Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello fionageorge
I like how your remembered some of the lyric from the song you heard on the radio.
You poem brings out the beauty of the ocean where you and your lover feel in love.

Gert

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Gert, for those kind words and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

reply by Gert sherwood on 19-Apr-2016

Smiles and you are welcome Marijke
Gert

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

LOVELY. Forever you'll be here with me is beautiful statement. Poet is in commune with nature and describes vividly walks of two lovers. Beautiful ode to a lost lover. liberty justice

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Hi again, and thanks again for your generous review and five star rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

A gorgeous poem and you have done justice to the song lyrics, and your photo. i enjoyed you meter and ryhme made fo a easy read. lovely Marijke cheers Christine

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Hi Chrissy. My word, you have been busy, my friend. Thank you so much once again for another wonderful review and generous rating. I appreciate your feedback. Warmest regards :o)

Comment from LoannaLois

Excellent

This tugged at my heart strings and brought such memories back to me, also. How I miss that sand, that sun, and a moment to reflect on time that meant so much.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Hi LoannaLois, thank you so much for your lovely comments and your generous review. Warmest regards :o)

Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Wonderful poem with good repeating line and wonderful rhyme. You can always go bach to that wonderful shore and the beautiful memories A place of peace and
beauty where you can feel the presence. Wonderful!!!! xxxx

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hello my friend. Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments. Warmest regards and miles of Tassie smiles, :o) xxxxx

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

It is still beautiful and it reminds me of a place in the Caribean that I once was. It is beautiful and intellectual. I loved it then now and always.......

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hello foxangie. Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments. Warmest regards and miles of sunny smiles, :o) xxxxx

Comment from Stephanie Kastner

Exceptional

This brought so many memories back to me of similar experiences. I write about the beach a lot. It is my favorite place. I think having one's ashes scattered in the sea along the shoreline is the perfect place!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hello Stephanie. Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments and that generous string of stars. Warmest regards and miles of sunny smiles, :o) xxxxx

Comment from zanya

Excellent

This poem is filled with wistful nostalgia encompassing a life and love now departed 'Now your spirit I must set free'- it could also takes its place in the realm of song- one learns something new every day - had to check out where Peron Dunes is situated !! Fanstory is accomplishing other goals besides stirring the imagination! Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hello Zanya. Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments and that generous rating. Warmest regards and miles of sunny smiles, :o) xxxxx

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Marijke,

I enjoyed reading your quatrains this morning. Indeed, the lure of the shore, particularly when it is the place of very important things happening, like falling in love.

The abcb rhyme pattern works well and adds interest interest to the read. The flow of the poem is smooth and enjoyable. Your use of enjambment helps the flow of the read.

A good read this morning.

Ray

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hello Ray. Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments and that generous ratings. Warmest regards and miles of sunny smiles, :o) xxxxx

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This poem gathers momentum like an incoming wave. The Speaker is called back to the sea shore, first by the memories of their early tryst. Then we learn she has a special reason for returning: to throw her dead spouse's ashes into the sea.
The refrain works extremely well to set the scene. I am delighted you used ABCB.rhyming instead of AABB or ABAB. as the cadence is more natural.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Rod, for your kind comments and generous review. Warmest regards :o)