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Comment from chasennov
Charles Tells All. A chapter in the book The Magic Title. Charles' Story.' This is an excellent chapter you have created here. I enjoyed the story and look forward to reading a lot more about the main character, Charles. Very well done.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2016
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Charles Tells All. A chapter in the book The Magic Title. Charles' Story.' This is an excellent chapter you have created here. I enjoyed the story and look forward to reading a lot more about the main character, Charles. Very well done.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2016
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Chasennov
Thank you for reviewing this chapter. It's nice to have a new reader. Thanks for the high rating and the compliments.
Since you're looking forward to more, I'll be sending some clarifications to you.
Marv
Thanks again.
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You are most welcome, Marv.
Comment from BeasPeas
So--the adventures of Russ continue as he hopes to continue to
get backing for his script. Again, well written and interesting,
clear. All chapters are inventive in their plots, spurring the
reader to come back to find out what will happen next time.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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So--the adventures of Russ continue as he hopes to continue to
get backing for his script. Again, well written and interesting,
clear. All chapters are inventive in their plots, spurring the
reader to come back to find out what will happen next time.
Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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Marilyn
Your review is my favorite part of any chapter. Thank you. You have a firm yet curious grasp of what I'm trying to convey.
I had to break this up into 2 chapters, making the description misleading.
Thanks for the rating.
Marv
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You're welcome. My pleasure.
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter. I don't think Charles actually tells all here, maybe the next chapter. The lines are quick and the scene moves along well. good work.
note:
Screenwriter, Russ dreams up a title for his latest script. When a producer hears it he/she tells Russ what his story [is about] without Russ having to say another word.
- maybe two missing words
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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A well written chapter. I don't think Charles actually tells all here, maybe the next chapter. The lines are quick and the scene moves along well. good work.
note:
Screenwriter, Russ dreams up a title for his latest script. When a producer hears it he/she tells Russ what his story [is about] without Russ having to say another word.
- maybe two missing words
Comment Written 12-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Thanks for reviewing and the compliments.
You're correct_Charles doesn't tell much of anything. He's just getting started. Chapter 30 is actually part I of a long chapter.
You're correct about the missing words, also. Is there a name for that_when you hear the words in your head but never type them? If you have a name for it, I hope it's charitable.
Thanks for the high rating.
Marv
Comment from Douglas Paul
Well it's always hard to come in on the later chapters of a story, but even so this held together pretty well. I like the conversational style of this, and you left me hanging with anticipation for the next chapter. I did not see any errors
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Well it's always hard to come in on the later chapters of a story, but even so this held together pretty well. I like the conversational style of this, and you left me hanging with anticipation for the next chapter. I did not see any errors
Comment Written 12-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Thanks for reviewing this chapter. I'm glad you like the conversational style and I hope your anticipation for the next chapter is worth it. No errors is comforting.
Thanks for the high rating.
Marv
