Their Stories
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21 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I hope you've got silver bullets. According to, Sam and Dean that's the only thing that will stop a demon. That or maybe holy water.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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I hope you've got silver bullets. According to, Sam and Dean that's the only thing that will stop a demon. That or maybe holy water.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Yep silver bullets ready to kill anyone who hurts my baby. Thank you for the humor and the fun.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this was an interesting read, filled with mystery and even a little horror.
If there were errors in your story, I did not noticed. I was too engaged in your story.
I like the ending.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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Wow, this was an interesting read, filled with mystery and even a little horror.
If there were errors in your story, I did not noticed. I was too engaged in your story.
I like the ending.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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thank you so much. Flash fiction has to move so fast. I am glad it kept you interested.
Comment from sage17611
I love the way you portrayed the story of the Oklahoma bombing in first person. It is written so well, I was convinced this was a true story. The flow is smooth and imaginative, it's very well narrated making it interesting from start to finish. It's sad what happened to those people that day, we never know what the next second or minute holds for us. Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt story.
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
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I love the way you portrayed the story of the Oklahoma bombing in first person. It is written so well, I was convinced this was a true story. The flow is smooth and imaginative, it's very well narrated making it interesting from start to finish. It's sad what happened to those people that day, we never know what the next second or minute holds for us. Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt story.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
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thank you so much. That day I believed it was some foreign terrorist, it was painful when i found out it was one of our own. I always love hearing from you sage.
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Thank you, that's nice to hear:)
Comment from Aussie
Yes, Angels and demons exist. What you see is not always what you get. Evil manifests in many forms. We live in two worlds, here on planet earth we must toil, waiting for God's call. There has always been good and evil, black and white, yin and yang. If you listen to the 'still, small voice within' good tidings or warnings come through the spiritual ether. As we age, we become more in tune with spirit talk. Thanks for sharing my friend.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Yes, Angels and demons exist. What you see is not always what you get. Evil manifests in many forms. We live in two worlds, here on planet earth we must toil, waiting for God's call. There has always been good and evil, black and white, yin and yang. If you listen to the 'still, small voice within' good tidings or warnings come through the spiritual ether. As we age, we become more in tune with spirit talk. Thanks for sharing my friend.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I do think we get more in touch with our lives and our feelings as we get older. Thank you for the wonderful sixes. You made my morning. shine.
Comment from foxangie123
This couldn't be more realistic my dear. Very creative mind you have and it's always a pleasure to read that you have written. Great piece.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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This couldn't be more realistic my dear. Very creative mind you have and it's always a pleasure to read that you have written. Great piece.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I am enjoying learning to write every day. This was another great challenge.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a brilliant story, it made the hairs on my arms stand up! Sorry I haven't a 6, just know, it is worth 6 stars in my book, more if we had them. I know this is fiction, but it has been known to happen, especially to children, they are the most susceptible. I loved the story and hope you win, excellent. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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That was a brilliant story, it made the hairs on my arms stand up! Sorry I haven't a 6, just know, it is worth 6 stars in my book, more if we had them. I know this is fiction, but it has been known to happen, especially to children, they are the most susceptible. I loved the story and hope you win, excellent. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. That was such a sad time in the United States.
Comment from CEO2020
The title captured my attention. Excellent writing and a very good story! I am an aspiring author. If you have time, please review my short story called Fatal Decision.
Thanks
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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The title captured my attention. Excellent writing and a very good story! I am an aspiring author. If you have time, please review my short story called Fatal Decision.
Thanks
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I sure will , I love reading other peoples wriing.
Comment from LIJ Red
When does ignorance become evil-or is every grain of it evil? I think our
government has lost its focus, but the way to kill the snake is with words and votes, not ammonium nitrate. Well written fiction about a black day in history.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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When does ignorance become evil-or is every grain of it evil? I think our
government has lost its focus, but the way to kill the snake is with words and votes, not ammonium nitrate. Well written fiction about a black day in history.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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What an awful day in history that was.
Comment from pattipac
Judy, this is an excellent read. You grabbed my attention from the very start. I believe in listening to small whispers that we get from within. If I had listened to the one about moving my car the other day while waiting in the parking lot for a friend, my car would not have been rear-ended.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Judy, this is an excellent read. You grabbed my attention from the very start. I believe in listening to small whispers that we get from within. If I had listened to the one about moving my car the other day while waiting in the parking lot for a friend, my car would not have been rear-ended.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Isn't that true. We forget that we are really animals with instincts. We need to listen..
Comment from F. Wehr3
Good story. I liked the way you linked it to an actual event. Please consider the following.
After you dropped her off she started singing a song over and over. ' I would suggest a comma after off.
When the two girls were born they were perfect. Jaycee was smaller than Jocelyn but they were such good babies. ' You have an intro clause followed by a complete sentence. suggest comma after born. The next sentence is two complete sentences with a conjunction in the middle . Place a comma before but.
I tried but I couldn't get past own pain.' Same as above.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Good story. I liked the way you linked it to an actual event. Please consider the following.
After you dropped her off she started singing a song over and over. ' I would suggest a comma after off.
When the two girls were born they were perfect. Jaycee was smaller than Jocelyn but they were such good babies. ' You have an intro clause followed by a complete sentence. suggest comma after born. The next sentence is two complete sentences with a conjunction in the middle . Place a comma before but.
I tried but I couldn't get past own pain.' Same as above.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Wonderful suggestions. Heading to edit now. Thank you.
