Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Spyglass reaches out oceans blue,
business at hand, coming into view.
Ready mates? Light the fuse.
Cannon #1... Fire, then reuse!
Blast those bastards to smithereens,
then feed Queen's men to the sardines."

Wonderful exciting poetry, Bill. Blessings, Bob

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

Bob you Handsome man, you... Hope all is good and ducks are quacking and happy...

Had a bit a fun writing this and seemed to flow pretty good... Anyway you take good care, and thanks once again for stopping by, and the 6... Bill

reply by Mastery on 13-Feb-2016

I am down with Pnuemonia, Bill. Off my feet for a while ...that includes reviewing and writing, I'm afraid. Take care. Bob

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016

Get better Bob... take care...

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Great use of vernacular and portrayal of "attitude" :-)
You kept whiplashing me back and forth between
"wanna be" and "for real privateer" - LOL
I think there is a bit of both in here!

Entertaining read :-)

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Hi there.... 1st thanks for the review, sorry took a bit to respond....

Yes this guy you only saw on his good day... the other stuff i had to discard cause word count.

But this was fun to write, and I'm glad you were entertained... you have a grand evening and thanks once again... hager

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

I like the way you used a sort of "flow of consciousness" technique to following along with the pirate's thinking. You used, what seemed to me to be, very authentic language and subject matter. The story flowed, and it was appealing. Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

ya be, i means, I be pleasured, by yar reviews at me Rhonda, you beautiful creature.

Enough... Thanks for enjoying this little travel documentary, and tour. I had a bit more written but had to cut it out.. at 1st I had this guys surrounding and situations a bit more dark , but had trouble pacing the rhyme... Anyway, you have a grand evening and thanks agin for yur review.... Regards... hager

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is both well written and amusing. Love the language. I found the idea of a pirate wearing 'sunscreen now melting' - must have been a very precious pirate LOL. Good opening couplet - 'Murderous waves ride me like an auburn strumpet, mutineer pees, in me drinking bucket.' Both metaphor and simile featured here, together with good humour. Really good work throughout and a good ending -

Me parrot chatters, curses and mumbles, bout me loot and map.
Swine Polly yak's too much crap.
I'm thinking of roasting and stitching the beak,
of that gossiping jibber jabbering, rattle trap creep.


Life's grand...

'Cept', them thar those, that meets me... first hand.


Excellent - if I had a 6 left you'd have been given it. Warm regards and good luck - Dorothy

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank you thank you... Had fun writing this and found your review to be just Grand. At some point I had to whittle this down as I had this poor sap doing all kind of stuff, but had to stay within word count... believe it or not I have no idea what a simile and metaphor are... its just how I write.... I looked it up once and got confused, so I just left it alone, some one once said that I was a master of the double entendre... I would have to agree to the entendre part as I do write with lots of double meanings, hidden from view... Loved your review and wishes, thanks for all that you wrote... take care.. Regards....Bill.... hager

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

We have a National Speak Like a Pirate Day in UK for fun. This would qualify for a place in the desperate annals of piracy if only for the possessive "me". An unpleasant bit of fun to meet on the high seas me hearty. Shiver me timbers and other pillage.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank you for reviewing and ya comments bout me poems. Ben funs to write me journal, taken from me log book, from days gone by.... Thanks... Ben Gunn.... hager

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

Haha. Lol. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear anonymous! I love the accent of the pirate, it paints a welcome picture.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank you for reviewing, glad you came aboard this ships adventures at sea...The things I's puts up with, just to get ahead... take cares... hager

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

There are those who sail the seven seas, at night, while peeing in their pants. They think they are great until their dinner regurgitate. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thanks you b I whose tales you did read, sorry did knots mean ta makes yaz pee.


Thanks for reviewing comments... take care...and Good Morning......... hager

reply by c_lucas on 09-Feb-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from Jeffers63

Excellent

thanks for this fine entry into the Pirate contest, this is fun and the form is great I really love how you have old your with vivid words that make us want more.
Good luck.

Regards
Jeffers63

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

More? Trust me I got more... had to whittle this thing down... I had him sinking to the bottom, riding an anchor to the bottom and everything else I could imagine, but needed to stay within 180 word thing... and I always try to add images with everything... might want to check out Mrs. Doubtfire in my profile... just for fun...

Thanks for your observations and comments... take care... hager

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A veritable swash buckling poetic verse if I ever saw one. You should rate this one Rrrrr. Good art work to enhance your poem.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank DonandVicki for this nice review. It was a bit of fun to write, pulling words from all over the place, whittling here and there... all the long trying to create this guy world... you take care... Regards... hager

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Very interesting life of a grumpy pirate who robs,steals and kidnaps. Theme of poem is interesting--one of boldness, bragging and ego tripping. Overall a jolly happy tone. liberty justice.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Rob, steal... no, no no, this pirate is just watching seals and enjoying the ocean, while his mate's do gymnastics He follows the other boats just to protect them...

anyway, thanks Liberty for the nice review of this bloke... take care... hager

reply by Liberty Justice on 09-Feb-2016

Thanks dear poet friend.
You are so comical.