Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

This is different from your usual, Tom. Grim, wry irony.

Cleanse the detritus.
Tidy up a bit.... good, pithy refrain to tie up the stanza with.

Just sayin'!

Happy New Year, friend.

Sonali

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016

Hi Sonali. Yes, I thought I'd try some more cryptic free verse of political satire for a change.

reply by Selina Stambi on 05-Jan-2016

Cryptic all right, Tom! Not going to touch on the theological aspect of things ... :) :)

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Heard you loud and clear.
An unusual and unexpected subject but obviously one you are passionate about.
Very thoughtful and thought provoking.
It's great to give our thoughts free reign.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016

Thank you Shirkey. Definitely not my usual fare.

Comment from amada

Excellent

Interesting piece, very interesting. Very well written with strong words and sentiments. I don't know if there is a metaphor on it, it makes me think. Just sayin'

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016

Thank you Amada. That is what I wanted to do. Get people to think.

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

You pull no punches here. A poem that really does make you stop and think. So much uncomfortable truth in it. The short lines add impact and the conversational tone is a perfect foil for the satire. I wouldn't mind seeing this one go viral on the internet. Here are six stars to get it started!

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you Tony. I am most please you like spud it. I wasn't sure how people would react. The stars are most welcome.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

That is what many think. If you are not like them or they don't like you, you are trash and they think people are disposable. You conveyed your message well.

Teresa

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you Teresa. So true.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Trash piles up and we need to clean up and take out the trash. Monday's are trash collection day here, and we make sure all trash is put out for collection.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you Sandra. Monday is here too.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Who is Hiller? Or was that supposed to be Hitler? If so I m not sure he is a very politically correct example, lol. I thoroughly concur with the sentiments behind this piece of free verse.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thanks Pantygynt. That was supposed to be Hitler.

reply by Pantygynt on 04-Jan-2016

I thought it probably was.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I agree with thee message in this post. Why would we allow others to come into our homeland and let them destroy what we cherish. Good luck in the contest. Blessings, Patricia

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you Patricia. I am sure we wouldn't like it.

Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

I thought that this was a well written piece, treischel. I liked how you wrote it and I thought that your words flowed smoothly. You drew me in and you held my interest, I couldn't find any faults. Thanks for sharing...Jacob

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you Hacob.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. I like this free verse. You certainly make a point with this one. It has been true since the beginning of time; if you want a land just take it. Good work

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you pretty bluebirds.