Loophole
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Comment from Mary Wakeford
You have done another good job of setting up the scene for this and script continuation. There is a little bit of something happening with the fonts in your pretitle wording, which I have copy and pasted below. It could be the word program you are using. Well done.
the title, â??Loopholeâ?? to potential producers
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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You have done another good job of setting up the scene for this and script continuation. There is a little bit of something happening with the fonts in your pretitle wording, which I have copy and pasted below. It could be the word program you are using. Well done.
the title, â??Loopholeâ?? to potential producers
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Mary
Thank you for the review. Your words are great to hear.
Email I receive has those odd characters, sometimes. I never thought the trouble could be on my side of the fence, but I guess it could. Thanks for pointing it out. I've been having a lot of computer trouble, lately. One more thing wouldn't matter.
Thanks for the compliments and all those stars.
Marv
Comment from CivilChick
Because I haven't read the rest of this book, I might not be understanding it all correctly. However, if this story is taking place in the U.S. a paper deed doesn't mean much as far as I know. A copy of a deed can be obtained from the appropriate city records department. Having possession of a deed doesn't mean you own it, especially if it is in someone else's name. It just doesn't seem realistic to me. I don't understand the point of the days and times, especially when the are identical (again, it could be because I haven't read the rest of the book).
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Because I haven't read the rest of this book, I might not be understanding it all correctly. However, if this story is taking place in the U.S. a paper deed doesn't mean much as far as I know. A copy of a deed can be obtained from the appropriate city records department. Having possession of a deed doesn't mean you own it, especially if it is in someone else's name. It just doesn't seem realistic to me. I don't understand the point of the days and times, especially when the are identical (again, it could be because I haven't read the rest of the book).
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reviewing chapter 33.
Thank you for the legal help. No matter what the facts are, I can make them work.
I keep track of the days and time for my own benefit. I don't think they'll be in the book.
Thanks for the rating.
Marv
Comment from LisaD123
This is a clever concept which is very well realised. The dialogue enables characterisation to occur easily, and it feels as though the characters are people the reader would care about. The only question I have is around the phrase 'crap game' - did you mean 'game of craps'? Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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This is a clever concept which is very well realised. The dialogue enables characterisation to occur easily, and it feels as though the characters are people the reader would care about. The only question I have is around the phrase 'crap game' - did you mean 'game of craps'? Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Lisa
Thanks for taking the time to review this chapter.
Thank you for the many compliments. especially, when you say that readers would care about these characters.
Thanks for bringing up the name of the game. A 'game of craps' would be the formal way of saying it. A 'crap game' would be the colloquial, or 'street' name. You've prompted me to change the way Charles refers to this past time.
Marv
Comment from Sharen12
Loophole is similar to another story that was true. Yes, it is a loophole and it was great reading this chapter. A friend of mine owns a business inherited by Dad to him no legal papers. The ex-wife lives upstairs and pays nothing. Well another loophole and this is a little longer. Anyway your chapter is solid and yes you should continue.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Loophole is similar to another story that was true. Yes, it is a loophole and it was great reading this chapter. A friend of mine owns a business inherited by Dad to him no legal papers. The ex-wife lives upstairs and pays nothing. Well another loophole and this is a little longer. Anyway your chapter is solid and yes you should continue.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Sharen, for your great review. Learning about other loopholes is helpful.
Thanks for the high rating and your encouragement.
Marv
