2nd Time Around
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Part I, Chapter 3"A fight for life and truth.
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have enjoyed the read of the chapter, the mystic and crime taletelling, good progression of plot, realistic dialogues and real like characters, catchy beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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I like and have enjoyed the read of the chapter, the mystic and crime taletelling, good progression of plot, realistic dialogues and real like characters, catchy beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from AnnieDawn
I didn't see bland in this chapter at all. I saw very descriptive. Wow, but that was a scene. You are making this book one for the movies and I bet it is selected to be made into one. Great job on this chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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I didn't see bland in this chapter at all. I saw very descriptive. Wow, but that was a scene. You are making this book one for the movies and I bet it is selected to be made into one. Great job on this chapter.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you. I'm already casting Amy Adams in the lead role. ;) I just meant it is to be blander than the others because it is a reconstructed memory versus a vivid memory (future chapters explain that.)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oh, no, so quick to judge, this is show how cheap is human life for people who let themselves be guided by the opinion of others and condemn innocent people to such an awful death
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Oh, no, so quick to judge, this is show how cheap is human life for people who let themselves be guided by the opinion of others and condemn innocent people to such an awful death
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Agreed. Thank you.
Comment from aryr
Wow, great detail regarding the time frames, the procedures done. Since the previous chapter had shown Sarah years later, it was a natural assumption that something had gone wrong with her execution. Did it ever! Your writing made me feel as if I were sitting on the other side of the window watching this tragedy unfold. A great chapter, fantastic reading.
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Wow, great detail regarding the time frames, the procedures done. Since the previous chapter had shown Sarah years later, it was a natural assumption that something had gone wrong with her execution. Did it ever! Your writing made me feel as if I were sitting on the other side of the window watching this tragedy unfold. A great chapter, fantastic reading.
Comment Written 24-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thank you. I hoped the shock value (pardon my choice of words) was high.
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Again very welcome and yes it was more than high.
Comment from LisaD123
Wow! I'm hoping that chapters 1 and 2 are available because I'm new here and I hate playing catch up!! You have immense talent and this chapter is cleverly structured. The beginning hooks the reader and makes you want to read on. The description of Sarah's cell is elegantly written and helps build up the tension. The ending is handled superbly as it is not over-written and allows the reader space to process exactly what is happening. Very well done, indeed!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Wow! I'm hoping that chapters 1 and 2 are available because I'm new here and I hate playing catch up!! You have immense talent and this chapter is cleverly structured. The beginning hooks the reader and makes you want to read on. The description of Sarah's cell is elegantly written and helps build up the tension. The ending is handled superbly as it is not over-written and allows the reader space to process exactly what is happening. Very well done, indeed!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thank you. The entire book is up, if you're interested. I truly appreciate your support and your stars.
Comment from trumby
very well written. Do you have some sort of a personal knowledge of electric chair executions?
I have no idea how you got all this background info on the process, but I'm very impressed with what you've done.I thought that there'd be a process that keeps these sorts of secrets as a ......well......secret.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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very well written. Do you have some sort of a personal knowledge of electric chair executions?
I have no idea how you got all this background info on the process, but I'm very impressed with what you've done.I thought that there'd be a process that keeps these sorts of secrets as a ......well......secret.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Believe it or not, Virginia authorities actually hold their cards very close to their vests when it comes to execution protocols. But it's similar in every state that has once or still has used the chair. This came from a lot of research and some common sense. Thank you for your time and for finding this to be authentic. Considering I based this book somewhat on a real case, I strive to be realistic.
Comment from foxangie123
Okay, I would take out the turn it on part. I would do something like a countdown as in three, two, one, execute. I think this would be more life like for the reader. The 1912 information was a clever nd truthful touch. Reeled fm in now...
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Okay, I would take out the turn it on part. I would do something like a countdown as in three, two, one, execute. I think this would be more life like for the reader. The 1912 information was a clever nd truthful touch. Reeled fm in now...
Comment Written 22-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Thank you. I'm not sure what the protocol is exactly, though I know the warden gives a signal tfor the executioner to essentially turn on the chair's electric current and a second signal to go ahead and execute the condemned. I'll look into this.
Comment from damommy
Of course, it is very gripping. You did an excellent job describing an execution. Right down to the smallest detail.
It just dawned on me that you don't use photos of any kind. I guess it would be hard to do with this story. 8-)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Of course, it is very gripping. You did an excellent job describing an execution. Right down to the smallest detail.
It just dawned on me that you don't use photos of any kind. I guess it would be hard to do with this story. 8-)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Thank you ver much. I like capturing a reader's attention. Just don't fall off the edge of that seat please.
Comment from chcbeck
Even though you knew Sarah was telling the story in the beginning.. you still were not a hundred per cent sure that Sarah wasn't even going to get executed.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Even though you knew Sarah was telling the story in the beginning.. you still were not a hundred per cent sure that Sarah wasn't even going to get executed.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Thank God. I was worried my self-imposed format would ruin that tension. My intention had been to have readers wonder how exactly she would get out of this, but this is better. Thanks again.
Comment from lionheart9772101
I enjoyed being in that cell with Sarah. The author did a fine job of setting the scene. I was particularly struck by Sarah's admission of guilt when she said she was sorry, although we know that she is actually free and very much alive in the opening paragraphs. So my curiosity has been peeked to know exactly how these turn of events occurred. There were just a few grammar issues which kept me from bestowing a five-star rating. Even so, I look forward to reading more of this story.
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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I enjoyed being in that cell with Sarah. The author did a fine job of setting the scene. I was particularly struck by Sarah's admission of guilt when she said she was sorry, although we know that she is actually free and very much alive in the opening paragraphs. So my curiosity has been peeked to know exactly how these turn of events occurred. There were just a few grammar issues which kept me from bestowing a five-star rating. Even so, I look forward to reading more of this story.
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you. Any heightened curiousities are very welcome.
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I've made some grammatical improvements...I hope.
