Comment from William Ross

Excellent

I like this, very good great thought a wonderful entry in the prompt very playful and fun. Good luck and have a wonderful day ahead for you.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016

Thank you for review and comments. I still dip in the same creek each spring.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I love this. It painted a delightful picture in my mind, and the photo is perfect. I'm sorry I have only five stars to give.

This reminds me of how one summer my youngest granddaughter and I chased a stick in the gutter for blocks. It rained so hard we had to run sometimes to keep up with it. We both ended up cold and wet despite all our rain gear. It was one of the best times we had. 8-)

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016

Thank you for your memory. The creek still runs through my backyard, and every spring thaw I still dip my toes in it until they are numb.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Looks like a winner to me, Annie. Very well constructed 5-7-5 here. The idea itself is a wonderful set of images and makes me crave spring as well as my youth when I could do such things in a stream. LOL...Blessings and good luck in the contest. Bob

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thanks for reviewing. The creek still runs through my backyard, and I still dangle my toes in it come springtime.

Comment from Kaydoe

Excellent

Cute little poem that brings a smile to your face. Love the picture and it brings memories back to me; playing in the creek in the woods. The 5-7-5 poetry criteria has been met.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Thank you. That creek still runs through the backyard and I still love to wade in it.

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

A sweet 5/7/5, AnnieDawn! Loved the picture. Invokes nice memories of childhood and wading through a creek until numbed. :) You managed to say a fair bit in just 17 syllables.

Best wishes for the contest!

bichonfrisegirl aka Connie

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks for your review and kind comments.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

When we were children it was the best treat we could have to walk bare feet through shallow water. It was never too cold at the time. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks for your review and kind comments.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A good 5/7/5 poem - good words and so true - all children love to splash about, even in small puddles. Lovely picture and well displayed. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks for your review and kind comments.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

A gorgeous photo of a tiny girl, walking through a creek with bare feet, her toes get numb. Original subject, dot on syllable count. I'd make Ripples without a capital. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thank you. I made the change. I appreciate the input.

Comment from Larissa B

Good

Good imagery painted in this little poem. The real challenge in writing a short piece is to still come up with a strong punch. This one is lovely, but leaves me with a sense of -- so what-- at the end. Like it was part of a longer poem, cut short to fit the contest requirements.

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 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks for your input. I guess what I can do is try to rearrange the wording on the last line. I may not do these short ones any more as I am beginning to think I just "don't get it" for them to be actual 5-7-5 poems.I appreciate your time.

Comment from teols2016

Excellent

A nice little piece about springtime. It's something to help me look forward to warmer weather and less snow. You use the little this format allows to its fullest to create a vivid image of the creek and the child in it. Well done.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks. The creek still runs through the backyard.