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the middle age conundrum8 total reviews
Comment from Lee Hook
Thanks for the chuckles! I randomly was looking through writer profiles and am glad to have stumbled on this gem. Thanks for reminding this 24 yo guy that everyone experiences insecurities in these situations and its best just to laugh it off! Im off to the bar for a double scotch. Cheers!
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Thanks for the chuckles! I randomly was looking through writer profiles and am glad to have stumbled on this gem. Thanks for reminding this 24 yo guy that everyone experiences insecurities in these situations and its best just to laugh it off! Im off to the bar for a double scotch. Cheers!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
Comment from Judy Couch
Well written and funny story. I guess we all need to act our age even when we think we're younger than we are. You illustrated that point well.
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Well written and funny story. I guess we all need to act our age even when we think we're younger than we are. You illustrated that point well.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
Comment from Liberty Justice
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Hey you just received thumbs up but you are way ahead. Looks like you've won. Only two people entered. Your story is Great topic and many people find middle age dating very exciting. After contest tell men who you are. Check me out. liberty justice
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
Comment from foxangie123
This is first place by far as it is so relatable and a very clever entry to this contest or by itself without hesitation. Way to go. It is spectacular.
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This is first place by far as it is so relatable and a very clever entry to this contest or by itself without hesitation. Way to go. It is spectacular.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
Comment from EMB
Star Trek was supposedly the "final frontier." Beware of cliches like "worked like a charm." Writers can always do better than that. This was amusing, but I definitely would've like more detail on what "slightly neurotic" means. :)
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Star Trek was supposedly the "final frontier." Beware of cliches like "worked like a charm." Writers can always do better than that. This was amusing, but I definitely would've like more detail on what "slightly neurotic" means. :)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Well mystery author, this is incredibly funny, especially with the self-deprecation that always adds charm to a story. Either I know you well and you told me about this or I read another version in a longer story, but it's familiar, and just as funny today. Great post. Hope you do well.
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Well mystery author, this is incredibly funny, especially with the self-deprecation that always adds charm to a story. Either I know you well and you told me about this or I read another version in a longer story, but it's familiar, and just as funny today. Great post. Hope you do well.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
Comment from GeraldS
This is a nice, well-written story for this contest prompt. Embarrassing things do happen especially when we're trying our best to seem dignified. The wider the gap between the two, the greater the embarrassment. And it can be difficult to rescue someone from such a situation.
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This is a nice, well-written story for this contest prompt. Embarrassing things do happen especially when we're trying our best to seem dignified. The wider the gap between the two, the greater the embarrassment. And it can be difficult to rescue someone from such a situation.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
Comment from jpduck
A great story, nicely told, I thought. But there were rather a lot of SPAGs.
(Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks, suggested insertions):
'In the middle age conundrum [I've been trapped in] *entrapping me* for the past few years (Avoids the repetition of 'me').
'life simply became the twilight zone*,* or[,] rather*,* the other frontier, as the Star Track fans would know it' (Surely, the Star Trek phrase was 'final frontier'?).
'When I was younger and had the energy to fight, create and*,* heck, even stay up past 10 PM'
'it never crossed my mind that [I'll] *I'd* morph eventually into my mother'
'does [that] *your* music have to be that loud? (Avoids the repetition of 'that')
'typical [to] *of* the business, corporate world'
'See the above*-*mentioned middle age desperation'
'and went to a nice*,* quiet restaurant'
Adrian
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A great story, nicely told, I thought. But there were rather a lot of SPAGs.
(Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks, suggested insertions):
'In the middle age conundrum [I've been trapped in] *entrapping me* for the past few years (Avoids the repetition of 'me').
'life simply became the twilight zone*,* or[,] rather*,* the other frontier, as the Star Track fans would know it' (Surely, the Star Trek phrase was 'final frontier'?).
'When I was younger and had the energy to fight, create and*,* heck, even stay up past 10 PM'
'it never crossed my mind that [I'll] *I'd* morph eventually into my mother'
'does [that] *your* music have to be that loud? (Avoids the repetition of 'that')
'typical [to] *of* the business, corporate world'
'See the above*-*mentioned middle age desperation'
'and went to a nice*,* quiet restaurant'
Adrian
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
