Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Too much drinking leads to too much drinking. The cowboy just want to drink and make some trouble for tomorrow to think about what he was thinking

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Comment from Natalie Walker

Exceptional

Wow. What a creative poem! The only mistake I noticed was "what thinks me a fool." I think you meant "that thinks me a fool."

Other than that, this is a really great poem. Six stars.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016

Thanks for the six and the catch! I'll have to fix that. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is an amusing story and well told. Crime in this case did not pay for Rusty. I like the way you write - the lingo is well written. Good rhyming couplets throughout and I wish you good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016

Thanks. Nope, crime doesn't pay. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from lindafisher

Excellent

This is a great story which brings back the old wild west. Love the names you have given your cowboys. Rusty the rustler and Jerry Jing-Jang. Good luck with this amusing contest entry.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016

Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Cindy

= What a fun read, and great entry for the prompt.
= Love the lingo ... you've got it down pat.
= Good luck in the contest.

* A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! *
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016

Thanks. The lingo is fun to write. I think it suits the rather colorful characters.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

When a man goes after another man's cows.
He gets all choked up when he starts to swinging
It's a whole different tune he starts to singing
***This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016

Thanks. Yep, you're going to get in trouble going after the wrong cows. You don't want to tangle with a cowboy! Glad you enjoyed.

reply by c_lucas on 03-Apr-2016

You're welcome, Cindy. Charlie

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

LOL! Another cute Jerry Jing Jang story. Just proves that criminals are stupid. If they were smart, they wouldn't be criminals. Good job! :)

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Jerry Jing-Jang is always fun. Glad you got a kick out of this one.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I have a softness in my heart for a well told, plotted story, that goes the extra step and puts it to verse.

Good Job, Cindy. I know without asking that you had as much fun writing this as I had reading it.

Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Yep, these are fun characters to write. Glad you had fun with them too.

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This was such a neat poem and it shows the great mind you have. The sketch goes perfect with each line as well. A very pleasurable read.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks. Not many people tell me I have a great mind. LOL Glad you enjoyed my poem.

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hi Cindy;
-how well you write the vernacular of how a cowboy would talk if we were listening to him read this poetry.
- excellent rhyming words were supportive to the meaning and concept of each of your lines therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly. none of your rhyming words were forced nor labored which was also helpful.
- in rhythmic meter makes the variable harbor the cadence, timing and tempo made the reading clear, fluid and easy.
- imagery was quite astoundingly expressive and very vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
-good use of enjambment which is the writing on a thought concept one stanza, line and couplet to the next without a syntactical break.
-I thought the picture was outstanding and very relative and appropriate to the concept the theme of your writing.
-thanks for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks. Jerry Jing-Jang is a fun character to write. Glad you liked him.

reply by krys123 on 29-Mar-2016

you are very welcome Cindy.
Alex