2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "First Morning Light"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
15 total reviews
Comment from TallySally
My top New Year's resolution is to spend more time watching the lake. Your poem says it all. Simple, profound. The best time is early. Most folks don't even look, or they look too late.
Thanks for confirmation.
God bless and all my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2015
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My top New Year's resolution is to spend more time watching the lake. Your poem says it all. Simple, profound. The best time is early. Most folks don't even look, or they look too late.
Thanks for confirmation.
God bless and all my best,
Relda
Comment Written 31-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2015
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thank you Relda, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my haiku. :) happy new year!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great haiku. I really like the last line 'early bird special.' Good job with the color choices, too. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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This is a great haiku. I really like the last line 'early bird special.' Good job with the color choices, too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from pbroussard209
Okay let me add, now that I am older I often find myself awake at sun rise. I really love to watch the night turn into day before my eyes. I used to set on my back porch and sip my coffee watching the sun rise, now my stinky dog has taken the porch over and well no matter how often I give him a bath he still stinks to high heaven. So, sitting out on the porch is no longer enjoyable.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Okay let me add, now that I am older I often find myself awake at sun rise. I really love to watch the night turn into day before my eyes. I used to set on my back porch and sip my coffee watching the sun rise, now my stinky dog has taken the porch over and well no matter how often I give him a bath he still stinks to high heaven. So, sitting out on the porch is no longer enjoyable.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from barkingdog
I guess the birds are up for breakfast as well as any early fishermen.
Love the 'a' assonance and rhyme of 'hazy rays'.
Nice 'l' consonance through out.
Happy New year, Gypsy!
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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I guess the birds are up for breakfast as well as any early fishermen.
Love the 'a' assonance and rhyme of 'hazy rays'.
Nice 'l' consonance through out.
Happy New year, Gypsy!
:) e
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you Ellen, Happy New Year to you too. I appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku, and your kind words.
Comment from Mastery
Very nice, Gypsy. You should have entered this in one of the Haiku contests. I think it is brilliant...especially the last line or satori as they call it. Good Luck with this and Happy New Year, my friend. Bob
ps. I am paying 1.20 for a new post of mine right now if you have time) Bob
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Very nice, Gypsy. You should have entered this in one of the Haiku contests. I think it is brilliant...especially the last line or satori as they call it. Good Luck with this and Happy New Year, my friend. Bob
ps. I am paying 1.20 for a new post of mine right now if you have time) Bob
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much my friend. I will go to your profile and check your new post. :) Happy New Year!
Comment from nancyjam
Lovely Haiku that presents a beautiful
scene to the reader.
I like the clever third line.
I can just picture the little birds scavenging
for food.
Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Lovely Haiku that presents a beautiful
scene to the reader.
I like the clever third line.
I can just picture the little birds scavenging
for food.
Nancy
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much Nancy. I appreciate you taking the time to review, and your kind words..
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Gypsy another good visual haiku.
To me it looks like some is going to catch a very good view of the sun raising over the lake.
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Hi Gypsy another good visual haiku.
To me it looks like some is going to catch a very good view of the sun raising over the lake.
Gert
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much for taking the time to review and for your kind words. :)
Happy New Year!
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Smiles Gypsy
Gert
Comment from AnnaLinda
Gypsy,
Hi! I loved this haiku! You entered it in a contest and had lots of
reviews, right? What happened to it? I remember you had a
gorgeous sunrise to go with it.
This haiku is creative and sends wonderful imagery where no
photo is needed. Love the satori as well.
Linda
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Gypsy,
Hi! I loved this haiku! You entered it in a contest and had lots of
reviews, right? What happened to it? I remember you had a
gorgeous sunrise to go with it.
This haiku is creative and sends wonderful imagery where no
photo is needed. Love the satori as well.
Linda
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Hi Linds, I had a lot of poems in books and I wanted to get rid of some and keep some. I also deleted a bunch of my old poems and stories that were terrible- Just letting go of the old ready for the new year. Well, in the process of my cleaning, I deleted a bunch of poems that I really like. I had a back up copy for the words but not the pictures. Oh well, it happens. (((sadness)))
Thank you very much for taking the time to review and for your kind words. :)
Happy New Year!
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Gypsy...Good for you in clearing out the past...I had to add that line to my last poem as the form was incorrect...would help to read the directions...lol...Are you sure they are not sitting in disabled or something?
What a pity, don't forget after the first of the year is a better time to do that as those poems may have counted toward your ranking this year.
Linda
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I contacted Tom and he is going to undo my deletes but I have to start all over. I will wait for next month, you and my friend Cat suggested the same. :)
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Good...:)
Comment from I am Cat
Very nice... (you should have kept it for after the first when all the rankings are reset) ;)
Hugs and love to you my sweet Sister Gypsy! Mwah
Sister Cat
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Very nice... (you should have kept it for after the first when all the rankings are reset) ;)
Hugs and love to you my sweet Sister Gypsy! Mwah
Sister Cat
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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I don't understand-when all the ranking are reset- do you mean you loose the old year's poems and stories?
Thank you very much for taking the time to review Sister Cat :) ((((gypsy love))))))
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no, you don't lose them... but you start over... what you've posting now doesn't count toward the rankings anymore... they are set. you'll have to post six come the first of January (just like when you joined) to come in at a rank again. ;) We all start from the bottom again. lol every year it does that.
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oh! Okay, that is a bummer, but I guess it prevents writers from becoming semigods LOL
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's also a very lovely and well composed haiku, Gypsy.
It has all of the necessary elements which makes haiku successful. A 4-8-5 syllabic count, well within the 17 syllables required for haiku, stark imagery, two grammatically interconnected lines, a kigo, or seasonal reference, which, while not stated specifically, alludes to early autumn, given the mists rising off of the lake, and a clever satori which sums it all up quite nicely.
Well done.
~Dean
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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It's also a very lovely and well composed haiku, Gypsy.
It has all of the necessary elements which makes haiku successful. A 4-8-5 syllabic count, well within the 17 syllables required for haiku, stark imagery, two grammatically interconnected lines, a kigo, or seasonal reference, which, while not stated specifically, alludes to early autumn, given the mists rising off of the lake, and a clever satori which sums it all up quite nicely.
Well done.
~Dean
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much Dean, I appreciate you taking the time to review my kaiku :) (((((gypsy hugs)))))
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It's always a pleasure to review your work, Gypsy. You are more than welcome.
~Dean ;}