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Comment from Joan E.
I admire your courage to deposit these sad memories about your father in this resting place. Although it wasn't the lesson of choice, learning about hypocrisy at a young age probably helped you to be a better person. Thank you for your sharing your personal story in this free verse. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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I admire your courage to deposit these sad memories about your father in this resting place. Although it wasn't the lesson of choice, learning about hypocrisy at a young age probably helped you to be a better person. Thank you for your sharing your personal story in this free verse. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thank you Joan. I appreciate your comforting review.
Comment from ciliverde
This is really sad, Tom. But yeah, you learned a lot about hypocrisy, and you learned it the hard way. Funny how people have such horrible behavior, and keep marching right off to church every Sunday. UGH.
The format you used is a nice touch - adds to the jaggedness of the feelings, that you surely still have in some form. He loved your mom but had many girlfriends on the side. I think my dad did too, but he quit the Catholic Church after my parents divorced.
I'm guessing you may not have his picture on your wall? Or maybe you do, as a reminder...
Very effective poem, and a bit painful to read. I felt bad for you, "stupid" is not a good name to be called, and I had a pretty harsh father myself.
Carol
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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This is really sad, Tom. But yeah, you learned a lot about hypocrisy, and you learned it the hard way. Funny how people have such horrible behavior, and keep marching right off to church every Sunday. UGH.
The format you used is a nice touch - adds to the jaggedness of the feelings, that you surely still have in some form. He loved your mom but had many girlfriends on the side. I think my dad did too, but he quit the Catholic Church after my parents divorced.
I'm guessing you may not have his picture on your wall? Or maybe you do, as a reminder...
Very effective poem, and a bit painful to read. I felt bad for you, "stupid" is not a good name to be called, and I had a pretty harsh father myself.
Carol
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thank you Carol. No I never had a picture of him on my walls. I appreciate you comments and encouragement.
Comment from robyn corum
Oh, Tom. What a scoundrel.
But to be fair - and I hate to do it, but it's true -- it's also a sign of the time he lived in. So many men were the same. A man's needs had been placed on a pinnacle above everyone else's needs in the same family. Everything was okay for him, nothing was out of limits. And I suppose, it went okay with his conscience because all the other men his age acted the same way.
But don't confuse me with EXCUSING the man. My dad could be a SOB - and often was. So I get it. I do. And I'm sending you hugs.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Oh, Tom. What a scoundrel.
But to be fair - and I hate to do it, but it's true -- it's also a sign of the time he lived in. So many men were the same. A man's needs had been placed on a pinnacle above everyone else's needs in the same family. Everything was okay for him, nothing was out of limits. And I suppose, it went okay with his conscience because all the other men his age acted the same way.
But don't confuse me with EXCUSING the man. My dad could be a SOB - and often was. So I get it. I do. And I'm sending you hugs.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you Robyn. I do agree with you that many men were like that back then.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well he will have to face judgement alone. Nobody else can be there for him and from the sound of it there is nobody who would. Sorry you never felt love from him Tom. Did you feel any for him? :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Well he will have to face judgement alone. Nobody else can be there for him and from the sound of it there is nobody who would. Sorry you never felt love from him Tom. Did you feel any for him? :<) Nancy
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you Nancy. Actually. Yes I did.
Comment from djeckert
this paints a nice snapshot of how your dad effected you. its a good reminder of the negating power of hypocrisy. probably why Jesus despised it so much. also shows a good
reason for always saying what you mean and meaning what you say. I really like the starkness. The punctuation was a little sporadic, and I wasnt sure what the spacing of the words was supposed to mean. " When he beat me. I bled" very powerful, and maybe the only non hypocritical thing in your story???, I wonder if " He beat me. I bled" might not be even more powerful???.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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this paints a nice snapshot of how your dad effected you. its a good reminder of the negating power of hypocrisy. probably why Jesus despised it so much. also shows a good
reason for always saying what you mean and meaning what you say. I really like the starkness. The punctuation was a little sporadic, and I wasnt sure what the spacing of the words was supposed to mean. " When he beat me. I bled" very powerful, and maybe the only non hypocritical thing in your story???, I wonder if " He beat me. I bled" might not be even more powerful???.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you djeckert. Good thought, but think I'll leave it as is.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is sad when parents don't know, how they should treat their children and wives, most probably it was the example that was shown to him as a child. Some people grow up and know it is not right to treat your family like that and change the history of abuse and hipocracy.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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It is sad when parents don't know, how they should treat their children and wives, most probably it was the example that was shown to him as a child. Some people grow up and know it is not right to treat your family like that and change the history of abuse and hipocracy.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you. Yes, I never wanted to be like him. The thought of being unfaithful was abhorrent to me. I have never cheated on my wives, although my first wife cheated on me. That's why she's my ex-wife. But my current wife tells my I did inherit a bit of his critical nature.
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To be critical is not always bad, sometimes critique is necessary. It is acceptable when you deliver critique without belittle the other person.
Comment from BruceMiller
I liked your offering. You write about the man with great emotion. Even though you paint a negative picture, I get the feeling that you did love him. Peace.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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I liked your offering. You write about the man with great emotion. Even though you paint a negative picture, I get the feeling that you did love him. Peace.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you,Bruce. Yup, I hated him and loved him too.
Comment from cj lutton
A stark reminder that what people cannot see is often the tortured souls and reflections of living in a fun house mirror.
We walk by people's houses everyday, but we rarely see what's going on inside.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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A stark reminder that what people cannot see is often the tortured souls and reflections of living in a fun house mirror.
We walk by people's houses everyday, but we rarely see what's going on inside.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you Luton. A very real insight.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good poem you have penned. I am sorry you had bad memories, I think we all have some memories that we would like to disappear. Great wording and great imagery. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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This is a very good poem you have penned. I am sorry you had bad memories, I think we all have some memories that we would like to disappear. Great wording and great imagery. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Shank you Teri7, for the wonderful review and the hugs.
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you are so welcome. Teri
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hello, Poet,
Writing is good for the soul, and you have indeed penned a visceral poem about your dad and your experience wth him while growing up. I don't know what to say about the content other than to say I admire your courage to be honest.
I admire the presentation of the poem. The two columns help reinforce the dual personality of your dad and the pain it caused.
-Ray
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Hello, Poet,
Writing is good for the soul, and you have indeed penned a visceral poem about your dad and your experience wth him while growing up. I don't know what to say about the content other than to say I admire your courage to be honest.
I admire the presentation of the poem. The two columns help reinforce the dual personality of your dad and the pain it caused.
-Ray
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you Ray. It does help to write about it, when the mood strikes.
