals "some" with death. I love this poem! Tony
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Tony. Waht lovely words from you for my poem and this metaphor just seemed to work for this. I am so pleased you loved this and my very many Thanks for your review Cheers Christine😀