Christine's Poems
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
SO VERY true although I would add it is written from the heart and filtered by the soul so that is rests peacefully on the page. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
SO VERY true although I would add it is written from the heart and filtered by the soul so that is rests peacefully on the page. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Hi Monica thanks so much for your great review, sorry for delay in response but have had no internet connection for about 4 days so just back online today. I meant every word of this poem always from the heart With many Christine😀
Comment from pharp
Christine,
You have succeeded in saying a whole lot my dear with this simple, yet profound three line poem. Nothing can be truer than this message. The poem is so clear and meaningful. Thanks so much for sharing and the very best to you in the contest.
Blessings...........................Portia
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
Christine,
You have succeeded in saying a whole lot my dear with this simple, yet profound three line poem. Nothing can be truer than this message. The poem is so clear and meaningful. Thanks so much for sharing and the very best to you in the contest.
Blessings...........................Portia
Comment Written 13-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thanks Portia always lovely to hear from you and your kindness is always appreciated . A short sharp but true 3 liner so glad you thought so too Hugs and Cheers Christine. Hope you are going well 😀
Comment from Leineco
I really like the thought you put into this poem :-)
but I'm wondering if simplifying it might sharpen in.
The use of both writers and written in such close proximity seems
like "padding".
Just for consideration, I thought I'd offer this alternative wording :-)
What is a poem?
Creativity with words
penned by heart and soul
:-) Just a thought :-)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
I really like the thought you put into this poem :-)
but I'm wondering if simplifying it might sharpen in.
The use of both writers and written in such close proximity seems
like "padding".
Just for consideration, I thought I'd offer this alternative wording :-)
What is a poem?
Creativity with words
penned by heart and soul
:-) Just a thought :-)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
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Hi Lenico Thanks for your review and suggestions but this time I will keep it as. I appreciate your help and I do like that, but This is what I wanted to write . I really do value your opinion with Cheers Christine😃
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:-)
As always - the author's intentions rule!
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Thanks for understanding Cheers
Comment from MacMhuirich
I need to agree with you on this, as a real luddite when it comes to form, pentameters and other technical stuff, I write it as I feel it. You have expressed a lot in a few words and I thank you for sharing this. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
I need to agree with you on this, as a real luddite when it comes to form, pentameters and other technical stuff, I write it as I feel it. You have expressed a lot in a few words and I thank you for sharing this. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 11-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
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Thank you John. yes the simpler the better sometimes and this is exactly how I felt at the time. Win lose or draw it really doesn't matter to me , it's all in the fun of writing especially form the heart. I like good old honest, readable poetry LOL. Cheers Christine😀
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very true sentiment expressed here in this 3 line poem. There shouldn't be an apostrophe in writers though, grammatically speaking.
Other than that, nicely opened thought.
GMG
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
Hi there,
This is a very true sentiment expressed here in this 3 line poem. There shouldn't be an apostrophe in writers though, grammatically speaking.
Other than that, nicely opened thought.
GMG
Comment Written 10-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
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Hi GMG Thank for reading my poem and review .I have taken out the apostrophe. I meant to do that before but thankful to be reminded. Yes A simple statement but I hope so teue for most of us Cheers Christine 😃
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Chrissy - not easy to get a message over in just three lines but you have achieved this. And in addition you have written a philosophical piece. As you say a poem is anything a poet wants it to be. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, which I agree with. Good informative notes. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
Hi Chrissy - not easy to get a message over in just three lines but you have achieved this. And in addition you have written a philosophical piece. As you say a poem is anything a poet wants it to be. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, which I agree with. Good informative notes. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 10-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
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Hi Dorothy I thank you for your thoughts for my 3 liner . I am studying philosophy at the moment but I have always believed this statement and I am happy to share this with everyone here .Thanks for your good luck wishes . Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from kiwisteveh
Chrissy, can I be frank and say that I don't think this will win any prizes? It fulfils the prompt requirements for form and it has a message as amplified by your notes, but it is slightly lacking in 'zing' and originality.
You need to remove the apostrophe from writers...
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
Chrissy, can I be frank and say that I don't think this will win any prizes? It fulfils the prompt requirements for form and it has a message as amplified by your notes, but it is slightly lacking in 'zing' and originality.
You need to remove the apostrophe from writers...
Steve
Comment Written 10-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
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Hi Steve. Thanks and I don't mind your frankness at all. I wrote this in response to a review I had about my style for a poem I had written and when I saw this contest this is how I felt at the time. I really don't care if I win lose or draw . I just needed to say this as my statement. I will remove the apostrophe Thanks for that and I do appreciate your feedback. Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Christine
= Excellent 3-liner entry.
= Love the whirlwind artwork.
= LOL ... sort of like a writer they let their muse run amok!
= Good luck in the contest.
*Cheers & Blessings...*
Keep Smilin'... Jackie (*>*) Jax
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
Hi, Christine
= Excellent 3-liner entry.
= Love the whirlwind artwork.
= LOL ... sort of like a writer they let their muse run amok!
= Good luck in the contest.
*Cheers & Blessings...*
Keep Smilin'... Jackie (*>*) Jax
Comment Written 10-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
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Hi Jax .thanks for your review and I thought I would give this a try and this is what I came up with. Yes I thought the image reminded my of a swirling thought cThanks for your good lick wishes and Cheers as always . Christine😃
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi Chrissy. :)) Totally agree with your sentiment a poem is a poem is a poem and like every other artistic endeavour there are forms, scales, keys, shades to follow but improvisation is also good.
And always poetry is as beauty, in the eye of the beholder.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
Hi Chrissy. :)) Totally agree with your sentiment a poem is a poem is a poem and like every other artistic endeavour there are forms, scales, keys, shades to follow but improvisation is also good.
And always poetry is as beauty, in the eye of the beholder.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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Hi gloria, I am glad you agree it is what one writes and as a reader one either like it or not no big deal. But I am sure everyone writes with heart and soul despite the style. I have my favourite style but I do enjoy other work as well. Thanks for your reciew and best wishes Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Dean Kuch
Absolutely, Chrissy, and we should allow NO ONE to try to dictate to us how we "should" express ourselves with what we write--whether we prefer writing poetry or prose.
Well said...
Dean~~>
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
Absolutely, Chrissy, and we should allow NO ONE to try to dictate to us how we "should" express ourselves with what we write--whether we prefer writing poetry or prose.
Well said...
Dean~~>
Comment Written 09-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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Hi Dean . Totally agree and I will write how I chose to and I will conform to pressure fro the so called 'experts' although I do appreciate some helpful tips and have often made changes to improve a poem based on a reviewers advice. But blatent nastiness is not on at all. So I will just keep on keeping on LOL As always Cheers stay smiling Christine😃