Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Gregory,

Congrats on placing in this contest. With only three lines you've imparted a complete image with vivid word choices that make the reader just want to close their eyes and let their imagination show them the picture.

Awesome work!

Kim

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Wow thanks so much! Really!

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Good poetic depiction of stars in the sky and the pictures drawn by shooting stars tails and constellations.

Congratulations on placing in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016

Thanks so much! I'm honored, really

reply by dragonpoet on 26-Apr-2016

You are so very welcome.

dp

Comment from heat_mac

Excellent

Love the last line, it's leaves such an expansive image. Great descriptive language throughout. Overall a really strong poem!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you so much!

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Lovely wistful and serene. I enjoyed this. Fine consonance of L and S as well as Y make it sound grandiloquent aloud. Fine flow and enjambment. Striking artistic presentation too. LOVE the title--drew me to read it! FYI - I'm a standard member now--just visiting on occasion to review friends like you.

Best Wishes,
rd

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Hi how are you. I haven't been writing any poetry. I'm only working on my book. I have some new chapters. I'm writing the story around my "essays". The essays were events that took place in my childhood with my mom. So the writing I'm doing now is not really funny, it's sad but it fills in the story. You're still my editor I hope! I'm focusing on the writing now and then I'll edit after. I hope I'm on the right track though!

reply by rama devi on 18-Apr-2016

Absolutely, dear Gregory. I'll always be available for you. Feel free to send editing via my email. I am now only a standard member on FS and will be less active here, though I'll still review on occasion. It must be cathartic to write of these events. Sending lots of positive healing energy your way. I sense you're on the right track (intuitively). Keep diving in....it's all good...very healing process...


Love,
rd

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

We just have to look around us everywhere to find the most beautiful masterpieces from God himself and it is all for free. There is no high price tag on His masterpiece

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you Sandra!

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Gregory, this is just beautiful...sometimes fewer words say more....sigh...the sky makes a beautiful canvas...I love your poem...and a stunning picture my friend...so good to see you...Love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Oh thank you so much! I wanted to get the creative juices flowing again Linda!

reply by l.raven on 18-Apr-2016

you are so welcome Gregory...your a talent...it's like riding a horse...you get right back on...comes right back to ya...but riding a horse is easier LOL...so glad to see you...and hope the little guy is in good health...luff xxoo

Comment from Chris Walker

Excellent

You've created really lovely imagery with this micro poem--Love "dreams upon astral canvas." Great choice of artwork to enhance the presentation. Good luck in the contest. Chris

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you Chris!

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Yeah for sure as you gaze out upon the stars at night. great job on this, great three liner on the prompt. good luck on this have a good day

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you so much!

Comment from visionary1234

Exceptional

Greg, I LOVE this! It always surprises me that such a specific & poetic image can be captured in a mere 3 lines. Oh bother! Now I'll have to go and write one myself, just to see if I can do it. Love 'astral canvas'! :)S

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Let's see yours! Thank you for the Sixer too! You're the best

Comment from CEO2020

Excellent

Nice poem. Eternal eyes gaze...I see God in those words.

Beyond sleep hilltops to paint...I see the seasons.

Dreams upon astral canvas....I see the stars

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you! Very much indeed