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Mango Writes a Story

A Mango the Beagle classic

22 total reviews 
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Hi John, this is a lovely children's story, you have captured the essence of a child's mind perfectly. What a clever idea of yours to get the teacher to assign this for homework, and what a clever story too. Now when I listen to my youngest grandchild recite her nursery rhymes, I can tell her your story. Sorry I am late with my review, I've had loads of work in the garden to do! A marvellous story, my friend, I enjoyed reading it. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
    Sandra. No worries. I've been so tied up at work I haven't had any time for FS. Thank you for reading and enjoying this. Coming from a masterful children's writer like yourself, means a lot to me!

    John
Comment from Serendipity!
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and look for food (since you just used the word food, about 'something to eat' or 'bring home the groceries'
This is so awesome. I'm sure children would grab these books if there was a whole series like this.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
    S. Thank you so much for all those stars. I am honored!

    John
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

I thought this was really good. You hit the right tone and the read was engaging.

the weekends homework. - weekend's, I think.

Maybe include what kind of animal Slushie is?

Girls... Yuck. - maybe this should also be in speech marks.

"We'll find'em - should this be 'im rather than 'em?

Doesn't it look like its alive?" - it's.

Nicely penned story
GMG

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2016

Comment from Eric1
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Hi John, I think you have already found your niche, children absolutely love characters that they can relate to and there are plenty in your wonderful stories, but you must also bear in mind that children are notoriously difficult to write for and are the storytellers biggest critics.
But I think you have conquered that my friend.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2016

Comment from MTF1955
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I loved this! What cute way to tell the story of Hickory, Dickory, Dock. I think it works great. Hope to read more. Again a wonderful job. Mary

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
    Thank you Mary. John
Comment from CDyer
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I think you found your niche! This is so clever and inventive. The whole premise is fresh and new. I love the mouse family, so typical of a human family and the relationship of the children. Very inspired!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
    CD, thank you. I appreciate the honest review. John
Comment from boxergirl
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Yay, Mango is back...been missing her. I thought this was so cleverly crafted and I think it will go over great with children as well! :-)

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
    Thank you, Karen for your excitement. I do appreciate it. John
Comment from Jonesy
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I don't know how children may respond to this (but really, does any writer know how their target audience will respond?), but I thought it was cute.

Especially the name, "Mango". What a great name for a dog.

*** leaned over to her friend Slushie and whispered***

"whisper"

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
    Thank you very much, Jonesy for a great review. John
Comment from JanPerry
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Fantastic ideas throughout. I think if you keep it HUMOUROUS AND light, you are onto a certain winner. I love the weirdness of it, the names are superb and your line of thinking is great.
Wonderful everywhere!!!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
    Thank you so much JP. Six stars, wow!! I truly appreciate it. John
Comment from foxangie123
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You are so perfect with your writings for children. This is your forte and I know you are the best parent because I read it in every line you pen and in between. Serious now. I may not bookmark or be out of six stars but you still are wonderful......

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
    Thank you so much fox... I always enjoy when you read my posts. Thank you again. John
reply by foxangie123 on 05-Apr-2016
    Your the best..