Dead Wait.
You get what you pay for36 total reviews
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is a clever, original poem. It is difficult to write a humorous poem for an adult audience, but you accomplished it. I think the "Mrs." in the first stanza is missing the period. Other than that, I see no errors. Fun poem.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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This is a clever, original poem. It is difficult to write a humorous poem for an adult audience, but you accomplished it. I think the "Mrs." in the first stanza is missing the period. Other than that, I see no errors. Fun poem.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you Natalie for your kind review. I really appreciate your comments. Best regards Linda
Comment from honeytree
Very true words when we are dead
we are dead, we can't talk or see anymore
laugh any more have children , fall in love.
We do go to a better place though if we have
behaved ourselves.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Very true words when we are dead
we are dead, we can't talk or see anymore
laugh any more have children , fall in love.
We do go to a better place though if we have
behaved ourselves.
Honeytree
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much for reading my poem.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Linda. I love the inscription before your poem. LOL
The poem itself is a gem and the rhymes are wonderfully spot on:
"John Heap was attending to a cadaver rather tall,
His boxes were all standard size, medium to small.
Removing both the head and feet was the best that he could do
And instead of using just one box interring him in two."
Bravo! Fun and original. Bob
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Hi, Linda. I love the inscription before your poem. LOL
The poem itself is a gem and the rhymes are wonderfully spot on:
"John Heap was attending to a cadaver rather tall,
His boxes were all standard size, medium to small.
Removing both the head and feet was the best that he could do
And instead of using just one box interring him in two."
Bravo! Fun and original. Bob
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. I really appreciate your comments. Best regards Linda
Comment from michaelcahill
OMG! You could've posted the coffee cup and I would've been satisfied. But, thanks for the hilarious poem that you attached. My God what a scream and I bet not far from the truth of the matter. This would be a fun piece to revisit in a sequel or series ... maybe a short book? Great fun. mikey
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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OMG! You could've posted the coffee cup and I would've been satisfied. But, thanks for the hilarious poem that you attached. My God what a scream and I bet not far from the truth of the matter. This would be a fun piece to revisit in a sequel or series ... maybe a short book? Great fun. mikey
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thanks Mikey for your generous comments. I actually got the idea from the coffee cup. Kind regards Linda
Comment from Louise Michelle
I enjoyed reading your farce, Linda. Personally, I think expensive funerals are a waste of money.
Great idea of two competing funeral homes and sizing the corpse to fit. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed reading your farce, Linda. Personally, I think expensive funerals are a waste of money.
Great idea of two competing funeral homes and sizing the corpse to fit. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you Lou for your kind review. Your comments are really appreciated. Best regards Linda.
Comment from songlines
I enjoyed the giggle! You may well have written this as fiction, but I can tell it is close to truth - we are all better off not knowing. This piece swings along well. Naughty but nice.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed the giggle! You may well have written this as fiction, but I can tell it is close to truth - we are all better off not knowing. This piece swings along well. Naughty but nice.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. Your comments are really appreciated. Best regards Linda.
Comment from Lancer1979
I needed a laugh tonight, and this was exactly the poem I needed to read! Thanks so much for sharing it. The artwork accompanying the poem, and the words on the coffee mug made me laugh out loud. I think the two competing funeral homes Fitch and Fitch and Heap, lends itself to what could become a very funny novel. I hope you will at least play around with this idea. I think it's great! :D
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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I needed a laugh tonight, and this was exactly the poem I needed to read! Thanks so much for sharing it. The artwork accompanying the poem, and the words on the coffee mug made me laugh out loud. I think the two competing funeral homes Fitch and Fitch and Heap, lends itself to what could become a very funny novel. I hope you will at least play around with this idea. I think it's great! :D
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. Your comments are really appreciated. Best regards Linda.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Who only did the funerals of the filthy rich.".........There's nothing wrong with this line from a purely technical standpoint, L. Fisher. But the coupled words "did funerals" just seemed a bit...off... to me. I know funeral parlors perform a service, and a minister, priest or rabbi performs the ceremonies, respectively. So, with that in mind, I've always though of funeral homes as "performing the funerals". Of course, this is in no way intended as a criticism, but simply voicing a personal opinion on what I felt when reading. You may like to consider the following:
Who only performed funerals for the filthy rich-----This does give you a tad more alliteration.
In any event, I read on...
Poor tall fella. Bein' sliced and diced after death ain't nice, heh-heh Jumpin' Jeezus on a Palomino Pony, you'd think the uber rich, which Fitch & Fitch dealt with exclusively, could afford a casket of the appropriate length and width. But, lots of rich folk are stingy, and try to cut costs and save money in any way they can. That's how they stay so filthy rich to begin with, lol.
Well rhymed, and more than a little bit funny, I had lots of fun reading this one.
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Who only did the funerals of the filthy rich.".........There's nothing wrong with this line from a purely technical standpoint, L. Fisher. But the coupled words "did funerals" just seemed a bit...off... to me. I know funeral parlors perform a service, and a minister, priest or rabbi performs the ceremonies, respectively. So, with that in mind, I've always though of funeral homes as "performing the funerals". Of course, this is in no way intended as a criticism, but simply voicing a personal opinion on what I felt when reading. You may like to consider the following:
Who only performed funerals for the filthy rich-----This does give you a tad more alliteration.
In any event, I read on...
Poor tall fella. Bein' sliced and diced after death ain't nice, heh-heh Jumpin' Jeezus on a Palomino Pony, you'd think the uber rich, which Fitch & Fitch dealt with exclusively, could afford a casket of the appropriate length and width. But, lots of rich folk are stingy, and try to cut costs and save money in any way they can. That's how they stay so filthy rich to begin with, lol.
Well rhymed, and more than a little bit funny, I had lots of fun reading this one.
~Dean :)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. Your comments are really appreciated. Best regards Linda.
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You're very welcome. :}
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You're very welcome. :}
Comment from jane.fallon
You held my complete attention from start to finish. Including one swear word at the end was genius. The placing of that word was the thread that wove the comedy together. If you put more swear words in, the poem wouldn't have had the wow factor that makes this poem so outstanding. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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You held my complete attention from start to finish. Including one swear word at the end was genius. The placing of that word was the thread that wove the comedy together. If you put more swear words in, the poem wouldn't have had the wow factor that makes this poem so outstanding. Congratulations.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you Jane for your kind review and the 6 stars. Your comments are really appreciated. Best regards Linda.
Comment from C.J. 16
This is certainly a different subject for a poem. Very humorous and well written, with a great flow of words. I enjoyed reading it. All the best.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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This is certainly a different subject for a poem. Very humorous and well written, with a great flow of words. I enjoyed reading it. All the best.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. Your comments are really appreciated. Best regards Linda.
