A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Music "Assorted poems of love
31 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a wonderful contest entry you have penned. I love the wording you used in this work. It made it sound so romantic or it could be romantic. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
This is a wonderful contest entry you have penned. I love the wording you used in this work. It made it sound so romantic or it could be romantic. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
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Thank you, sweetie, for this lovely review :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Well done, Missy. Once again, I marvel at your writing and how far you've come in a very short amount of time. Yours is the first I've read with this "Picture This" challenge. It's very fun to compare the differences.
Wonderful ending:
"Let's pause ...reflect
Find our harmony
Then, create our
Masterpiece"
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
Well done, Missy. Once again, I marvel at your writing and how far you've come in a very short amount of time. Yours is the first I've read with this "Picture This" challenge. It's very fun to compare the differences.
Wonderful ending:
"Let's pause ...reflect
Find our harmony
Then, create our
Masterpiece"
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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Thank you, sweetie. I am sorry so late with this reply...Not feeling to well, at the moment.
Missy
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Sorry you're under the weather. Hope it's nothing too serious.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Missy,
Here's the dilemma... I only had one six to give you... the thought in between the workings of this full flavoured banquet, prepared with all the best of ingredients certainly did linger the longest... like when you've just tasted something that spikes the mind to say..."MMMMMM, I like some more of that!"
One could interpret the intention on many more levels of what it takes to create a Masterpiece and with what spin... all the way from love of an individual all the way to that of humanity... yeah, did I give the wrong one my six? Naah, they both deserve one.
Ahhhhhh, it was so close, I really loved the depth of this exceptional poem... hell, I'm sitting here still and re-reading it... that sorta tells ya?
With our thoughts we create,
the depth of tone,
James vx's.
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
Hi Missy,
Here's the dilemma... I only had one six to give you... the thought in between the workings of this full flavoured banquet, prepared with all the best of ingredients certainly did linger the longest... like when you've just tasted something that spikes the mind to say..."MMMMMM, I like some more of that!"
One could interpret the intention on many more levels of what it takes to create a Masterpiece and with what spin... all the way from love of an individual all the way to that of humanity... yeah, did I give the wrong one my six? Naah, they both deserve one.
Ahhhhhh, it was so close, I really loved the depth of this exceptional poem... hell, I'm sitting here still and re-reading it... that sorta tells ya?
With our thoughts we create,
the depth of tone,
James vx's.
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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LOL . Thank you, James. You know I will gladly take whatever you think this merits. Sorry so late responding. Sick at the moment. My conscience got on me this morning.
Missy
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Yeah consciences have a way of doing that... you know gnawing away at us and making us feel, well, less than we should when circumstance say otherwise... my only wish... a speedy recovery, so you're back to your bouncy-smiley self... vx's.
Comment from pbroussard209
You did an awesome job with matching your words to the picture. I love anything to do with music. My grandmother was a pianist, she also taught piano and organ. I, who was born with out rhythm, never really learned how to play. I used to drive my grandmother crazy, as I could not keep time.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
You did an awesome job with matching your words to the picture. I love anything to do with music. My grandmother was a pianist, she also taught piano and organ. I, who was born with out rhythm, never really learned how to play. I used to drive my grandmother crazy, as I could not keep time.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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LOL. I am delighted you enjoyed this contribution to the "Picture This" challenge. Feeling like poop today but I hate copy and past responses so just know that I am very thankful.
Missy
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Missy.
Am I mistaken or did you write two poems for this post? Doesn't matter because I like this one, too. Harmony is the key to happiness. Good job.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
Hi Missy.
Am I mistaken or did you write two poems for this post? Doesn't matter because I like this one, too. Harmony is the key to happiness. Good job.
Marilyn
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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Hi Marilyn, Yes ma'am, I did. Thank you for reading and reviewing both sweetie.
Missy
Comment from l.raven
HI Missy, I will check in on some of them...I love your poem about the music and the piano keys...so very nicely written...and I so love the challenge picture...Luff Linda xxoo love
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
HI Missy, I will check in on some of them...I love your poem about the music and the piano keys...so very nicely written...and I so love the challenge picture...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 05-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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I really hate to do this but because I am ill at the moment and have so many to reply to I am gonna copy and paste this generic and unsatisfactory reply to all my lovely reviews. Please forgive me.
Missy
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Nothing to forgive sweet girl...you just take care and get better my friend....you are in my prayers...God Bless..Linda xxoo
Comment from I am Cat
Wait a minute... didn't I already review a different poem for this challenge?
I'm so confused. lol
this wasn't it though. Tell me I'm not going nuts, Missy. Seriously... I reviewed a poem for you for this... and told you how much I love this artwork... but THIS wasn't the poem. hmmmm....
this is nice, but I liked the other one better... odd. lol
yeah, I just went and looked... one is called, Music, one is called Keys...
I thought I was seeing double. Clever way to get up the ladder faster, girlfriend. lol
;)
I'm surprised more people didn't think of that. LOL
well done grasshopper. ;) LOL
I love a clever girl
mwah
Good luck
Cat
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
Wait a minute... didn't I already review a different poem for this challenge?
I'm so confused. lol
this wasn't it though. Tell me I'm not going nuts, Missy. Seriously... I reviewed a poem for you for this... and told you how much I love this artwork... but THIS wasn't the poem. hmmmm....
this is nice, but I liked the other one better... odd. lol
yeah, I just went and looked... one is called, Music, one is called Keys...
I thought I was seeing double. Clever way to get up the ladder faster, girlfriend. lol
;)
I'm surprised more people didn't think of that. LOL
well done grasshopper. ;) LOL
I love a clever girl
mwah
Good luck
Cat
Comment Written 05-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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I really hate to do this but because I am ill at the moment and have so many to reply to I am gonna copy and paste this generic and unsatisfactory reply to all my lovely reviews. Please forgive me.
Missy
Comment from lightink
Now that's what I call synergy! Your poem is almost an immensely poetic version of the Yin Yang Symbol! I love the debt of this piece! Thank you for sharing yet another piano-related piece!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
Now that's what I call synergy! Your poem is almost an immensely poetic version of the Yin Yang Symbol! I love the debt of this piece! Thank you for sharing yet another piano-related piece!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Hugs, L. for this splendid review. Hey...when are you gonna tell me ya real name?
Missy
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Now! Jyoti! :)
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I will have to write this one down...what does it mean? It's lovely.
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It means light (of a candle) :)
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I love it!!
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Missy,
I am already out of six stars. How that happened I do not know. I have been waiting to read your poem. I couldn't imagine a more perfect picture. I have been having dreams about it. I was certain that you would have a beautiful love poem. You do have a lovely poem here. You created a masterpiece. I only wish I had a six. Thank you so much for sharing.
Blessings,
Darlene
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
Missy,
I am already out of six stars. How that happened I do not know. I have been waiting to read your poem. I couldn't imagine a more perfect picture. I have been having dreams about it. I was certain that you would have a beautiful love poem. You do have a lovely poem here. You created a masterpiece. I only wish I had a six. Thank you so much for sharing.
Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thanks, punkin. I will take that you enjoyed it as a 6er any day.
Missy
Comment from mfowler
This poem is another of your excursions into new imagery, this time 'set to music'. You utilise a consistent set of good metaphors to convey your meaning, centring on the opposites of black and white keys. Apart, the couple is only skimming the surface of possibility. Together, there is potential for a masterpiece (a fine end metaphor). I like the way you've laid this out, the invitation to 'play our song', the logic of uninspired music without both black and white elements participating, the final promise of what could be. As a free verse, romantic poem, this works very well and I enjoyed it both poetically and intellectually.
One small issue for me was the use of 'fine' in 'we play fine'. It's grammatically incorrect as 'fine' is an adjective, but is used here as an adverb. People do say that, but to me, that one word jarred among other very nicely expressed language. I'd simply change it to 'well'. It's not as 'in' as using 'fine' in that context (kind of modern-speak) but it is correct, and conveys the same meaning.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
This poem is another of your excursions into new imagery, this time 'set to music'. You utilise a consistent set of good metaphors to convey your meaning, centring on the opposites of black and white keys. Apart, the couple is only skimming the surface of possibility. Together, there is potential for a masterpiece (a fine end metaphor). I like the way you've laid this out, the invitation to 'play our song', the logic of uninspired music without both black and white elements participating, the final promise of what could be. As a free verse, romantic poem, this works very well and I enjoyed it both poetically and intellectually.
One small issue for me was the use of 'fine' in 'we play fine'. It's grammatically incorrect as 'fine' is an adjective, but is used here as an adverb. People do say that, but to me, that one word jarred among other very nicely expressed language. I'd simply change it to 'well'. It's not as 'in' as using 'fine' in that context (kind of modern-speak) but it is correct, and conveys the same meaning.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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I started to send this to you before posting...grrr. I wish I had. I do so love to get kudos from you. I will change the wording. :)
Thank you, Mark, for always being supportive, even when I want you to lay down your red pen and just love what I write...lol. You have made my writing better. All the while I was throwing hissy fits against you :) You are wonderful.
Always,
Missy
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To be truthful, Missy, I don't give as much specific advice to anyone as I do you. Two reasons. The way we started out was kind of voluntary mentor and learner, so I put more time in. You got past the sensitivity and began to improve rapidly and that leads to my second reason. Offering even one small specific piece of advice for a poem you've just written is way more successful than trying to get you working under some sort of teacher format. I have also made a point of not overblowing your work to make you feel good. Positives, yes, there is as much to learn from what you do well as there is what you don't get right. When you get a sixer, you'll know it's a good one. Mind you, the whole star system is so skewiff that you can get sixers for crap and be totally overlooked when you do a good one. (happens to me constantly)It's just like the teachers who give you an A because you're a nice kid and you behave. Anyways, you've come a long way in a short time. If there's anything I could suggest now towards your development would be to diversify. You've done that very well within the romantic poetry genre. Your imagery has become so much more daring and engaging. I think you need to look at darker shades maybe in that field eg love gone wrong, jealousy, life long love affairs (as in whole narratives), forbidden love etc. You probably have done some of that. This is purely off the top of my head.
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I have to give it to you, Mark. Some would have taken one look at my "sensitivity" and run for the hills...:) I think it's the tough Aussie in you and it doesn't hurt that your lovely wife has conditioned you...lol. Big hug for sticking with me, hon.
I will make note of your suggestions. Had my share of heartache.