Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "A Simple Wish"My book of poems and stories
16 total reviews
Comment from tony bronk
This is such a sad and despairing poem of your life gone by and how you feel is what is left. You should celebrate, not be so desperate for its end. A well written poem nonetheless. Have a happy day! Tony
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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This is such a sad and despairing poem of your life gone by and how you feel is what is left. You should celebrate, not be so desperate for its end. A well written poem nonetheless. Have a happy day! Tony
Comment Written 19-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much for your review but i had to chuckle. Not all writing is about the authors life and this was about a family member's complaints. I also did one on how a mentally depressed person feels and that was also from a friend. I do thank you for your concern but I am fine and well adjusted. Take care and stay the kind soul that you are.
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I'm happy then...of course. You shouldn't find my concern for you humorous. Tony
Comment from William Ross
very good and nicely done on this repetition poem a simple wish as one gets into their elder years and everyone they know is already gone. great write and good luck
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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very good and nicely done on this repetition poem a simple wish as one gets into their elder years and everyone they know is already gone. great write and good luck
Comment Written 18-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much for your time in reviewing my poetry and the kind comments. I know what it takes to review and I appreciate your reviewing mine. Have a good day.
Comment from LoannaLois
I think this is one of my favorite all-time poems. Perhaps it is the sentiment I share, perhaps it is the beautiful way you have woven your words together to make this art. I love it.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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I think this is one of my favorite all-time poems. Perhaps it is the sentiment I share, perhaps it is the beautiful way you have woven your words together to make this art. I love it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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A much appreciated review and rating. Thank you so very much for the honor. This is so unexpected and a wonderful end to a beautiful weekend. Thank you again.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Writer takes trip down memory lane and sorrow over childhood friends passed away. Poet can enhance his or her life by living healthier and stronger. liberty justice
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Writer takes trip down memory lane and sorrow over childhood friends passed away. Poet can enhance his or her life by living healthier and stronger. liberty justice
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your review. This poem was not from the poets life but a reflection of a very close relatives life from a diary. It is nice that it was written so that the view was taken to be more personal.
Comment from foxangie123
I love the artist and found this to be genius and clever. It asks truthful and amazing questions. I used to say don't wish ask from your knees and it will work out. I could practice that more. This I vote first.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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I love the artist and found this to be genius and clever. It asks truthful and amazing questions. I used to say don't wish ask from your knees and it will work out. I could practice that more. This I vote first.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments. Have a nice day.
Comment from Writeling
Hi, A really competent poem, with an interesting rhyming pattern. I really like:
'The wounded past is just a memory'
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Hi, A really competent poem, with an interesting rhyming pattern. I really like:
'The wounded past is just a memory'
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments. Have a nice day.
Comment from Pantygynt
I like the form you have selected for this poem, with its theme of the growing complexity of life. It is also a pleasure to review a writer who can not only employ meter correctly but who can use metrical substitution with a trochee opening to line 2 of S3.
I like the way you have broken what is essentially the fourth pentameter of each stanza in two lines, one trimeter and the final refrain line in dimeter making for a strong refrain.
Very competently writtlen.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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I like the form you have selected for this poem, with its theme of the growing complexity of life. It is also a pleasure to review a writer who can not only employ meter correctly but who can use metrical substitution with a trochee opening to line 2 of S3.
I like the way you have broken what is essentially the fourth pentameter of each stanza in two lines, one trimeter and the final refrain line in dimeter making for a strong refrain.
Very competently writtlen.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your very wonderful review and comments. I am so honored to have you give me six stars. Have a nice day.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
We all have a wish one or other time in our lives. When we reach our older years we can look back and see how many of our wishes came true.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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We all have a wish one or other time in our lives. When we reach our older years we can look back and see how many of our wishes came true.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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I thank you for reviewing my poem and giving your kind comments. Blessings to you this Sunday.You
Comment from fionageorge
What a lovely and well structured entry to this Repetition writing prompt. It flows freely and has given the reader an insight into aging and its implications. A simple wish... a simple title, for a poem which is emotional and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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What a lovely and well structured entry to this Repetition writing prompt. It flows freely and has given the reader an insight into aging and its implications. A simple wish... a simple title, for a poem which is emotional and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Your kind comments and review of my poem are very much appreciated. Have a great day.
Comment from Dawn Munro
OH! What a hauntingly beautiful poem this is - I love your choice of theme and that repeat line! It's so sad when we surrender wishes though, when the dreams seem to have eluded our grasp... The mood captured here is so beautifully wistful. I love this poem - I do hope you'll let me know who you are when the contest is over!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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OH! What a hauntingly beautiful poem this is - I love your choice of theme and that repeat line! It's so sad when we surrender wishes though, when the dreams seem to have eluded our grasp... The mood captured here is so beautifully wistful. I love this poem - I do hope you'll let me know who you are when the contest is over!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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I have no problem with letting anyone know who I am. The contest keeps entries revealing names. Thanks for your kind comments and review. I appreciate your time.
