Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Reality"This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
9 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Best of Aussie luck with your contest entry. I enjoyed Reality, short but the ending pulls the reader up and makes me think what would it be like, really? Reality fades eventually when one cannot be part of the outside world and feel the sun and wind and sit down and have a cuppa! Well done mate.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Best of Aussie luck with your contest entry. I enjoyed Reality, short but the ending pulls the reader up and makes me think what would it be like, really? Reality fades eventually when one cannot be part of the outside world and feel the sun and wind and sit down and have a cuppa! Well done mate.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Hi Kay. Thank you so much my Aussie friend, for this fantastic and generous six star rating. I appreciate your comments and observations. Thanks mate for reading and reviewing. Warmest regards, :o)
Comment from winnona
The choice of artwork and background color completed your poem well. your words flowed throughout your poem combing and forming their own unique rhythm. Them conveying the message of the poem tot he reader.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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The choice of artwork and background color completed your poem well. your words flowed throughout your poem combing and forming their own unique rhythm. Them conveying the message of the poem tot he reader.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Hi winnona, thank you so very much for this generous review and rating. Warmest regards, :o)
Comment from Judy Couch
Very good poem. Prisoner who fanticizes himself living a more normal existance and enjoying life. I like the rhyme. I like the story it tells and the image of what he would like.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Very good poem. Prisoner who fanticizes himself living a more normal existance and enjoying life. I like the rhyme. I like the story it tells and the image of what he would like.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Hi and thank you so much, Judy, for your generous review and generous rating. Warmest regards.
Comment from RICH01
Very good rhythm. Excellent rhyme. The beginning line drives the reader on and interest is kept right up to that excellent last two lines. Knowing that this is a reality for many the last line hurts and good poetry should make one feel. I do not enjoy your reality but I enjoyed the poem,
Rich01
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Very good rhythm. Excellent rhyme. The beginning line drives the reader on and interest is kept right up to that excellent last two lines. Knowing that this is a reality for many the last line hurts and good poetry should make one feel. I do not enjoy your reality but I enjoyed the poem,
Rich01
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thanks RICH01 for your kind review and comments. I am pleased you felt my poem made you feel. Warmest regards.
Comment from BruceMiller
I certainly believe that you have written a beautiful piece of poetry. With the lovely picture painted with the first stanza, the second stanza come thought almost as a shock. Nicely done. Cheers.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I certainly believe that you have written a beautiful piece of poetry. With the lovely picture painted with the first stanza, the second stanza come thought almost as a shock. Nicely done. Cheers.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thanks Bruce, for your kind review and good luck wishes. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Leineco
What a shocker that final stanza was!
I'm currently watching a series on TV called 60 Days In
(7 never law breaking volunteers have entered prison
posing as convicted criminals for the purpose of helping
a sheriff understand why/how the prison is failing). It's
been really interesting watching how the realization of
incarceration is effecting them!
It's really scary to think about never having the freedom
to simply "wander down to the sea". . .
Your shocking final stanza brought me up short!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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What a shocker that final stanza was!
I'm currently watching a series on TV called 60 Days In
(7 never law breaking volunteers have entered prison
posing as convicted criminals for the purpose of helping
a sheriff understand why/how the prison is failing). It's
been really interesting watching how the realization of
incarceration is effecting them!
It's really scary to think about never having the freedom
to simply "wander down to the sea". . .
Your shocking final stanza brought me up short!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Hi Leineco. Thank you for those kind comments and observations and your generous review. Yes, I am about to watch that series too. Warmest regards,
Comment from jusylee72
How sad and how true. Sometimes we can escape in our minds and sometimes we simple can't when we are in a bad situation. It is so hard. Thank you for the quick change from happy to sad.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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How sad and how true. Sometimes we can escape in our minds and sometimes we simple can't when we are in a bad situation. It is so hard. Thank you for the quick change from happy to sad.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Hi jusylee. Thank you for those kind comments and generous review. Warmest regards,
Comment from wilkswrites
You did a great job capturing the feelings of an inmate. Ironically, I was watching a show on tv today where an inmate attempted to take his life because he just couldn't stand the idea of sitting in a cell for no amount of time. He cried during the interview. Your poem really reminded me of that prisoner, and it captured, precisely what the prisoner felt. Good job.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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You did a great job capturing the feelings of an inmate. Ironically, I was watching a show on tv today where an inmate attempted to take his life because he just couldn't stand the idea of sitting in a cell for no amount of time. He cried during the interview. Your poem really reminded me of that prisoner, and it captured, precisely what the prisoner felt. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Hi vwilks. Thank you for those kind comments and observations and your generous review. Warmest regards,
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is another good contest entry. I can't imagine what it would be like to be a lifer in prison. So much potential wasted - really sad I think
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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This is another good contest entry. I can't imagine what it would be like to be a lifer in prison. So much potential wasted - really sad I think
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Hi DP, thanks for your lovely review and generous rating. Warmest regards :o)