2nd Time Around
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Part I, Chapter 1"A fight for life and truth.
19 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Part 1, Chapter 1 in the book, speaks a fiery matter and how the bravest firefighters go to work for the job put in a good description of taletelling, fostered by progressive plot development, good, realistic and contributory thematic dialogues, mystery and crime fiction ends with fire yet to be fully extinguished; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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This Part 1, Chapter 1 in the book, speaks a fiery matter and how the bravest firefighters go to work for the job put in a good description of taletelling, fostered by progressive plot development, good, realistic and contributory thematic dialogues, mystery and crime fiction ends with fire yet to be fully extinguished; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from AnnieDawn
A great beginning on your book. The rescue was action packed and interesting. This book will be even more interesting to me as my granddaughter is into fire fighting and in school for it. I will follow your lady fire fighters. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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A great beginning on your book. The rescue was action packed and interesting. This book will be even more interesting to me as my granddaughter is into fire fighting and in school for it. I will follow your lady fire fighters. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Business as usual, between jokes, training and some firefighting fires, the Team is like a family that care and protect each other. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Business as usual, between jokes, training and some firefighting fires, the Team is like a family that care and protect each other. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you kindly.
Comment from aryr
Your descriptions of Truck 29s crew was very thorough and well appreciated. It was a good introduction to a good team.
The fire itself was presented in such a way that I felt the heat, saw the devastation, felt the anxiety and fear.
The details given of the fatal fall was outstanding-proof of either great research or first hand knowledge. And the rescue was above and beyond. Not just 29s team but all the teams worked well together. Gotta run to the next chapter. Thanks good job.
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Your descriptions of Truck 29s crew was very thorough and well appreciated. It was a good introduction to a good team.
The fire itself was presented in such a way that I felt the heat, saw the devastation, felt the anxiety and fear.
The details given of the fatal fall was outstanding-proof of either great research or first hand knowledge. And the rescue was above and beyond. Not just 29s team but all the teams worked well together. Gotta run to the next chapter. Thanks good job.
Comment Written 24-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thank you. Welcome aboard.
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welcome
Comment from logan3m
Great writing! I love the way you describe the characters, even going into their past careers and relationships. Keep up the good work! God bless.
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Great writing! I love the way you describe the characters, even going into their past careers and relationships. Keep up the good work! God bless.
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Thank you. I appreciate your time and review.
Comment from DonandVicki
A fun continuation to you mystery story, You keep the reader interested all the way through the tale. I like your style of character development.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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A fun continuation to you mystery story, You keep the reader interested all the way through the tale. I like your style of character development.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from jmdg1954
This is the first "firefighters" story I believe I've read here on FanStory. It kept me interested from the beginning. It all seems authentic to me. I'm not a firefighter so I'd really have no clue. (I don't mean that rudely).
Keep up the good work.
John
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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This is the first "firefighters" story I believe I've read here on FanStory. It kept me interested from the beginning. It all seems authentic to me. I'm not a firefighter so I'd really have no clue. (I don't mean that rudely).
Keep up the good work.
John
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thank you. I'm not a firefighter either, so this is all based on research and some common sense to fill in the gaps. I've been told it's accurate though.
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Good work!
Comment from damommy
Starting right off with a lot of excitement! Great!
I'm glad to have reading material again. 8-)
This is a great story, and I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Starting right off with a lot of excitement! Great!
I'm glad to have reading material again. 8-)
This is a great story, and I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Thank you. This is the beginning of "2nd Time Around", aka Sarah's story.
Comment from Ckid26
I am really enjoying the story so far. The story is moving fast enough to captivate people, but not so fast that people are confused on how they got there. I like the exciting atmosphere you have created that makes you want to keep reading.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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I am really enjoying the story so far. The story is moving fast enough to captivate people, but not so fast that people are confused on how they got there. I like the exciting atmosphere you have created that makes you want to keep reading.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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Thank you. Plenty more chapters are up and feedback on any one of them is welcome. I appreciate your support.
Comment from JTStone
It's a good story, well written--though a few too many commas and not enough periods. I don't worry too much about that though when I like the content.
You did an outstanding job of introducing the characters. The action started out with a perfect flow, though it started to get choppy toward the end of the rescue. Not that it wasn't good still, it just seemed like you started rushing when you were writing it. (We all do...)
Your banter between the friends was cool/ You seemed to like the word smirk, you should try to mix it up. A little variety goes a long way.
Good action piece though, so don't take the criticism to harshly, just trying to be helpful.
JT
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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It's a good story, well written--though a few too many commas and not enough periods. I don't worry too much about that though when I like the content.
You did an outstanding job of introducing the characters. The action started out with a perfect flow, though it started to get choppy toward the end of the rescue. Not that it wasn't good still, it just seemed like you started rushing when you were writing it. (We all do...)
Your banter between the friends was cool/ You seemed to like the word smirk, you should try to mix it up. A little variety goes a long way.
Good action piece though, so don't take the criticism to harshly, just trying to be helpful.
JT
Comment Written 19-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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Thank you. Maybe I do like to make people smirk. I'll look into that. Thanks again.