Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. Very nicely written. I love the ending about roasting the parrot and stitching his beak. You did a great job with this and it is fun to read.

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

Thank you for rating and read. It was also fun to write...

Tried to put as much images as I could into lines, and the sea is one of my favorite topics to write about... Thanks again... Bill

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Very pirate-haha. This was excellent, stayed in the pirate voice and a great variety of the pirate life revealed to us. The stanza about the parrot was quite funny. Should be a top contender in the contest.

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

Thank you for the read and review... your 'what is a tear is Excellent, Excellent!!

The parrot was borrowed and returned unharmed to Inspector Clouseau.

Thanks again... Bill

reply by frogbook on 08-Feb-2016

HaHa. That parrot.
And thank you so much for the compliments on What is a Tear.

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

This is a very piratey tale about a poor working terrorist trying to make a living. I just hope he doesn't silence the parrot permanently. The imagery in your poem is excellent. And I love all the rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings to you, Linda

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

Parrot was returned unharmed to Inspector Clouseau ...
I try and put as much imaginary as possible into the lines...
Thanks for contest wishes and once again thanks for reviewing... take care ... Bill

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Exceptional

Gar! This be a grand write, matey! Loved it!

LOL ... humorous and extremely well written with oodles of vivid imagery created for your reader. "Howling gales clobber me face" ... what a great image that is!
Strong rhyming and smooth flowing, this one was a delight to read.

Best wishes for the contest!

bichonfrisegirl aka Connie

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

Thank you beauty for the 6 and Great review... changed a few words to comply with rhyming code, but seems to still carry its bounce... maybe even better

Images I try and always use .../ every word I can...

Usually I sit on poem to let it simmer but since deadline nears pushed it out...

Thanks again for reading... William Hager

reply by bichonfrisegirl on 08-Feb-2016

Well your efforts paid off in spades. It's a fantastic write, William!

bichonfrisegirl aka Connie

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Very good and very well written, a great pirates tale for the prompt. great job on this and good luck to you. have yourself a wonderful day.

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

Thanks William for the nice review and good luck wishes.

It was fun to write and i'm enjoying the nice reviews... Tried to place as much imagery as possible into the lines...

Thanks again... hager

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Thanks for entering, Hager.

Excellent pirate cussing in the vernacular - such a rotter he's even considering shutting up his parrot, which I assume is perched on his shoulder, for good. Now, forcing innocents to walk the plank is acceptable, but cruelty to parrots is going too far. ;-)

I assume the 'CEC' will overlook the lack of rhyme in 1st 6 lines, but who knows?

Top rhymes elsewhere, including excellent slant rhymes.

Very entertaining.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray.


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 Comment Written 08-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

1st off Ray you handsome man, you... Thanks for creating contest... hoot to write.... it started out a bit darker, and once the rhyming thing was clarified it changed a bit... I had this guy sinking to the deep sands furbelow...

Stuff about the sea, I enjoy writing seems to flow a bit... I once read one of your's that Knocked my socks off [all of your are great] ... it was about jack the ripper or something like that... What talent you have...

I changed this a bit trying to comply with rhyming better.. the first 3 lines...
Parrot was borrowed from Inspector Clouseau, and returned unhurt....

thanks again Ray ...

The Pirate....Ben Gunn

reply by Domino 2 on 08-Feb-2016

Thanks for the great fun and head-swelling reply, hager.

Blimey, I'd forgotten that one myself, so thanks for reminding me - must have been 3 or 4 years ago under one of my previous pseudonyms, maybe 'Earl of Oxford'.

Cheers, mate. Ray

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

This contest has brought out some rollicking good yarns, and Shiver me Barnacles, here's another!

Starts off with a fairly exotic simile and continues to dazzle with the audacious temperament of aa pirate captain who remains unnamed.

Some inventive rhymes and certainly some inventive tidbits of piratobilia.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016

1st sorry for the delay in responding... had to change a bit, first few line to comply with rhyming rules, but it all seems to work...Had fun writing and replying to the nice reviews...

I always try and pack lots of images into my poetry as possible.

Thanks for your good luck wishes... You take care...

ps...The Pirates name is Ben Gunn............ hager