Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

It is a tragedy the way so many treat the ones they are supposed to love. And it is such a vicious cycle. Often those who were abused as children grow up to be abusers. That makes no sense to me. I guess that's the way they reclaim their power. A very good topic to bring up, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Yes, Debbie, it is a vicious cycle, but it needs to be broken. Not sure how, but there is education from a young age. However, if there is abuse in the home, it is difficult for kids to not grow up seeing that as the norm. A statistic came out today that of all domestic violence incidents reported, 78% have alcohol and/or drugs involved. So sad. Thanks for your observations and generous rating, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Hi Marijke. Great statement you made here I agree with your conclusion. There is no excuse for domestic abuse. It happens more than we think and that scares me.
Well done and good luck in the contest!!!! Love and hugs and smiles from miles/ Fietje xxxxxx

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Hi Fietje, thanks for that lovely string of stars on this rather blunt poem, but a message that needs to be out there.... there are no excuses. Warmest regards, my friend, and miles of warm Tassie smiles... Marijke :o)

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Marijke:

You are spot on with your syllable count and your message in this one. There is absolutely no room for excuses concerning domestic abuse. It is a tragedy of our self proclaimed 'civilized' progress in this world. I hope the voters recognize the importance of your succinct message in the booth.

Good luck!

Kim

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you, Kim. Yes, it is a sad state of affairs, and there re no excuses. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I know we are a much bigger country, but I am sadly certain that the number of victims is disproportionately larger. I admired the way you focused on the problem in this 5-7-5 and punctuated it with rhyme. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hello Joan. Thank you so much for your review and obserations, I think from what I have heard and seen that you are probably right. Warmest regards and miles of sunny smiles, Marijke :o) xxxxx

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Domestic Abuse
Do not give us your reasons
There is no excuse

Your words are awesome. You are so right. Good job on the syllable count. The picture is perfect, but so sad.

Your notes are scary. It happens everywhere.

Good job. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, jannypan, for your kind words and generous rating on this rather sad topic. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Liberty Justice

Exceptional

Six 6 STARS so powerful. Poet made profound dramatic statement. Writer is so right that victims should nit give excuses to their abusers. liberty justice

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, my friend, for your kind words and generous six star rating on this rather sad topic. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

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Comment from ddmaewriting

Excellent

I hope that those who abuse and are abused get the help they need. There is so much hatred and violence around us. Yet, the other side shows love and harmony. Offering prayers for all victims and enlightenment for abusers. The poem is appropriate for the 5-7-5 require and the topic is a reality one can not just ignore! Thanks for the share.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, ddmaewriting, for your kind words and generous rating on this rather sad topic. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Jeffers63

Excellent

amazing strong and thought provoking, a message that should be very loud and clear this cannot go on. Your poem will give strength, the words scream of the page, Well written..

Regards
Jeffers63

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Jeffers63, for your kind words and generous rating on this rather sad topic. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

This is a strong entry for the 5-7-5 contest

You use blunt language to expose the shame that is domestic abuse. I think New Zealand has an even worse record than Australia in this tragedy.

Simple, blunt language is used to drive home the message - there is no excuse.

Steve

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Steve, for your kind words and generous rating on this rather sad topic. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Windborne

Good

I like the rhyme of the first and last lines. Of course, there is no excuse for domestic abuse. The only reason I didn't give it a higher rating is because the language is so overt, perhaps a stronger picture could be painted with the image of a black eye, inferring the abuse.

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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Thank you. I believe your rating should be based on the words only, not on the picture.... But thanks for your commens that the lanuage is so overt. That was the intention. Regards Marijke :o)

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi again. I thought about your comments and after looking at the overall presentation, the picture probably detracted from my strong message. I have changed the picture. If would appreciate if you have another look and give me your feedback on the overall effect. Thanks and warmest regards, Marijke :o)